I liked that especially the parts with Harry in it! I dont know why I just like any fics with Harry as a baby!
I loved it, Jamie! The end was perfect in relation to the rest of the fic! I never had thought that it would happen so soon afterwards, though. Great job!
Author's Response: Thanks! *huggles* THanks for the great review!
Wow. What a mixture of humour and dark/angst! I really liked it, Jamie! It was definetely an interesting idea for a fic, almost a missing moment type thing.
Great work! I think my favorite parts are the little bits of humour, because it lightens up the mood so that when the dark stuff happens, it seems all the darker.
When you said, Harry, it's timed for bed. you accidently said timed instead of time.
Keep up the great writing!
Author's Response: Thanks, CJ! Yeah, I didn't really mean to put the humour in. I guess I just do that naturally because of my personality. My friends say that, anyways. *shrugs* Thanks for the great review! *huggles* ~Jamie~
Creepy!!!!!!!!!!!!! I really like this! ~MJ
Author's Response: Thanks. It was sort of meant to be creepy. Thanks again for the review!
Ooh ... wow! That was a really gripping version of Peter betraying the trust of the Potters and Sirius.
The sky was pitch-black. There was no moon. The trees stood tall and firm, letting small pools of light fall onto the ground. No one could have seen the small grey rat scurrying along the forest floor.
I simply love beginnings like this. They're both descriptive and suspense-filled, thus drawing the reader right into the story. I was starting to get worried, because I recognised who the rat was (as most readers would).
I like Voldemort and Peter's characterisation ... especially Voldemort's. You've portrayed him in all his dark and sinister glory ... those few dialogue paragraphs are really gripping to read, thanks to Voldy's cold nature.
"Halloween!" James sang as he waltzed into the kitchen were Lily and little baby Harry were. He picked up Harry, and started dancing around again. Harry started to giggle, and Lily smiled.
Ah ... a cute way to start a meeting of old friends. Speaking of cuteness, it's hard to find in a D/A fic ... which makes yours all the more memorable. *grins* On a serious note, too bad Wormtail had to interfere and spoil the gang's life entirely ...
Harry giggled at the look on Sirius's face, and reached his little arms up toward the man that always made him laugh the most (besides his daddy, of course).
Sirius picked Harry up, and carried him into the kitchen where his father was. "James, you have a monster for a son!" exclaimed Sirius.
Ah ... more cuteness. These paragraphs almost made me feel like jumping straight into the story and hug both of them really tight ... and wish that Harry had a better childhood before Hogwarts. But that's impossible ... *sighs*
A cloaked man strode up the walk of one hundred ninety-three Godric's Hollow. When he reached the porch, he took out his wand and unlocked the door. As he opened the door, he saw into the living room. Two people were staring at him, and he laughed his cruel, high-pitched laugh.
And finally ... this was an amazing ending. Even though I know what's going to happen next, I can't help gulping ... really, it's quite scary. I guess that's one of the reasons this fic is a dark one.
This fic is flawless in terms of spelling, grammar, characterisation, plot ... almost everything. But the formatting's kind of messed up - you need to remove the excessive break tags between each paragraph.
The story's short, yet fantastic. And definitely going into my favourites list. Well done!
Author's Response: Wow. Amazing review! Thankyouthankyouthankyouthankyou! I was sort of going for the cuteness to lighten it up, but it made it all the more sad and evil. You know what I mean. Thanks for the awesome review!