Hmm, this new kid intrigues me, perhaps I will have to read your other story.
This one is very good, I can see the friendhips slipping into something else, it is very subtle but it is there nonetheless.
Ah, teenage angst. I can only hope that Ron is being affected by some outside force and that he is not truly going to dump Hermione for Lavender.
Aah! Cliffhanger! I love the new chapter, though, and I'm really looking forward to reading more! =]
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!WHAT HAPPENED????????????Hurry with the next chapter!!
NNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOO not HARRY and hermione it is supposed to be RON and hermione!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: keep going keep going....this is h/hr, but i promise i won't disappoint you!!!!
Incredible. It gave me a chill. Also the way the words were conveyed to the reader was very nice. O_o
I love your story! It's really dark, but that's okay. I'm kinda worried about what's going to happen with Ron, though. =/ I can't wait for the next chapter! =D
Another great chapter. I just love how you've gotten first-person Harry right! *bounces around in excitement* I loved the "he can be such a girl" line. Erm - what else...? Oh! Yes, Ginny. I happen to think JK Rowling writes Ginny in a way that she comes out too good and too perfect and too wonderful - I actually think you wrote Ginny better... maybe it's the difference in circumstances in your story and JK's, but whatever it is, you did a great job!
Author's Response: thanks!!! everybody seems to think that he may be too dark, but i like the dark harry...it works!!!
Nice. I have to say that when I read a first-person fic in Harry's POV I always think Harry's slightly OOC (especially when I'm writing him :D) but you did an amazing, professional job of it. Harry sounded like... well - Harry! 10/10
I like your writing style. And the story is really interesting- depressing, but interesting- so far. I hope you update soon- I want to know more about the betrayal you described in your summary.
I like your introduction part to your story
Wow. Depressing start. 1st pov is tough sometimes, too, but you didn't slip at all. I definitely look forward to more.
Oh my gawd, it made me tear up. He shouldn't be alone but he probably will be and thats whats SOOOO sad. I loved it though. You need to go on with it!
Wow, very angsty, but I love it. It seems very clean cut, though in a good way. Spectacular writing. I can't wait to read the next chapters. Harry seems a little too morbid, but I suppose it works.
10/10
