does she kill him? who does she kiil? im bamboozled.
Author's Response: Or does he kill her? The ending is entirely up to you, my friend. Thank you for reading!
wow... that was extremely detailed and very well written. A+++
Author's Response: Thank you :)
So, she kills Lucius?
Author's Response: Does she? ;)
That was a wonderfully written story and I loved it! I've been looking for some good stories about Narcissa! =)
Author's Response: I'm glad I was able to provide you with one! Thank you very much for reading and reviewing!
Beautiful. It's so wonderful to see that Narcissa really is more than what she seems.
Author's Response: It is, isn't it? She's quite fascinating, if you spend time getting to know her in your imagination ;)
What a beautiful, and at the same time sad story! I love it. Narcissa is one of the characters in the books that I really want to know more about, and I love the way you presented her. I really enjoyed the mention of Andromeda and her kindness, it was just, (how do I explain it?)...well, I just really liked it! Thanks for the great story.
Author's Response: You're welcome! Thanks for the wonderful review!
this is incredible! how do you write like this?!?
Author's Response: Months of revising and unexpected bursts of creativity :) Thank you for reading!
I really enjoyed this fic, very good, well done
Author's Response: Thanks!
whoa.... that was interesting!! I loved how you divided it up into sections! Interesting how it was about only Narcissa, i haven't seen many of those!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it...thank you!
First of all I would just like to say: oh! my! bloody! god! that was just so...beautiful! i swear i've got the shivers. everything was just so perfect, it was amazing. i loved the way it seemed really poetic, and how it all just flowed together, spectacular! and the ending was just the best ever! "Oh, Narcissa, such a deceiver you were." *deep sigh* i'm completely speechless, i really don't know how to say how absolutely fabulous this fic is. completely flawless
right, i'm off. hope to read some more of your outstanding work!=)
Oh my Weird!! This story is amazing! No wonder it was featured! The details are fantastic, and your word usage was so strong that i had to get a dictionary for a couple of words!!! Good Job and Good luck to all your future stories! :)
Oooh, lovely! Your characterization of Narcissa was wonderful - it's great to see how she can control Lucius in her way and yet how she is controlled by him as well. And I loved seeing how breakable she seems and how strong she really is. Plus, your interpretation of the marriage and the relationship between Lucius and Narcissa was wonderful! Realistic and tragic, it was really sad how Narcissa wondered who loved whom and if there really was an love at all. An excellent character/relationship study, and the ending was brilliant! So thrilling, like a scary film or something... Really superb!
so...did she kill herself? or did she use the floo? I like the rhythym and pace of your words, although I find I was a little confused at times.
Kal, Kal, Kal! Iíve been wanting another fic from you for so long now, and then you come and deliver this. This masterpiece! Itís absolutely amazing. Where have you been hiding this? -thrusts into spotlight-
I donít even know where to start. I guess I could start with the subject. Youíve captured Narcissa and Lucius so well in this, Narcissa especially. The characterization is flawless. Iíve never been a huge fan of Narcissa in the Ďoh, I love this characterí sense, even though Iíve attempted to explore her in my writing before, but this piece really makes me think twice about her. Her entire life here seems soÖfragile. You conveyed everything perfectly. And I know youíll be cross with me for saying this, but your Narcissa is just on a completely different level than mine. Yours is exponentially better and real and developed.
Itís hard for me to pick out any favorite line, because it all fits incredibly well together. Itís like poetry, the way it flows. And then there is an imperceptible shift of her waist, so his hand is just so, so that the two of them fit without flaw. But this line stuck out at me at once, because itís just so lovely. It really embodies that idea of love, doesnít it? Yes, it does. Here, love seems almost too perfect, which is so appropriate for Narcissa and Lucius, I think. And then this: She wonders how she can love him. She wonders if she does. Youíre killing me, here, Kal. In, like, the best way. (Iím so ineloquent right now. And itís your fault for writing such a gorgeous fic. -blames-)
The rose imagery in this is positively lovely. I adore it. And how you (or Narcissa, you know) keep going back to them. -sigh- Beautiful. Oh, and the small story about the doll was also great. I liked the brief mention of Andromeda having a heart Ďtoo kind for her own good.í It just really shows the contrast between the Ďgoodí Blacks and the Ďbadí ones. And then: Even if she does not want to remember. Chilling. I love it. I love everything. Your writing is so delicate in this. Itís like itís reflecting the story, like water that I donít want to touch for fear of disrupting it. Itís just so pretty. Thereís no other word for it Ė I may or may not be jealous of your descriptive skills, because theyíre simply amazing.
And the end! Guh. So great. Itís haunting in this really beautiful way. I particularly loved the Ďgreen, green, greení in parentheses. Which reminds me. You know how much I love parentheses, and how much I somewhat overuse them, and so naturally, I loved your use of them. You put them in all the right places Ė not too many, just placed here and there with pieces of gold in them. Oh, and this, too: Oh, Narcissa, such a deceiver you were. Such a great end to the fic, and I forgot to mention before, but the idea of Draco being like Narcissa is superb as well. It makes me wonder if he ended up more like his mother or his father. And I guess while Iím throwing in random thoughts here at the end, Iíll say that Narcissa trying on the name Fawcett like she would a dress was perfect. Itís a bit of a throw-back to the idea of arranged marriages, where itís almost like you are just trying on names, people, husbands.
Okay, before I go on quoting the entire fic, Iíll just end here. But this was fabulous, Kalmeister. You have to keep writing this stuff, itís genius.
OMG Kal! It's soooo good to see a fic by you, I most certainly do not deserve to have such an awesome fic dedication. *dies*
The fic was amazing. You write Narcissa perfectly, so realistically and elegantly. I absolutely loved the thing with the roses, and how she takes one in the end, "Even if she does not want to remember." That was a really powerful line.
Ok, I won't start quoting all the cool bits, because there's way too many of them. The ending, however, I have to comment on. It was like the ending of a horor story. I almost expect him to jump up and go after her. *shudders* Very well-written.
Lucius is also really well-written. It took me a while to figure out who the fic was about, but I caught on before you actually said his name, which shows how good your characterization was.
Did I mention I loved the roses? And the whole thing with Andromeda and the doll, that was very touching.
Ooooh, another thing about the ending. I like how you didn't say what she did outright, you know, but you still made it really really obvious what happened.
*huggles teh Kal*
Thanks so much for a lovely read, hoping to see more lovely fics from you soon eh?
*goes off to re-read it*
Author's Response: *huggles* I'm so thrilled you like it!! It doesn't deserve you!
The ending, however, I have to comment on. It was like the ending of a horor story.
Hee! That's exactly what I was thinking of when I wrote it!
this was beautifully written, but i can't understand the story behind it? Maybe I'm just very slow.
Emma x x x
Author's Response: Thanks! The ending was intentionally left vague, but the one-shot really just explores the feelings Narcissa has for Lucius, a sort of "He loves me, he loves me not; I love him, I love him not."