Reviews For Sobs of a Child
Reviewer: HGPotter
Date: 07/19/07 1:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow. Beautiful.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: BeautifulDreamer07
Date: 06/06/07 17:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

I've reviewed this fic once before, but I feel that I must do so again. It is just that good. You've done a wonderful job with the second person POV. There aren't many authors who can pull that off and make it believable. It is simply wonderful and it really made me feel as if I was in the fic, experiencing those things. Chilling.

I also loved the descriptions. Everything is so vivid and so real. I felt everything as though it was me drinking the potion and seeing those memories.

Overall, I really enjoyed this fic (again!). You've done a great job making this feel real and tangible. Superb!

Hallie

Author's Response: Thank you again! I'm really glad you liked. It's probably my favorite out of all the fics I've written.

Reviewer: babekitty_92
Date: 06/06/07 7:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was so sad and heart-wrenching, I wanted to cry. The emotional factor was unbelievable, well done. :D

Author's Response: Thanks! I almost cried writing it.

Reviewer: Lady Granger
Date: 06/03/07 18:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow...I knew even thought about their being a reason behind Dumbeldore's shooting...terrific!

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.

Reviewer: Nicole17
Date: 05/22/07 17:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

hmm..very confusing and a little vague.

Author's Response: What are you confused about? This is the scene in the cave, where Dumbledore sees something horrible. In my fic, Dumbledore was reliving the moment where his mother was raped and murdered. Sorry you thought it was confusing. ~ Teresa

Reviewer: hpluver365
Date: 05/07/07 15:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

Oh My Godric! What amazing thoughts you intertwined into this fic! Give me a moment here, I need to ponder everything you said!

The first thing that came to mind was that I love reading fics of canon scenes from a different POV. This was a prime example of this type of fic. You did a great job keeping it canon and adding really interesting stuff that didn't make it boring.

Second, in the last part of the memory, when Aberforth is beaten, that could totally explain why he had no magical education, when Albus did. Maybe he had mental problems after the beating or something?

Overall, great writing, great ideas, great everything! The ideas for the flashbacks were very original and intriguing! Keep up the good work!

Author's Response: Thank you! I loved writing the flashback scenes. I always wondered what Dumbledore saw that night.

Reviewer: BeautifulDreamer07
Date: 05/06/07 16:44
Chapter: Chapter 1

*stares* Wow...that was really...creepy. It made me shiver and I had to go get a sweatshirt in the middle of it. Yikes...

Beautifully done though! Wow...one of the best fics I have ever read!

*hugs fellow Gryffie*
Hallie

Author's Response: Thanks! I was scared writing parts of it. I'm glad you liked it. ~ Teresa

Reviewer: bitingbludgers421
Date: 05/05/07 10:59
Chapter: Chapter 1

whoa, weird ending.

Author's Response: Thanks! The ending is supposed to show Dumbledore's fear. I have a bit of backstory for that. I'm planning on writing something about that. The guard is a Squib, who is a relative of Harry's.

Reviewer: solemnlyswear_x
Date: 03/31/07 18:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow. That was amazing.

From the beginning to the end, you had me riveted. The ending gave me chills. Your description of the murder that night was so vivid and chilling. This one, in particular, stands out. The sounds of the whip make you sick. You hate yourself. You want to stop now.

One of my favorite things about this was Dumbledoreís characterization. Iím so used to thinking of him as an old man, that sometimes I forget that he used to be a child too. Your writing managed to be powerful, as well as sound like the thoughts of a nine-year-old boy.

My favorite thing was that you wrote in second person. Second person is one of my favorite forms of writing. Itís hard to use, but when you do, it has the possibility to make such a powerful story. Your second person was flawless. =) As a reader, you feel like are Dumbledore and this is happening to you. If this had been written in third person, I think it still would have been a great story, but the impact wouldnít have been as much.

I loved how you wove the conversation in the cave into your story. It was interesting to see the reason behind the things that Dumbledore was muttering in HBP. The dialogue from there fit seamlessly between the flashbacks, and it never took anything away from the fic.

I did notice couple little errors, but nothing that detracted from the writing.

You try to fight him, but he is mush stronger than you. That should be much, not mush. =)

Now you are trouble, big trouble. There should be an Ďiní right after the you, I think.

You donít want Mummy die. Youíre missing a Ďtoí in there.

Anyway, this was absolutely heart wrenching and wonderful. Iím going to have to favorite this. =D And congratulations on second place in the challenge! Itís not hard to see why you did so well!

- Melissa =)


Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed. I'll fix those few little things. This was a wonderful review. ~ Teresa

Reviewer: BloodRayne
Date: 03/30/07 13:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow...the way you wrote it actually compelled me to feel sick (the torture parts, I mean). It was great! I loved your use of second person; it isn't used too much. Now this is something that would cause Dumby to scream. I didn't understand that last part though - when he called Harry the man he killed his mother? Was Dumby simply hallucinating, or was he still reacting to the vision? Anyway, awesome!

Author's Response: Thanks! In the last part, I was trying to connect Harry to the other man. When Dumbledore sees Harry, he is still reacting from the vision. The connection between Harry and the man were their eyes. Part of Dumbledore is still in the vision, so seeing the eyes scares him.

Reviewer: WunderWitch
Date: 03/29/07 17:39
Chapter: Chapter 1

whoa....weird!!

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Colores
Date: 03/29/07 17:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

*sobs* Wow, your writing was so powerful! Your use of second person to portray this story was very effective. The only thing that struck me as odd was that Dumbledore referred to his mother as "mommy." While it really got to me as the reader because it made Dumbledore seem so young and innocent, it also did not seem to be truly "Dumbledore-like" But the message it portrayed was powerful and well done. Good job and good luck!

Author's Response: Thank! I imagine that Dumbledore wasn't always the great wizard he was before he died. He was only nine, so there is a lot of time for him to grow. I imagine that this was the beginning of the Dumbledore we see today.

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