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Name: aglitteringdisaster (Signed) · Date: 01/08/08 18:50 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
Fantastic story! You really captured how she would have grown up! Although,
Dora was in Hufflepuff, not Ravenclaw (http://www.hp-lexicon.org/wizards/tonks.html)

Name: Ennalee (Signed) · Date: 04/22/07 15:59 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
Iíve spent a lot of time listening to a lot of people tell me about all their favorite stories that you wrote, and I donít think Iíve ever heard anyone mention this one. Despite that, it may very well be my favorite thing youíve written, and Iím a big Seren fan. I love everything about this story; the content, the way you put it together, the repetition, the circularityÖ seriously, I could go on for a very long time, but Iím going to try and keep this review manageable.

The repetition in this story is perhaps the most noticeable thing; it draws you in from the beginning, the gradual progression of the relationship between Tonks and her mother. Starting each section with the repeated sentence keeps us focusing on the right things, but besides that, itís really a beautiful construction, even to the way the words fall together. (Nymphadora Tonks loves her mother Ė thereís a ring and a rhythm to it thatís absolutely lovely!) And of course weíre waiting for you to bring it full circle, for you to bring it back to the beginning again Ė and I love that you changed the last section. You reverse it, have the sentence come at the end (where it really needed to go) and the name change comes as a surprise, because I would have expected her to keep her name, if only for the sake of the repetition in the story. The fact that her name is different is symbolic of all the ways sheís had to change before she can get back to that place; in order to come back to loving her mother, she had to go through what her mother went through. I love the way you paralleled the two of them, the way Ė both marrying an outcast, both undergoing that kind of censure.

I could go on for ages about the three daughters, about the way you bring the story full circle, but I think you must know how well done that is, so Iíll focus instead on a few smaller things. Andromedaís characterization. I love that you made her a Slytherin, and I love Tonksí reaction to that (Mum was a snake?). Also, this line: laughing when daddy tells Nymphadora about a very odd lady named Rapunzel who spent a lot of time being bored in an ivory tower, before a prince in shining armour came to rescue her. Wonderful characterization. I love what youíve done with Andromeda as much as I love what youíve done with Tonks, which is a lot, but perhaps should go without saying because theyíre so tied up together in this fic.

Now she had a klutz for a daughter, and a quiet, humble husband who worshiped the ground she walked on, but argued with more often than not. I donít like to nitpick stories written a very long time ago, because from my own experience I donít usually care enough to go back and go over things Iíve moved past, but this story is so wonderful that I had to point out the one line that pulled me out of the flow. ďArgued withĒ is confusing, because itís unclear at first glance whether the subject is Andromeda or Ted. On second glance itís easy to understand, but itís distracting from the flow of the story to have to stop and think about it.

Although she still thinks Nymphadora is a stupid, stupid name. This line is a stroke of genius, coming as it does right after such a serious, emotional moment. Without it the section would have been great Ė touching and sweet and sad and not at all sappy Ė but with it, it becomes real. It makes Tonks a real person. Also, itís really funny.

I know youíve moved on to other fandoms and all, but you know that if you ever decide to start writing HP again, there are a lot of people who would be made extremely happy. ;)

Name: HedwigsChristie (Signed) · Date: 04/02/07 16:51 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
Wow i am begining to become a fan of yours this is once again beautiful you can see Tonks maturing and realising it's fabulous well done :)

Name: Leahr (Signed) · Date: 03/30/07 13:34 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
That was really sweet. Very in character of Tonks. Good job.

Name: black_retribution (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 21:53 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
This is really great. I love the way you showed how Tonks matured throughout her life and how she slowly began to understand her mother. I really did enjoy it.

Name: Inkie Inks101 (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 20:14 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
This is great. It explains very well how Tonks might have spent her relationship with her mother. Good job.

Name: marhest (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 17:50 · For: Nymphadora Tonks Loves Her Mother
Loved the nams of the girls!!

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