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Reviews For One Last Battle

Name: XhayleeXblackX (Signed) · Date: 07/04/07 20:04 · For: One Last Battle
Wow, I really like this. It was powerful. The ending line was my favorite part.

Author's Response: Glad you thought the ending was powerful. As always, thanks for reviewing!


Name: MissyQuill (Signed) · Date: 06/05/07 0:35 · For: One Last Battle
If JK should €nd th€ battl€, sh€ should do it lik€ this. You ar€ r€ally, r€ally, r€ally amazing.=Sammy

Author's Response: Your review is too nice. I'm sure JK's ending will be so much better, no matter how she decides to end it. Thanks!


Name: lady magician (Signed) · Date: 04/27/07 0:58 · For: One Last Battle
eek. sad! Sad poems and i have a love-hate relationship---i like them against my own will because theyre usually the awesome-est but i just heart happy endings...this was really a good job. :-)

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! And I can understand the whole love-hate thing.


Name: immortal_evil (Signed) · Date: 04/12/07 19:15 · For: One Last Battle
This was an enjoyable read. I liked the single words between each stanza. It was emotional and well though-out.

Author's Response: Thank you! ^_^ I'm glad you liked it.


Name: Euphrates (Signed) · Date: 04/08/07 11:20 · For: One Last Battle
AH! Sooo sorry! My review got cut off – here it is in full form…*blushes*
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Hello! Before I review, I'll tell you how to do the Photobucket thing! Do you have a photobucket account? I believe it is the same as tinypic.com...anyways. I'll tell you how to use tinypic.com, do you mind? I'm pretty certain they work the same way...

Anyway. 1) Save the pic to your computer. (Right click on it and click "Save Picture As...")

2) Go to tinypic.com (or photobucket).

3) Click on "Browse". Find your pic and open the file.

4) Click "Upload".

5)Three bars with different codes in them will appear. The first code is used for your Author's Page. Copy and paste the code into your Author's Page and Voila! You've got it! :D
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Onto the real review.

I've read this poem about five different times and never reviewed it. *guilty look* Sorry about that!

I love the little one line stanzas you have scattered throughout the poem. They enhance the image you give us, making the picture in my mind have greater clarity. Very clever. :-)

People all around
Battling for their lives.
Their cries pierce the air
Like knives.


The last line in that stanza seems too short. I'd rewrite the stanza, if I were you, to make it flow better and stuff.

Fires destroy the earth
And give a fiery glow.
The Death Eaters
Help them grow.


Here, too, the last line is too short. I'd maybe change it to: The Death Eaters / Diligently help them grow. But that is just me.

Curses from his wand
Rush toward Voldemort.
The man's evil howl
Is cut short.


*embarrassed look* Here, again. All you need to do is add another word to the last line, though.

Anyways! Besides my nitpicks, this poem was very thought-evoking and...chilling, at the last stanza. I just think some of the lines are too short, but that is just me - feel free to ignore my rambles! :-)

I love your poems, FYI. I think I shall favorite you... *grin*

(OMG, my name is in your Author's Page? Yay! *hugs*)

...*cough*

Oh, sorry for the length of this, too…

~Kate


Author's Response: Ok..... where to start... First of all, thanks for telling me how to add a banner. I’ve wanted to make my page *funner* (I know it’s not a word) but I didn’t know how to add pics, so yah... thanks! ^_^ Now... about my poem..... you are right about the stanzas.... some of the last lines are a little too short..... maybe I’ll edit it later when I’m inspired or something and the words just come to me because I don’t want to add just any words just because I want to make them longer. So again, thanks for your reviews.... they are soooo helpful!


Name: Euphrates (Signed) · Date: 04/08/07 11:19 · For: One Last Battle
Hello! Before I review, I'll tell you how to do the Photobucket thing! Do you have a photobucket account? I believe it is the same as tinypic.com...anyways. I'll tell you how to use tinypic.com, do you mind? I'm pretty certain they work the same way...

Anyway. 1) Save the pic to your computer. (Right click on it and click "Save Picture As...")

2) Go to tinypic.com (or photobucket).

3) Click on "Browse". Find your pic and open the file.

4) Click "Upload".

5)Three bars with different codes in them will appear. The first code (beginning with an

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Name: Secret shadows (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 14:35 · For: One Last Battle
what an amazing poem, you have done it again and I am very glad to have put you on my favorite author's list. I am so excited to be the first to review! I am hopefully putting up my new poem now, hope you might review it if it's accepted! ~ Secret Shadows

Author's Response: Thank you so much for putting me on your faves- it makes me so happy! ^_^ I'll be sure to review your poem once it's posted. Thanks for the revew!


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