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Name: Disappearance_26 (Signed) · Date: 04/04/07 23:15 · For: He's Free
This is such a good sonnet! I loved it :D
Remus is my favourite Marauder and the way you write about him is breathtaking!
Good luck! and... GO GRYFFS!!!!


Author's Response: Yay! Thank you so much for the review! Remus is my favorite, too, so it was a ton of fun to write this about him.


Name: Lovely Fatima (Signed) · Date: 03/31/07 18:02 · For: He's Free
One good review deserves another! :) Remus is one of my favorite characters, so I truly enjoyed reading this poem. I think you managed to capture the "confined" feeling of his life in the tight language of the octave, only to flow with more freedom and abandon in the sestet. I also like how Albus Dumbledore is the only one named. In so many ways, Albus was *the* most important person in Remus' life. Excellent poem, and good luck in the Challenge! Go! Go! Gryffindor!

Author's Response: Well, thank you! I love Remus so much and his predicament is so troubling, so I'm glad you appreciated the sentiment! And Dumbledore, of course, is just awesome. I hadn't even noticed that he's the only one to be named in the poem--that's a great point!

Thanks so much for the review. I really appreciate it. Hooray Gryffs! :)

Name: Gmariam (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 11:08 · For: He's Free
Lovely job! You did a great job with Remus's character; your description was great through the octave. The turn is excellent, and the conclusion - He's fee - is perfect. I would only suggest another word for 'more' at the end ; it pops up four times in the last three lines, and although the repetition does work to some degree, I think a different word in that second to last line especially would really make it more meaningful. ('New' perhaps?) Otherwise great job, I really like it - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! Remus is one of my favorite characters, so it was fun to write about him. I am fascinated by his backstory and werewolfness (there has got to be a better word for that!), and I'm so glad you liked the sonnet.

I agree about the "more." I caught that after I had submitted the poem! I think I'll give it another look and see if I can change it. "New" sounds like a great suggestion, thanks!

Author's Response: Edit: I've changed the penultimate line, and I think it works so well now! Thanks for the suggestion!!

Name: LoOnY_for_Harry (Signed) · Date: 03/28/07 6:51 · For: He's Free
That was quite good! Excellent job with details and descriptions. The rhythm was great, too, though it was an unusual style (which is a good thing!). A wonderful poem about the feelings of our favorite werewolf!

Author's Response: Thanks so much! He's such a lovable werewolf, isn't he? :) I had a lot of fun writing it. I'm so glad you liked it, and thanks again for the review!

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