This is such a good sonnet! I loved it :D
Remus is my favourite Marauder and the way you write about him is breathtaking!
Good luck! and... GO GRYFFS!!!!
Author's Response: Yay! Thank you so much for the review! Remus is my favorite, too, so it was a ton of fun to write this about him.
GO LIONS! :)
One good review deserves another! :) Remus is one of my favorite characters, so I truly enjoyed reading this poem. I think you managed to capture the "confined" feeling of his life in the tight language of the octave, only to flow with more freedom and abandon in the sestet. I also like how Albus Dumbledore is the only one named. In so many ways, Albus was *the* most important person in Remus' life. Excellent poem, and good luck in the Challenge! Go! Go! Gryffindor!
Author's Response: Well, thank you! I love Remus so much and his predicament is so troubling, so I'm glad you appreciated the sentiment! And Dumbledore, of course, is just awesome. I hadn't even noticed that he's the only one to be named in the poem--that's a great point!
Thanks so much for the review. I really appreciate it. Hooray Gryffs! :)
Lovely job! You did a great job with Remus's character; your description was great through the octave. The turn is excellent, and the conclusion - He's fee - is perfect. I would only suggest another word for 'more' at the end ; it pops up four times in the last three lines, and although the repetition does work to some degree, I think a different word in that second to last line especially would really make it more meaningful. ('New' perhaps?) Otherwise great job, I really like it - good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Remus is one of my favorite characters, so it was fun to write about him. I am fascinated by his backstory and werewolfness (there has got to be a better word for that!), and I'm so glad you liked the sonnet.
I agree about the "more." I caught that after I had submitted the poem! I think I'll give it another look and see if I can change it. "New" sounds like a great suggestion, thanks!
Author's Response: Edit: I've changed the penultimate line, and I think it works so well now! Thanks for the suggestion!!
That was quite good! Excellent job with details and descriptions. The rhythm was great, too, though it was an unusual style (which is a good thing!). A wonderful poem about the feelings of our favorite werewolf!
Author's Response: Thanks so much! He's such a lovable werewolf, isn't he? :) I had a lot of fun writing it. I'm so glad you liked it, and thanks again for the review!