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I love this, Kelly! I like the mixing of red and green, and the bit about the two "vivid green streatms out at night, shaped into to and linked as one." This part reminded me of the Dark Mark.
Your imagery is incredible. This reminded me very much of the Quidditch World Cup with all of the mayhem described. Great job!
Oh my gosh. Before I read, I just want to tell you that your banner is beautiful, and I love mine! *hugs*
It’s a beautiful poem. Is the beginning trying to capture something specific? From what I can tell there you are talking about Voldemort and his DE’s causing destruction.
I really do not have the right mind to understand poetry, to me poetry is just pretty words put together and I have to struggle to make a picture. I think I have mental problems of some sort. /random rant
I love how you capture the reaction and emotion to the attacks. Where you write of the silence, it is the tension and the fear, they know what is coming but they pray there is a chance for it to go away. You write how the battle and the violence consume everything, even the minds of the victims.
“Mutiny rises in the horizon and hides the stars that shine so bright at night.
It captures the last hope that beats in hearts
Until nothing is left but shreds of what could have been.”
It shows that evil comes, unstopping, almost as if it a routine that can never end. They come and destruct until there is no more they can do.
The fear and the pain, it is overpowering in the way you convey it. As the attackers come all is silent and once they arrive all Hell breaks loose, the contrast between the anticipation and arrival. You breathe in the panic of the victims and the sick willingness of the attackers.
But then it ends, and it is peaceful once again. The destruction and emptiness is still there, but it won’t be corrupted anymore. Because this is the part of the routine where the evil leaves.
This was an amazing poem; I love how you show the different levels of each moment. The change of sound, and what you see. You even demonstrated the feel of the attack.
I hope someday I can come back and leave a review that will properly portray what this poem made me feel. I hope you write more because you have a talent for it. *runs to go PM you*
Amazing, simply wonderful. I actually found out how to place reviews now, please forgive my blonde moment. This poem is moving, inspiring.
OH My Salazar! I read part of this before, right? I loved it! It was beautiful and just plain awesome! Wait before I feel stupid I think I know what your talking about but I'm not sure...dark mark...? *hee hee*
Wow...very good! It's got such flow...hold on I have to read it again...I adored that ending...very very welld done!
B-e-a uti-ful! Excellent use of personification and wonderful details. Nice job!