Reviews For More Than a Shadow
Reviewer: MissyQuill
Date: 06/01/07 4:31
Chapter: Chapter 1

Your style os very unique.=Sammy

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 03/28/07 11:11
Chapter: Chapter 1

Nice job! I like how you described Hermione in the first four lines, and then changed in the next four lines. The turn going into the sestet was very good. I love the line :"They would laugh and smile under the sun" I wonder if you couldn't rearrange things a bit to end with it? Another time maybe. =) Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hey, thanks so much! I am thrilled that you enjoyed it and your compliments are making me grin. =) Thanks for the advice; it would be difficult to change, but not impossible. Maybe next time! -Colores

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