Very nice. The end was rather abrupt, though, but the cliches definitely made a statement: We need new cliches. Anyway, this is going on my favorites list to be my reference when I need a bad cliche. Thank you!
Author's Response: Yes, it was a rather short story; my next goal is to submit some longer-non-one-shot-stories. An yes, we certainly need to put some new cliches into circulation. Thank for reviewing!