Good story! I saw one bad thing. James,on towards the end. He kinda of got....um...."Loopy"? Like he belonged in the Asylum instead of Hogwarts.
Depressing as hell. Thats my only comment as far as the story in that. Hmmm.....I just hope James and Lily go ahead and get together instead of this bs.
Deathly Hallow was awesome. I assume these are 2 of those deaths you were talking about.
Damn.....nice..... Is all I have to say.
Awesome,Awesome,awesome awesome chapter!!! James is straight up pissed. This is a pretty good story so far,even if that last chapter was my favorite.(Kinda sad i know) Seems a bit more....actiony than the rest of these J/L romances. Thats something....different.
AS far as writing and such,it was good. This is just my opinion,but i didn't like the story in this.(Although when Moody said "Longbotton" My jaw dropped....I'll admit it.) I prefer when an author sticks to one or two characters.(Sorry if this was the only part you were going to write like this!)
I kind of liked this one. Although i saw very little of that L/J romance you spoke of.
Honestly,I agree. It started pretty good,but got boring. Fast. L/J romance. Sounds good. I would make this longer but....i like the romancy parts the best!
Best....Chapter.....Yet...... This is pickin' up a bit. Things still seem a bit too calm,do i sense i twist? Yup,somewhere in here its gonna happen.
I have to admit,I like your writing style. So far the storys....a bit bland. But thats to be expected as i haven't really got into it yet.
Pretty good so far! SAdly,how you ever memorized your betas name is beyond me. I can't pronounce it,much less spell it...lol
Oh my gooodddd :)
So good, I WANT TO READ MORE NOW!!!
Love it, never stop writing or Sailing Girl will die :)
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! :)
i realy liked it. i was just looking for a mention of L/J but i think it's already great! update soon. i had to read the last chapter again to remember some parts.
Author's Response: Glad you liked it! I'll try and update faster this time.
I can't wait till the next one!!!!!!!!! You've written briallently and I'm on the edge of my seat till the next one! I hope there is a lot of action... and romance between Lily and James. Their story is the saddest I think, because they were young and in love and were going to have a perfect life, than Voldemort decided to kill them :( It really tears at your gut. I think yoiu should make the story even more sade, by showing just how much they loved each other and would not be afraid to die for another if it meant the other surrvieved. You chose a GREAT topic to write about. But could you like have it more in Lily and James point of view please?
Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! I do write primarily in Lily's point of view, but because of the massive cast of characters that was affected by the first war, I find it both refreshing and necessary to write from the perspectives of characters who were similarly devastated.
Pleeaaasssee update faster if you can!
Author's Response: I'm trying! Sometimes real life gets in the way. Glad you're eager, though ;)
I like this story
Author's Response: I'm glad :)
Awww poor Alice!!! I forgive you for the long wait, hopefully the next chapter will be up soon :-)
Author's Response: Thank you!
hey :D whens the next chapter coming out?
Author's Response: Over the weekend – it's actually been done for weeks, I just haven't had time to read it over and submit.
Great chapter, when is the next one coming out?
Author's Response: Thank you so much. Sorry for the late response – I've been really busy. Next chapter is written, but I haven't had time to read it over yet. I'll probably submit it sometime this weekend.
Gr8 i luv it
Author's Response: Thank you!