Terrific chapter! James just can't get his act together around Lily though, thats really funny
:) Loved it!
Amazing chapter! ;)
Very interesting chapter! This is really a war now isnt!?!?
Very well written first chapter! I really love reading Lily and James fan fics as long as they aren't cliche.
I really like this...is a bit too depressing but i like it. sometimes i think the only reason i read fanfiction is because of the way you wonderful people write about emotions. real human emotions, like love, pain, hatred, anger, longing etc etc.
it makes me feel more human and less empty!
i couldn't stop crying whenever someone died because as horrible as it is my best friend's mum just died this week after a car accident and i'm feeling particualarly vulnerable at the moment.
so, i guess i have to thank you! since crying makes pain more bearable for me at the moment.
but changing subjects...i was reading your response to one the reviews and you said something about always putting Sirius and Remus with people who end up dead or something around these lines...but anyway...does that mean that Marly will die? because i really love her! she's been through so much i truly felt for her on that chapter when she receives the letter about her parents. i rarely sympathise with OC's but i really do love her, and i hoped things were going to lighten up for her (if that's possible).
In the beginning i was really annoyed with Lily and how she was going about things. the war, mum, potter ,school.
and i was feeling a bit frustrated.
I absolutely love James characterisation! it's probably one of the best James' i have ever seen! he is so real and...and i don't know...!
Now this Review was way too long...sorry. you don't need to read it all or answer back. a last thought though...
I LOVE THIS FIC!
Author's Response: Marly's actually not an OC - Marlene McKinnon was real. She's mentioned in OotP. Crying usually makes things more bearable - It's almost like a release. I'm sorry about your best friend's mum. My best to her family and yours. Everyone always tells me how they're annoyed with Lily -- believe me, I am too. I needed her to be at least a little bit annoying to go with the storyline, and she just escalated from there into a crazy war-hating peace-loving scared-of-everything girl. Thanks for the long review. I like those the best. (:
the way you described how James became almost mechanical in hearing about his father's death was so wonderfully depressing that I almost wanted to cry.
I held back though, because I am in study hall right now. In school. ha
UPDATE SOON!! I love your story!
Author's Response: thank you (=
Aw poor James i am litterally sitting in my chair crying for him! Nice wrok can't wait for the next chapter oh and I really hope Siruis and Marly get back togehter they were so cute!!! Oh and lily simply must just run up to James and kiss him when he gets back to hogwarts or when he goes back to his house!! Awesome story!!
Author's Response: aww im sorry i made you cry . and im horrible at ending cute relationships its why i always put remus and sirius with people i know will inevitably die (im horrible i know). and aww i wish i had made lily run up to james like that but shes still a bit antipotter at the moment. hopefully you get what you want at some point though
Awww! Please write more!!!
That was such a sad ending of the chapter!!!
Author's Response: i will i promise ! and yeah it was pretty devastating - waitll you read the next one .
awww man. james' parents are dead. shit! feel so sorry for him.
Author's Response: soon . ill get to it . ive been swamped for the past couple of weeks and my beta hasnt replied with chapter 13 yet . i might just look it over myself and post it . sorry everyone .
omg!!! that is so sad! * sob sob* very well written though! keep on writing cant wait for the next chapter! :D
Author's Response: thank you (:
hello? both parents in one chapter? how cruel and heartless are you?
Author's Response: apparently, very. i think you have to be to write something dark .
Im really enjoying it
Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: thank you i'll try (:
WAHHH!! Really Sad, though really well written! I really want to see the rest of the story, so please update.
Love the whole story by the way.
Author's Response: i will sometime soon - thank you (:
Very good, quite deep
I could never write like that
Author's Response: thanks. it took a while to get it right.
Thats so sad! god i feel so bad for James right now! amazing writing as always and your plot is is friggen incredible! UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: thank you very much - it seems like everything's going wrong for james doesn't it? and i'll try (:
This is SUCH A GOOD STORY!! It's so readable, the characters just fit, and I got to the end of each chapter and couldn't believe it was the end already!
General Comment--you don't always put whose point of view the chapter is in on the top. There isn't a chapter where I couldn't figure out after a couple of lines who was speaking, but it would be good if you bolded and all caps-ed the name of the narrator for each chapter at the top.
Please update it soon!
Author's Response: thank you - also, im sorry about the pov thing i was pretty sure i had james at the top but i guess i didn't haha .
OMIGOSH!!!! Poor James, losing both of his parents in 2 days! Th-that's so SAD!!!! When's Lily gonna break up with Calvin the Prat and start dating James? Can't wait for the next update!
Author's Response: i know, it's horrible, but i had forgotten that they had to die and it didnt fit anywhere else into the plot! lily will start dating james sometime after chapter 17. probably around chapter 20 hopefully if things go according to plan .
That's so sad!!! I mean i knew that Potter's had to die for Harry to have no family, but that was a sad way to die.
Keep it up! Brilliant chapter, and you updated soon. Nice!
~Passion For Prongs
Author's Response: haha thank you (: i'll try and do it again