i absolutely LOVE it!!! please keep writing!!!! please!
i luv ur fan fiction. it's lik my favourit one!!!!!!!! James is soo hot!!!!!!!!!! PLEASE UPDATE IT RIGHT NOW. I NEED DA NEXT CHAPTER!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: thank you!! + soon ;)
PLEASE UPDATE SOONER THAN LATER!!!!!!!!! You made James the perfect man!!!! Does he have a brother? haha. When does she say she loves him?? I'm anxiously waiting!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: I wouldn't quite say *perfect*, but I'd like to have his brother ;] thank you! i'm glad you read & enjoyed =]
great chapter. i loved it. what was the end part about. i hate cliffies. so mean and i lose sleep over them. lol
you better be writing and updating soon.
i hope James tells Lily about remus and being animagus soon.
update plz??
Author's Response: I'm writing chapter 23 whenever I have free time -- which isn't often lately! But I do have everything planned out in my mind, and of course James will have to tell Lily soon enough ... or else >:D. Thank you, I'm glad you liked it!
your writing is phenomenal.. i think thats how you spell it? (: anyways.. have to keep reading now!
Author's Response: aw thank you so much!
Really fantastic chapter, I loved it! Although I think Lily is a little out of character when she breaks the rules, but it was a cute part in the story, so I like it.
What's with the 'And then, suddenly, it wasn't.'? What are you planning? Why have you left me with such a eluding, but intense, cliff hanger??? Do you WANT me to lose sleep pondering what that could possibly mean?
Great chapter!
~Passion For Prongs
Author's Response: I do agree a bit about the OOCness, but I really couldn't resist XD & don't lose too much sleep! you'll need it to keep focused during the next chapter ;) Thank you so much for your review!
it got a little boring here and there, but i like the story in general! but continue on! great story so far!
Author's Response: Thank you so much :))
Ahh Loved this chapter!!! Remus is such a nice guy :-)
Author's Response: He really is :D
i know that this is kind of a delayed review considering I've been reading this story for a while but I promise it will be long. I love it! The chapter before this one was my favorite so far, even though the one where Sirius kissed Lily made me want to laugh and cry and hit things all at the same time, which is a good thing if you really think about it. I also love how in your story Lily and James don't just magically end up together in like the third chapter, becuase it really aggravates me when all of a sudden James kisses her and then she loves him. Not very realistic, but this story definitely is, even if Lily can be a bit of an idiot at times. Then again, maybe she is just an idiot in my mind because I love James and it took her so long, but oh well. I have to say, after this long review, there is only one thing that I don't like about this story, and it is a legitimate complaint. I'm sorry but I hate when Sirius and one of Lily's friends get together. It just seems like the one cliche in an awesome, original, fic. I know it would be hard to change now, but i thought I would just put that out there.
Oh, and I also have an idea/suggestion for you. How is Peter feeling this whole time? Is he a Death eater yet and has to fight against other Death Eaters? Or is he still wholey(not sure on the spelling there) and truely on the Marauder's side? I think that a chapter from Peter's point of view would be really interesting, even though I like you, really like writing from james' point of view. See my new one-shot. Wow, this was really long, I wish people would have a review this long for one of my stories.
Well anyway keep up the good work!
peace out,
kel
Author's Response: Thank you so much for your long review. I agree about the cliche, but while writing it I didn't really think about that, I kind of just put it in.
That's actually a really good idea! Thank you for it, I might use it ;D
I like James' point of view also. So many stories are Lily's point of view; it is a nice change. And if you ever are having writer's block, you could do a little interlude or something with Sirius' or Remus' or Alice's point of view. Nice little change once in a while...
Author's Response: I'm actually planning on making a point of view from Alice pretty soon... think chapter 24 or 27 :]
omg start writing right now like right now!!!!!!!!!!! you have to finish
Author's Response: I will, I promise :] I'm glad you enjoyed it!
omg get her to tell james she loves him now!!!!!!!!!!!!! i am so hooked!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you have tooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
finally they're together! =D
great chapter, I like stuff from James' POV better. It's more fun. =D
Author's Response: James is less serious than Lily, she angsts a little too much. Thank you! :D
amazing as usual!!! please continue and update soon!!!!
cupcakes,
Lilia
Author's Response: I will :D!
that was cute i liked being away from all the issues...:)
Author's Response: thanks :) part of 22 is away from the issues, but some of it comes back soon... :O
well that cliffie wasnt very nice. lol
but they are FINALLY together. im so happy.
their so cute and perfect together.
and i liked the jumping into the lake part. how lily was scared. of all people. it was funny.
update soon!
Author's Response: :] thank you! I will.
heyyyyyyyy...it's moi! I'm writing this review to make you happy :) It was a great chapter, though I did not like how short it was (I'm eager for more) and I'm certainly not happy about the cliffhanger!!! I mean, yes, I will definately read the next chapter (duh)--which is why authors use cliffhangers, but seriously...THAT'S A HUGE CLIFFHANGER!
I'll never forgive you...
~Passion For Prongs
Author's Response: Aw, it's not that bad! XD Thank you very much, I'll submit 22 soon, it just needs some tweaking.
luvers it!!! cant wait till the next chapter :)
Author's Response: Thanks! :D
This was a really sweet chapter, with a little cliffy at the end. I like it. Please, please, PLEASEEEE write more!!
Author's Response: Will do :D
