Reviewer: tc015
Date: 04/26/07 21:26
Chapter: In Childhood's Twilight, Lily Did I Love

This poem was so pretty. I love how Snape describes his relationship with Lily. It is so tragic and beauty how you describe his relationship with Lily. I love to read poetry, yet I rarely have anytime to read it. This is one of my favorite poems on MNFF.

My plea for life accompanied by her screams.

In penance, now for her child's sake I toil.

These are my favorite lines. The image of Severus watching over Harry, the daughter of the woman he loves, is very interesting. Overall, loved it.

~ Teresa

Reviewer: LuthAn
Date: 03/31/07 11:54
Chapter: In Childhood's Twilight, Lily Did I Love

Wow, this is beautiful. The language you've used, and really the syntax of the poem is so perfect for this type of sonnet (and I know nothing about poetry!!). And while Snape is not one of my favorite characters, I will grant that he is *so* fascinating, and you've definitely shown a different side of him here. A job well done! Very well done!

Good luck in the challenge from a fellow Gryffindor! Go Lions! :)


Author's Response: Since University, I have rarely written poetry, choosing instead to use poetic devices in my prose. However, each year, I have my students attempt to write sonnets when they study Shakespeare. I always compose a new one every year as an example, and I show them my process from start to finish. Since I'm in Japan teaching language rather than literature, I've missed my yearly sonnet. Taking up this challenge has been a welcome entertainment. I'm so happy you've read it and that you liked it.

Reviewer: binteridhwan
Date: 03/29/07 4:45
Chapter: In Childhood's Twilight, Lily Did I Love

hey! thanx for the help ! i got into gryffindor :)

Reviewer: redvelvetcanopy
Date: 03/27/07 14:46
Chapter: In Childhood's Twilight, Lily Did I Love

That's so haunting and beautiful! Very nice!

Author's Response: Thanks! This is one of the sonnets that I'm most proud of, as I had to take someone else's characters and work around them. Glad you liked it!

Reviewer: binteridhwan
Date: 03/27/07 14:03
Chapter: In Childhood's Twilight, Lily Did I Love

nice i like it!! did you get into a house? like you are in gryffindor right ? how did you get in it ?

Author's Response: On the Forums, you need to send a PM to songbook99 (I think that's her username). She'll send you the sorting quiz. You take it, and your answers determine what house you're in. :) Thanks for reading the poem!

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