Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/26/07 0:56
Chapter: Life Line

Yay! She has a chance at freedom! I hope it all goes well for her!

Author's Response: *hugs Bella* Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: The Weasley Triplet
Date: 08/25/07 13:04
Chapter: Understanding

Elle! I love the new chapter! I'm glad that everyone is (finally) coming to their senses, though it did seem to happen a bit too quickly. Neville, I think would still be a bit stubborn about admitting he was wrong, but Draco's attitude is believable.

That law is pretty stupid. According to the slavery laws, the (FORMER, NOT ANYMORE) Death Eaters can't even THINK about disobeying, so how could they possibly hurt anyone without severe injury to themselves?!

Yay Luna!!! I always knew she had it in her to be commanding and outspoken! Although I don't like the idea of Luna and Neville getting married (*sulk*), I suppose it was necessary for the story.

Can't wait for the next chapter. This is without a doubt my favorite Post-Hogwarts story.

Author's Response: Will! Thanks for the review. *hugs*

I was actually a bit worried that this chapter moved to quickly. I like to think that having the truth thrown in their faces would be enough the make them see it, but maybe there should have been a cooling down period. I'm not sure... I really struggled with this part.

And yes, the law is stupid. However, as a rule, the Minsitry is stupid as well. :D

Luna was really fun to write in this chapter. It was great to have her finally really speak up for something. Go Luna!

Thanks so much for the review and the compliments. *hugs again*

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 08/24/07 23:10
Chapter: Understanding

Whew that's some pretty quick character personality changes!

You might want to vary the lengths of your sentences a bit. It feels like there are too many full stops sometimes. :)

Author's Response: I was a little concerned about the personality changes. This was suppose to be the event to change their thinking, but I'm starting to think there should have been more...

I'll give it a read through, to see if some sentences should be changed. Thanks for pointing that out. And thanks for the review. :D

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 08/24/07 23:02
Chapter: A Promise

Awww what a party pooper! :D I'm glad that Harry is starting to see Bella as a person now tho.

Author's Response: Harry is coming around. :D

Reviewer: Masked One
Date: 08/24/07 22:49
Chapter: Caught in the Act

Use a cliffhanger, why don’t you? Now I’m going to be switching between this story and that other one I’m reading all evening, because I can’t abandon either of them! This was a good first chapter – it really hooked me in right off, trying to figure out who was in the shack. At first I assumed they meant the shrieking shack, and they had a werewolf friend – then I started to figure out who ‘Ella’ was. I like how bemused Cassie is by the whole thing (oh, and I like her name… would it be short for Cassiopeia?) I can certainly understand why Harry feels the way he does about Ella, and I rather liked your characterization of her, though it was a bit startling without some explanation of why she’s so…sweet. I’ve always thought she might have a soft spot for children, though, so I’ll swallow it and see what comes next.

I can’t wait to find out how she ended up as a slave, or why Harry has her. The one thing that bothered me as I was reading was a certain lack of subtlety in Cassie’s characterization. Now, I’m fairly certain I lose readers by trying to be too subtle, and I frequently feel like I’m being beaten about the head with stuff I read, so take this with a grain of salt – but the constant repetition of Cassie’s loyalty to her friends seemed a bit forced. It’s not exactly ‘show, don’t tell’ – you were showing, but you were also telling, over and over, in the narrative. There’s a bit of the same thing when Frank explains why he’s coming along. He says it so baldly… it sounds a bit like the writer talking, and not a character.

That was really the one thing that bothered me, though, and I like it. Most of the writing and description is very well done, and I like your OCs. I can’t wait to see more of Harry, and find out what’s going to happen next. I can tell this is going to be an interesting ride.


Author's Response: Cliffhangers are fun. And I'm sure you know who Ella is. This is because you know me. A lot of people didn't figure it out so quickly. And you were probably in some of the chats where this story was discussed.

And *HUGS* I also have always thought that she had a soft spot for kids. I thought I was the only one. Anyway, I know the characterization isn't perfect, but at this point, you're not really supposed to know who she is. Why she is this way should become clearer as you read.

Oh and Cassie is short for Cassandra.

And if lack of sublety is bad for you, I'm sure you'll be mentioning it again as you read on. The story isn't overly subtle, nor are the characters. And there is a lot of repetion regarding their motives. It's more they way I wrote it than anything else, I believe.

Anyway, thanks so much for reading this and leaving a review! *hugs Masky* I'm glad I've got you hooked. It's my all-time favorite. :D

Reviewer: Hermione_Rocks
Date: 08/24/07 20:34
Chapter: A Promise

Oh, so Bellatrix isn't tracking her, just went to see Severus that day. That's a relief, LOL.

And (I can't believe I'm about to write this) they can't put Bellatrix back in Azkaban! She doesn't deserve that for trying to help. Grr. But Harry paying for her exam was really sweet. He's coming around! *squish*

And it just makes me snort every time Severus insists on carrying Bella around. :P It's cute, in an odd way, but also just amusing.

Author's Response: Heh. No, Bella isn't tracking her. I promise.

*hugs Bella* She'll be okay. And Harry is indeed coming around. I promised he would.

I'm glad you laughed at Sevy. It was supposed to be funny. :D

Thanks for another review. *hugs Anna*

Reviewer: Hermione_Rocks
Date: 08/24/07 19:43
Chapter: Fallen

Aw, Frank still cares about her. Cute. ^.^ Was kind of random how Bellatrix showed up; is she somehow tracking Cassie's location? :s Hmm . . . *hurries to next chapter*

Author's Response: Heh. Tracking Cassie's location? No. That would be a little scary.

Thanks for the review, Anna.

Reviewer: I_solemnly_swear
Date: 08/24/07 18:39
Chapter: A Promise

Good chapter. This is really addicting. It only makes me sad that Harry would do something like that. Even if Ron and Ginny had both died, it seems extremly OOC for Harry to torture someone for 12 years.

Author's Response: Harry will come around. I promise. Thanks for the review...

Reviewer: Hermione_Rocks
Date: 08/24/07 18:10
Chapter: A Surprise

Elle, I had no idea that you were a delusional shipper! Teehee. ;D

So, I'm glad Harry is not yet a complete monster, and feels a bit of guilt. It was nice to see he was still human, but also shocking to see how . . . needy and pitiful he is. :/ Nice that he and Hermione are on good terms again, but I think he's got to sort out a few -- issues. Heh.

Anyway, another great chapter. My only nitpick is that I can't see Draco EVER saying 'adorable'. It just doesn't seem like him. X)

Author's Response: I'm not a delusional shipper. I don't really like the pairing that much, but it fit well with the story.

And yes, the Harry we all know is still there. He's just a little lost. He needs to be shoved in the right direction.

Hmmm...Draco and adorable...you never know...

Reviewer: Lily Roxy
Date: 08/24/07 14:09
Chapter: A Surprise

So... many... chapters! It's overwhelming! I love it! Anyways, review:

There was no point in lurking in her room, dreading the inevitable. It would be much more beneficial for her to have a nice meal, and then deal with what had to be done.
Wow, Elle, you transition seamlessly from a twelve year old's mind to that of Hermione's. I'd love to see you write a chappie in this from Harry's or Frank's POV, maybe as an off-shoot/bonus later on like you did with some of your other fics. I'm just really inerested to see how you'd write that...

“He flooed over to the Lupins’ to see Aunt Bella,” ,/i>
*grins* "Flooed": my new favourite verb:D. I'm gonna post this in that favourite word thread in the RoR;).

"It’s so odd to see Snape in love.”
*giggles*, a very Draco thing to say indeed. It's so true... one of those things that no adult except Draco would ever say.

She needed to know if her childhood friend could truly despise her simply because she chose not to live in a world of hate.
Everything that happened before and during the war seems to be a pastlife for all the characters but at the same time everything in the Wizarding World seems to be repeating itself. It's really weird, but it's still seamless and perfect. This is definitely my favourite Post-War fic. It's too bad you're not eligible for the QSQ awards. I heard that we couldn't nominate mods and my mind full of ideas for nominations just went totally blank...

“I owe you an apology."
Whoa... major Dr. Jeckell/Mr. Hyde going on here... Hermione will probably be even more wary...

I will always love you.
Oh, God. Is this going to be a H/Hr fic? *shudders*. Ah well, if that's what you intend to do with this fic, you'll find a way to make it work.

Hermione had a slight urge to remind him that Draco had also been a popular Slytherin with good grades, but then thought better of it.
Wouldn't Harry be refering to Lucus' innocence though and how in terms of trouble, he didn't compare to Draco? Meh, I dunno... I don't think Harry would be one to talk much about Lucus breaking rules unless he's made it his personal mission to become as much of a hypocrite as possible.

My current Potions Master is a bit of a blockhead.
Hmm. Interesting. Who's Harry gonna fire then?

...but I can’t accept the position.
*groans* but it would've been so interesting to see how the school runs under Harry's command!

“I like it here,” he replied, in a dazed voice. “It makes me feel close to them.”
"In a dazed voice", just the way I picture it is as though Harry is insane with everything... it's sad.

*is not going to waste space by quoting Harry's entire huge paragraph*
I love Harry's explanation about everything. It totally fits and I'm glad to see another side of him again. You're good at blending the cruel!Harry and ashamed!depressed!Harry in the same chapter and keeping it realistic.

Hermione is also great at softly convincing Harry stuff. Although I don't know the impact she'll have, she definitely chose her words right (and you chose them right for her character, for that matter).

Grabbing her by the neck, he pulled her into a passionate, needy kiss.Before she fully realized what was going on, she found herself responding to him. It had been so long since someone touched her like that./i>
I will give my full, uncensored reaction of that next time we talk on msn... but, for now, I'll just say that my eyes almost popped out. That was really random and yet not. Confusing. There's the word:). Anyways, great chapter. Everyone was in character, you didn't even stretch it, but you focused on aspects of Harry and Hermione's character that many simply ignore or dismiss. Can't wait for more!

Author's Response: Hmmm...I get the distinct feeling you might have something to tell me about Harry/Hermione shipping. Heh.

Anyway, I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. It wasn't one of my favorites, but it was needed. It was important for the reader to see that Harry does feel a certain amount of shame for what he does, although he cannot fully admitt to it. And I wanted to show some of his bond with Hermione...

Anyway, thank you for another wonderful review. *hugs*

Reviewer: Lily Roxy
Date: 08/24/07 13:26
Chapter: A Bad Idea

I read the response to my other review, and I was surprised to see how long the review had gotten too:). Glad you liked it, I owe you that much having procrastinated with these reviews...

His natural charm and considerable talents had made him instantly popular.
Hmm... is this truly from a 3rd person perspective or is this the arrogant--sometimes cute-- side of the Malfoy family coming out of Lucus?

There were Muggleborn students who wouldn’t even look at him. Lucus was hurt by it, but he learned to live with it.
First: I'm surprised at how everything has just done a 180degree turn.
Second: how would the Muggleborns know about the Malfoy family if they had been estranged from Hogwarts for years anyways? How would they recongnize Lucus? Just wondering, the answer is probably obvious and will make me blush at my own stupidity...

She’s a werewolf that one is.
You'd have thought Harry would've made sure Hogwarts was ultra informed about Cassie not being a werewolf before she "betrayed" him...

He had never noticed it before, but he immediately knew what it was–purgatory.
If that's purgatory, then what's hell?

“Harry lost a lot in the war: his parents, his godfather, his mentor, his best mate, his girlfriend. He just can’t seem to deal with it. For years he took his anger out on Aunt Bella. He really needs help. He needs someone to pull him out of this black hole that he created for himself.”
A few chapters ago, Cassie thought that Harry was harming Bella simply because he was a cruel sadist without any feelings. Where did this point of view come from?

“I knew I should have set this building on fire,” Frank snarled, glaring at the cousins. “Then I would have destroyed the memory of a Death Eater and killed the next generation.”
My jaw actually dropped at this. That is so vicious! Normally eleven and twelve year olds resort to swearing to insult their enemies... this is so much deeper and hurtful. Wow, this kid's really been brainwashed. Poor Cassie... she's not going to take this well.

I agree. She was a manipulative bitch then, and she is a manipulative bitch now.
That probably came right out of his father's mouth... oddly enough, you know who Frank reminds me of? Draco. Brainwashed and taught to parrot his father's bitter beliefs about the world and certain people... not much has changed in the wizarding world, huh?

“No human has ever inhabited this cabin,” he told her simply.
Damn it, Harry's really pissing me off right now. I get why he feels that way about Bella and although he had no right to torture her the way he did, he's perfectly entitled to feel the way he does. But to talk to Bella's niece like that! That's just wrong...

Petition Against Immoral Enslavement.
How
do you think of all of this, Elle?! do you make some of it up as you go or did you have it all somehow in your head by the time you had published chapter one? In any case, I'm loving this complex fic more and more. Keep it up!

Author's Response: Chuckles. The compliments regarding Lucus did not come from his own head. However, he does have some of the classic Malfoy arrogance. It's just not as pronounced as it was with Draco.

As for the Muggleborn students, at this point, stories about the Death Eaters would be getting rather popular. With Frank and Cassie going on the way they are, at least the Gryfs would be hearing about the Malfoys, and the story would be passed along, as it always was at Hogwarts.

I never thought of Harry commenting on Cassie's lack of werewolfness, however, I don't think he would. To make some kind of statement about it would bring more attention to it. This is the last thing Cassie or Remus would have wanted. Besides, I doubt it would help. The kids are probably well aware that she's not a werewolf; they simply want to be cruel to her.

Ah, and Cassie's comments about Harry. I actually almost cut that out. But I decided it was fair. Cassie knew Harry all of her life. Up until this incident with her aunt, he would have been kind to her. I don't think it would be impossible for her to feel for him. She's not trying to defend him. She simply understands that he's hurting. It's hard for Cassie to fully turn on someone. However, when she is particularly angry, she will lash out at him, as seen in previous chapters. She hates what he has done, and she isn't trying to make excuses for him. She's just very confused and very hurt. I hope that makes sense. I had trouble working with her feelings surrounding this myself.

Comparing Frank to Draco. Someone else did this the other night in an AIM chat. I actually didn't realize it on my own, but it's absolutly true. The two have a lot in common. It's also important to remember that Draco probably said a lot of things that he didn't exactly mean when he was trying to be like his father.

As for how do I think of this stuff? Who knows. It just pops into my head. I have no idea where my ideas come from. But by the time chapter one was published most of the story had been written, and most of it was planned within a week or so of dreaming it up. I knew that Cassie was going to start a petition before I started writing chapter one. I can think of only a couple of major events that were planned later in the story. I can't tell you what they are because neither of them have happened yet.

Anyway, thanks for another wonderful review. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. :D

Reviewer: Hansolohpfrk
Date: 08/24/07 11:04
Chapter: A Promise

Teehee Elle.

*sighs* I just absolutely love this fic! It's one of my all-time favorites. =)

Your characterization of Bellatrix is superb, and the way you placed it and the timing? It is wonderful! Bellatrix would have been OOC had it not been for everything that happened to her, but you pulled it off very well and just...*sighs*

Don't get me started on Harry's characterization, LOL. It's also just great! He would be the type to hold grudges...you've done a great job with him, too!

And Cassie? She's a likable character to the extreme, I love her!

*headdesk* I could call you 'brilliant' and 'a mastermind' and it would still be an understatement. =) This is one of the greatest fics I've ever read by anyone, and I think that it's wonderful!

Much love,

Hanni

Author's Response: *Hugs Hanni*

I don't know what else to say. Thank you so much. You really made me smile. *hugs again*

Reviewer: SEAMUS_124
Date: 08/24/07 4:45
Chapter: A Promise

Oh, very nice. Harry, nice? What is this? =]. I was starving for this chapter all week and now its finally here I am craving the next chapter!

Snape has lost his vibe. Can anyone take him seriously now though?

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it.

Did anyone ever really take Sevy seriously? A few people might have feared him as a professor...

Reviewer: Lily Roxy
Date: 08/23/07 21:43
Chapter: Facing It

Gaah! I'm so late for these reviews! What kind of fan am I *buries face in hands in shame*. Anyways...

She didn’t deserve the wonderful life she had been given. Her husband had died and she couldn’t even respect his memory.
I had a feeling that Bella was going to run into this at some point. If she hadn't had this guilt fit by chapter 24, I was going to bring it up. Nice to know that was unecessary, I'm curious to see how Bella copes.

“I’ve been horrible to him,” she cried, fresh tears streaming from her eyes. She had no intention of sharing her guilt, but she found it impossible to keep it to herself. “I betrayed him.”
I feel so sorry for Bella... right now she's in a total lose/lose situation. Poor Bella has had enough of those to last a life time. I'm curious to see if she would ever feel comfortable bringing up Rodolphus to Severus... I'd love to see how he would cope with that touchy subject...

What if my relationship with Severus is something that he could never forgive?”
If Bella was operating under that logic, wouldn't she be afraid that Rodolphus would be angry at her since she had been living with a bunch of blood traitors?

I need to see him and say a real goodbye.
For some reason I think Bella's going to meet someone there that she doesn't want to. Then again, I just reread the chapter "Bathilda's Secret". In any case, it looks like there's gonna be another emotional chapter... can Sevy tag along:)?

The dark tombstones contrasted with the white snow to give off an air or despair that was perfect for a cemetery.
Beautiful description here, Elle. You really know how to show what you're thinking through your fics.

The snow crunched under her feet as she walked. It was such an ordinary sound. It seemed so out of place when she was going to visit her husband’s grave for the first time. There was nothing ordinary about that.
The narration in this chapter is even better than usual. Not only can you paint the scenery of the graveyard, you give us a really clear view of what's going through Bella's mind and it's all very realistic.

After her pep talk with herself,
For some reason, this made me giggle:).

"Out of character behavior for Severus, huh?”
I really like the style that Bella's talking to her husband's gravestone. Nothing formal, just saying what's on her mind. I prefer this much more than if Bella had rehearsed a speech or something.

Her face was no longer skeletal, her eyes sparkled again, and her skin appeared healthy. She looked human again, and it was all because of her forgiving family.
It's nice to get these little updates:). Even the little things like how she looks. All the little improvements are nice to hear about even if we should've known they happened anyways. *sigh* You think of everything, Elle.

Jerking her head up, Bella saw her sister studying them intently.
Wow, just in the nick of time. Narcissa seems to have replaced Gringotts in this fic for Hermione and the Black/Tonks family.

He gets so difficult if he goes for twenty-four hours without seeing you.
Cute... only the great Elle could make a fic where Sevy is this adorable without making him totally OOC:).

Sadly, she realized that things could never be like they used to be; far too much had changed.
Hmm... quite a gloomy ending to this chapter. Could we have a few more chapters on the fluffy side?

Author's Response: Wow! I think this is one of your longest reviews yet. And yet the only thing I can think of to say is Thank You! *hugs* I think this is one of the sweetest reviews I have ever gotten. *hugs again* You have really made my night!

Reviewer: Her My Own EE
Date: 08/20/07 12:11
Chapter: Fallen

Oh my goodness! All the kiddies & Bella in serious trouble. Maybe some good will come of it... :)

Author's Response: Maybe...;)

Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: SEAMUS_124
Date: 08/20/07 2:32
Chapter: Fallen

Oh Damn! Frank

Author's Response: Thanks for reading!

Reviewer: whimsy1016
Date: 08/19/07 21:20
Chapter: Fallen

I love this story. I just sat down and read the entire thing, straight through, and I am so fascinated. Even though I pretty much hate Bellatrix, she was always my favorite "villian-type". I love your take on her, that there is goodness deep down there somewhere. So great, I can't wait for an update!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. Your review really means a lot. Thanks again! :D

Reviewer: CrazyAboutShipping
Date: 08/19/07 0:44
Chapter: Caught in the Act

why haven't you read the deathly hallows yet?

Author's Response: I have read DH. This entire story was written prior to DH, and it will be finished as it was written. That's what it has a Book Seven Disregarded Warning and an AU warning.

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 08/18/07 20:06
Chapter: Fallen

Hmmm a bit confusing, but i guess it'll all be explained next chapter. How come they all fell of the cliff? Did they jump off to follow Cassie or something? :P

Author's Response: *chuckles* They all fell off the cliff because of bad balance, I suppose. They were all leaning over it trying to grab her...

Anyway, thanks for the review. I hope the next chapter helps to smooth this one out a bit. :D

Reviewer: Pissenoffanis
Date: 08/18/07 20:05
Chapter: A Surprise

I feel sorry for Hermione... Her conversations with Harry just keep going round in circles... I really hope Harry becomes himself again soon!

Author's Response: *smiles* Harry just needs a little wake up call. :D

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