Reviews For Outward and In
Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 04/10/11 20:19
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hello,

This was a great insight into your interpretation of a character whose only really mentioned in canon, as well as a great coming-of-age story. You really nailed the emotions she would be feeling - a little bit of sadness at leaving, but mostly the excitement of entering into the world.

Just a small nitpick - you wrote but the like the Gryffindor she was - you should cut out the first 'the' (as in "But like the Gryffindor she was").

I liked the idea of the mirror, and how it reflects the change she has gone through and will go through. The ending, with the line As she walked out of her childhood, it seemed the world held nothing if not opportunity for Dorcas Meadowes. was a great way of finishing the story.

~Katrina

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 04/17/07 16:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey ... this is good! Really inspiring. I liked Dorcas, although there wasn't much of her we saw.

I've become mildly interested in the character these last couple of days, and I decided to do a summary search to see whether anything interesting came up ... and this was just too intriguing to pass by!

It's strange this only has one review so far ... it's only short, yeah, but it's still good. I liked the thing with the mirror.

Anyway, well done!

Reviewer: Striped Candycane
Date: 03/18/07 2:20
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a very interesting coming-of-age one shot! The descriptions are effective, the emotions vivid, and the main character well-drawn: even though the reader only gets a brief glimpse of her life, they can still understand and relate to her personality. The last sentence summed this piece perfectly, especially the "walked out of her childhood" part. Great work!

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for your feedback!

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