Remarkably written. I could feel the heartwrenching pain that Harry was experiencing over Ginny's death. Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you, I'm glad you liked it! Thanks for reviewing!rnrn~Kathy
Very angsty peom. I really don't understand why some people think it is funny.... I see romance and darkness but not comedy... I just don't see it....
ANYWAYS, like I said before- this is quite dark, but well written. The only part of the poem I have to direct your attention to is this line:
and you no where to be found, This just sort of confuses me... Isn't "nowhere" one word.... *checks online dictionary* Yup. Any ways, I think I know what you meant... it's just the wording kind of confuses me. But overall, this is a very good poem. I wish I could do free-verse. Maybe I'll try it sometime... Good job on this!
Author's Response: Thank you. I like your username, very creative and funny...teehee, unlike this poem, which is NOT supposed to be funny -glares at people who think it is funny-. Haha, I jest. Anyways, thank you for reviewing! ~Kathy
I believe it was quite interesting. I for one, prefer to use rhymes somewhere in the poem, but yours is beautiful all the same. Sad...but indeed, excellent.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Wow, I feel so flattered. So many positive comments...-faints from amount- ~Kathy
Very depressing. I thought it was kind of funny though.................
Author's Response: Umm...thank you? May I ask how it was funny? ~Kathy
Hello, Kathy! (Er, Kaemila does have a rather odd sense of humor. No offense, Kaemil...but this poem is dark *coughangstycough*. Just saying.)
At one point, I found that the wording seemed a bit...awkward.
She lies on the blood-stained ground,
with people like her around her.
I just think you used 'her' too much.
My only suggestion as to change that:
She lies on the blood-stained ground,
with people like her spread all around.
But whatever. Just my suggestion. =)
I think you have a good grasp of meter. When I read this poem aloud to myself there was a definite beat. Wonderful job.
Because you have a such good grasp of rhythm, I think you'd also be good at rhyming. You should seriously try it! I think it'd be awesome. (And I'm sorry if you have a rhyming poem up, and i just said that out of ignorance. I'm sure it is awesome, too.)
My favorite part:
Your soul has drifted to the beyond,
along with half of mine.
OMG! So sad, and emotional, and moving...
So - overall, wonderful job.
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful positive comments! I hope I can put up some limericks, because they rhyme, and they're fun to write soon! ~Kathy
Coolio! This was hilarious!
Author's Response: Umm...alright...you have a rather strange sense of humor...no offense...~Kathy
aw this was so sad! i am a hugemungous h/g shipper who ikes happy endings.
ya, you can imagine the hearache.
Anway, this was such a beautiful and moving poem with such soft and loving words while harry watched ginny dying...
Wait for me in heaven, love,
please wait at the golden gates.
So that after I have killed Voldemort,
Iíll come join you forever.
its just so beautiful and i choke up everytime i read it.
And you didn't use a rhyme scheme, i just realized, that's good for this genre..
Author's Response: Yup! Thanks for the very -looks at review- erm...long review! And I don't like rhyme schemes (unless I'm writing limericks, which are fun to write and rhyme with), I prefer free-stanza/free-verse/whatever-you-call-it. Anyways, thanks again for the review! I'm glad you liked it! :) ~Kathy
This description in the poem is absoultly amazing. I have never read in my whole small life time a poem in this great of detail. This is truely amazing and WHY isn't anyone reviewing this? It's very good! Keep it up! ~MJ
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm very glad you like my poetry, MJ! I must say, that poetry is one of the easiest things for me to write, especially free-stanza...anyways, thanks again for the wonderful positive comments! They've totally made my day! ~Kathy
yay 1st review um good job on the wordage.
Author's Response: Thanks! :) Glad you liked it. ~Kathy