That was pretty good. I really don't like Peter Pettigrew (at all - ever), but you seemed to portray him in a very realistic manner. I liked it, but I'm kind of curious as to why Peter thinks of Lily so much? Anyways...My only real 'criticism' is I think you put to l's in "Lily", when there's only one. But other then that, it was pretty much perfect. I look forward to more of your stories! :-)
Author's Response: thanks! sorry about the "l"s. :-) i just made up the qwhole idea of him liking lilly. james liked lilly. remus seemed to have a very close relationship even if not romantic with her. even snape likes her. it seems she was a pretty popular girl. i thought it made sense that a nothing like peter would be super into her. a big story is coming soon, The Administration. if you add me to your favoirtes youll know it as soon as its published.