Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 04/26/07 18:02
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

Woah- this is so beautiful. The whole thing is so deep- and it gives out so many emotions. As you read more and more- it just keeps getting deeper. And then the last two lines are so powerful. This is such a beautiful piece. I'm glad I read it.Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I am so glad that you liked it.

Reviewer: Moony 62442
Date: 03/17/07 15:40
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

I liked it! The last two lines are my favorite because they are so true, especially in this instance. That was wonderful!
~Miss Moony

Author's Response: Thanks Moony. it was emotionally driven so that fact that it has been so well recieved warms the cockles of my heart

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 03/14/07 7:21
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

wow. this was really good! i loved the first stanza most, i dont have a reason, i just love it the most! lol.

I love how you describe ginny's thought and you used exactly the right word in every line like 'murky', 'awry', 'conviction', e.t.c., it just portrays the mood very well :-)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. I love Ginny as a character and I always hope I do her justice.

Reviewer: samiseriouslyam
Date: 03/13/07 22:38
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

That's so...good/sad! *sniff* I'm favoriting this! Yay! Good poem!

Author's Response: Thank you so much, I just love that people are reading poetry.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 03/12/07 13:54
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

I love how all your poems end - they all seem to have this deep, underlying meaning that is revealed at the ending. This one was spectacular - I have often thought about how Ginny would feel, but have never written of it like this. This was just...so true to her.

I was reading the other reviews you have for this, and theres mentions of you feeling frustrated and useless. Well, I don't know you, but I just want you to know you aren't. I hope everything gets better, whatever it is.

Okay, moving on. My favorite part of this is the ending, of course. How do you choose your titles so well, anyways?

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Thanks for the sentiment, it was a momentary feeling due to my sisters drafting. Usually I try to leave the poem with a strong ending which usually guides my titles.

Reviewer: abbs866
Date: 03/12/07 10:12
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

Rivah, as I told you the first time I read this, it is amazing. The rhymes seem to fit better than anything, and it just flows wonderfullly. I can tell that the emotions is genuine. This is really good, Rivah.
-Abby
P.S. I read the author's notes, and you are quite welcome. Think nothing of it, and never hesitate to talk with me.

Author's Response: Thank you for the sentiment and the friendship. I actually was contemplative when you said "and how does that make you feel?" I think it was actually what started the poem, my need to purge the uselessness. And I promise not to censor myself and will post something ever so dark and angsty soon.

Reviewer: nuw255
Date: 03/12/07 9:55
Chapter: For Those Left Behind

Hello there, Rivah. I just wanted to drop you a quick note saying that I think this poem does a very good job of portraying Ginny's worry (and a bit of her frustration) after being left behind. Although it doesn't seem to flow quite as easily as some of your other poems, I don't really see that as a bad thing in this case, as it only helps set the desperate tone. I especially liked the phrase "I am riddled with doubt," although I think I would have liked to see the word 'riddled' capitalized. ;-) I haven't seen a new post from you in a while, so it's good to see you're still writing. I look forward to another installation of your chaptered story when you get the chance. *hint hint*

~Nuwanda

Author's Response: I knew that the meter was off but i agree with you it sets the tone of realism and desperation. As Abby said this poem was totally emotion driven and only in re reading it did I see it's connection to HP. I honestly was more intent of purging some frustration and let whatever was upsetting me flow freely. Becuase the connection to HP was an afterthought I actually would have never thought to capitalize riddle. It is an ingenious idea. As for the chaptered story, I am waiting for my second beta to finish. As soon as it gets back to me, I will put it in. I am actually almost done with chapter three.

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