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Reviews For Almost Perfect

Name: Equinox Chick (Signed) · Date: 02/02/09 9:41 · For: Storm Cloud
This is an interesting story about a much underused, and often maligned, character. I like how you've made Lavender reasonably strong throughout the piece. She may be shallow and superficial but she's got her man and she wants to keep him. What is it about Ron, I wonder, that makes her fight to keep him when she knows he wants out? In an odd way, odd because others' opinions seem to matter so much to her, Lavender's love (?) for Ron stands out as something not affected by public opinion. The Patil twins, for instance, think she should be trying to get Dean back. I like the fact that she knows her limits and realises that trying to tempt Dean away from Ginny would be fruitless.

I love the allusions to the rain clouds all the way throughand the last two lines are extremely good.

Name: nikkiolapotter (Signed) · Date: 08/08/07 13:46 · For: Storm Cloud
This was definitely worth the read. I loved the different metaphors you used to describe Hermione-

Hermione is her storm cloud, her inkblot on a good essay, her spaghetti sauce stain on a beautiful set of robes.

It was quite refreshing to read a fanfiction using the present tense, and for the most part, you pulled it off. I enjoyed how you actually presented a reason to "Won-Won" and "Lav-Lav"'s constant snogging, which definitely showed a more human side to Lavender. She may be "perfect" but she still has insecurities just like everyone else.

I absolutely loved the last sentence:

Blue as the sky is, there is cloud on the horizon. Lavender can wear a raincoat and carry an umbrella, but it will rain nonetheless, and she will get wet.

It was very creative. You clearly have a talent in using metaphors, which was very nice.

Although this fic was quite short, it was still worth the read. I would've liked to seen a little more description in the beginning, like some background on her relationships with the people around her, i.e. her parents, her friends, etc.

Keep on doing what you're doing! Great work!

Name: Lylian (Signed) · Date: 08/08/07 4:33 · For: Storm Cloud
Wow. That one was amazing. I like the views from the minor characters. Because sometimes I feel like a minor character myself.

Name: violetta (Signed) · Date: 07/26/07 10:06 · For: Storm Cloud
Hmm...no attacks on Lavender...............pretty good story.
You have talent. So hard for me not to bash on Lavender. Must control self...

Name: DarkJoker (Signed) · Date: 07/06/07 19:08 · For: Storm Cloud
...never bothered to see the story from Lav's point of view...looks good. Nice Job! :)

Name: HPFanatik (Signed) · Date: 07/03/07 22:06 · For: Storm Cloud
this is very good! i love your portrayal of lavender! this is very sweet! you should write another one!

Name: helgaandgodric (Signed) · Date: 06/30/07 15:12 · For: Storm Cloud
Hm. I liked seeing the insecurities of Lavender, as well as her feelings towards Hermione. We all know that she got a little jealous of Hermione, especially later in their relationship, but it was nice seeing what you thought they might be. Also, I thought you really had Lavender’s character down. She seems to only care about the physical part of the relationship, and talks about how “girls like her cannot afford anything more than the most superficial feelings.” I specifically loved that phrase, and thought that it really encapsulated Lavender into one person.

Aside from that, though, I am a little confused about one thing. You say, “The perfect friends, Parvati and Padma, who make her feel like the third twin.” However, I was not aware the Padma and Lavender were friends. Whenever we encounter Lavender, she is either with Ron, or with Parvati. We never see her with Padma.

Overall, though, I would have liked a little bit more, like how the picnic ended or the reader finds out what Ron was trying to tell Lavender. I did like, it though, it just seemed to end very abruptly.

Name: Prongs92 (Signed) · Date: 06/27/07 23:25 · For: Storm Cloud
OMG SO GOOD!!! The metaphors were great! That is a good quality for a writer to possess. Anyways, what I really like is that you made the audience really feel sympathetic towards Lavender, a character who is disliked in the books (at least by Ron/Hermione shippers). I really, really enjoyed it! Keep it up! But, hey! What's wrong with brown/brown (Brown haired and brown eyed)? I'm that! No, I'm just playing. Good job!

Name: crazyabouthermione95 (Signed) · Date: 04/05/07 17:34 · For: Storm Cloud
It was an AH-MAZING STORY!! I may be a R/Hr shipper, but I still enjoyed it. I loved the metaphors you used. It really added to the effect of the story. Your writing style is amazing and I can't wait to see more from you!!!

Author's Response: Thanks you! I'm R/Hr too, but I doubt if I'll ever write them- I'm better with rarepairs. More will come soon, and again- thanks for the sweet compliments!

Name: SugarxSpunxQuill (Signed) · Date: 04/03/07 8:09 · For: Storm Cloud
I absolutly love the metaphor you have used, in which Hermione is the rain cloud about to rain down on Lavender! Rain Hermione, rain!!!

Author's Response: I could lecture you about cruelty to minor characters, but I won't. :D Glad you liked, even though you're *obviously* an R/Hr shipper.

Name: livingmylife07 (Signed) · Date: 03/31/07 11:44 · For: Storm Cloud
I love your details and metaphors....you have a really great writing style! Keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you! I will keep it up... just as soon as I have the time.

Name: LoOnY_for_Harry (Signed) · Date: 03/24/07 18:11 · For: Storm Cloud
That was really, really sweet! I loved the underlying themes of the R/Hr ship, and the way you described Lavender.... she was never really perfectly imagined in my mind, but she is now! Maybe you didn't mean for this story to be funny, but I was giggling the whole time at your subtle wit. Great job, as always! Can't wait for more from you!

Author's Response: Subtle wit! Why don't English teachers say things like that? You are the really, really, sweet one. Glad I could help you picture Lavender, and that you liked the story! More coming... soon... provided the "we're closing the site" thing really was a joke. Happy April Fool's Day!

Name: XColliFlourX (Signed) · Date: 03/10/07 3:53 · For: Storm Cloud
loved it! :D
good work !

Author's Response: Mucho gracias, Colli =)

Author's Response: Of cousre, I don't really speak Spanish, so that either means thank you or good night...

Name: num (Signed) · Date: 03/08/07 21:00 · For: Storm Cloud
This is one of the best one shots I've ever read! An interesting perspective - usually I wouldn't give a damn about Lavender, but you gained my sympathy. I love the idea of Hermione having this unconscious power over the popular and otherwise self-assured girl.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm so glad I made you "give a damn" about Lavender (who wants you to know that she doesn't want a damn, but would appreciate new clothes). And I doubt that Hermione's power is ENTIRELY unconcious ;D

Name: lucilla_pauie (Signed) · Date: 03/08/07 12:54 · For: Storm Cloud
very canon! *evil grin*

Nicely done, quinn. And guess what? I wrote a fic entitled "Just Perfect"--ron-hermione. Its right here. Maybe we could tell readers to read them in tandem, hehe. Will make them more aapreciative of the pair. ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! (Bonus points for using my first name.) I'm so happy to get "very canon" instead of "OMGosh Lavender is soooo OOC I hate her in canon!" I shall go and right your fic right now! =)

Author's Response: Er... I mean read, not right. Which I did, and quite enjoyed it.

Author's Response: Er... I mean read, not right. Which I did, and quite enjoyed it.

Name: ballerinaprincess (Signed) · Date: 03/08/07 11:38 · For: Storm Cloud
i thought that this was a really excellent story! You described Lavender just the way i pictured her, because we don't know much about her. All of it seemed like things that JK could have put in her 6th book.

Author's Response: Thanks! Jo would not, of course, want to portray Lavender in a good light- we're all supposed to be too irritated that she's in the way of R/Hr to consider her feelings. But every minor character deserves a fic!

Name: Stefanie (Signed) · Date: 03/08/07 11:14 · For: Storm Cloud
Wow, good story. I like how its from Lavender's perspective.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! Lavender is an underappreciated character.

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