Author's Response: THANK YOU VERRRY MUCH! :-D
Author's Response: Heather!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOW R U!! UR NEVER ONLINE AND I WANNA SQUEE AND BE ALL OBSESSIVE ABOUT DH WTH YOU!!!
I really like this. I love this world taht all the poems are set in. It's perfectly mysterious, which allows our own interpretations to come through. It does seem a sort of ghost world though (just my feeling) so I hope that you haven't predicted who will die...*If they die I will come after you*.
It really didn't seem that long. In my opinion, the length was needed.
Author's Response: *takes a few steps away...*...hehe...NO THEYRE NOT DEAD!! theyre following destiny's path, in destiny's world, which is like a dream! ginny and hermione find harry and ron tired, sweaty, and beaten up (but still good lookin'!), and take them away so they can have their happily-ever-afters (UNLIKE SOME STORIES IVE READ!!! :-))...no theyre not dead, far from it....(i think ill go to bed now, because my fatigue is contributing to my cheesy answers/ excessive use of caps lock)...
hey sarah...how are ya??? [=
Author's Response: im good! Ur never online anymore, i wa wondering where you got to! :-)
That was good. I really liked the flow and the different lengths of stanzas. I think my favorite was the second stanza because of all the times it says "land." Usually, I would consider that repititon, but it sounds really good here. Great job. Keep up the good work.
Author's Response: Thanks for the Review! I dont think iever notice what im doing to my poems, it just happens, lol!
I am well, thanks ^^
Ugh...I hate school...went to chicago fo three days and missed out on a lifetime of hw...dear god.
Hope you're having a good time. How's school for you?
Bought Conversations with J.K. Rowling at a book sale...it's pretty good, ever read it?
OK, bye for now!
Author's Response: im havin an ok time. school ends in exactly one month for me! i cant wait for summer! Nope, never heard of the book but it sounds interesting...
its just school. its almost finished though!!!!! =)
Author's Response: i know right! thank god it's almost summer! the only big thing separating me from now and the vacation are my finals at the end of june :-)!! otherwise everythings cool :-)
Author's Response: HEYYYYYYYYYY Heather! Where u been???
It's me again!!
Just wanted to say hi, I'm back, I'm still alive *gasp* and everything's good. Do you have any ideas for your next poem? Are you writing it, maybe? I hope you're planning to add something...
Have you ever read Twilight? I know, random and un-HP related, but it's a great book.
Seventh book comes out soon!!!! (well, kinda)
I really cannot wait for your next poem. This one's beautiful, though. I'm favoriting it.
~the Dragon :)
Author's Response: Hey JJ! Im happy to see your live and well (ok, maybe the well part is questionable :-P)....Anyway, for now im kinda taking a long break from posting anything on mnff, i mean i did post 5 poems within 4 months! thats hight for me! I get inspired pretty rarely but baby when it comes its here to stay for days! I CANT WAT FOR DH!!! S.K.
It is so NOT ridiculously long. Sometimes long poems are great and you need that length to make it is as good as it can be... and this is definitely one of those poems. I like how each girl is on a journey to find the one they love. It is just such a great idea. And the little ending and prolougues are interesting. Nice work. ^_^
Author's Response: thanks again (they should seriously make some kind of dictionary for author's responses, because 'thank you' is just SO lame)! i think the best way to end a long journey of poems to go into the mind of women..only because, in my huble opinion, we have more touching and loving and poetic thoughts ..*runs away from frustrated boys*....and im happy you love the ending, i LOVE my happily ever-afters! :-D
Ah! Hi! Thanks for all the reviews you left me - I love randomness! Anyway, you know I love this poem. A lot. I love the entire little 'verse you created...I just think it is so...cool. *loves*
The words in this poem flow so well. You have an amazing style! I just love reading it...over...and over...lol.
So...how are you? Writing any more? *wink wink nudge nudge* Okay, sorry for this random review, just wanted to come and say hi again...
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Kate
Author's Response: lol well thanks again! i dunno if ill be writing summore, as i said my inspiration comes all at once rather than in short bursts so often, which wa swhy i could actually strectch the poems along 4 months and actually make a poem universe. anywho, you might not see me around, cuz im too lazy to even leave a review these days, but im always checkin round! thanks kate!
AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH im soo frustrated i sent you a review like 30 times last week...nothing came through...and it was soo long and detailed. Anyway i loooove this poem soo beautiful(i know you here a lot of that) but really it is....your soo talented and gifted....i could NEVER write like you. grrr anyway how are you??? [=
Author's Response: hi!! im good! thanks for the review (its about time! :-P)..im a bit tired, thats all, i went tothe mall today AND i reserved my copy of DH at the bookstore! YAYYYYY!
WOWSERS! You really are MONDO talented when it comes to writing poetry. That you are merely thirteen is offensive! Most adults don't have half your savy with a poem. You told the story of Hermione and Ginny beautifully. They both have this dream and desire to get to the one they love but yet he resists and is not there...but in their dreams they find them and hold them tight! Now they must wake up and make it reality! YOU ROCK! It's just too beautiful the way you you meld your words together and form poems...Love you! XOXO WISE OWL XOXO by the way...HOW DARE anyone review before me!?!?
Author's Response: AW i love ur use of language in my reviews! they make me feel cool! *puts on sunglasses and leather jacket*...i love it that u love it because i LOVE sharing my ideas with you guys and telling my story, you know? LUV YOU TOO!................and its not anyone's fault but urs:-P...btw, its mothers day here in lebanon and can u believe its like 75 degrees in MARCH?! i NEED to get used to this mediterranean weather!!
OMG. I'm back.
Hi!!!!! I'm so sorry I haven't been on! ^_^' School's KILLING me. But I'm back. How long has it been, anyway?
GREAT POEM!! I went back and reread the others, I think this one's the best. I don't think it's too long, either. I really like the way you described them, especially Ginny.
Your poems are great! I hope you keep them up!
Author's Response: JJ!! Hi! long time no see! like 2 months! I'm so happy that you like it, and that ur back, its not mnff without you! (and i need ur constant reviewing, hehe :-P) Anyway, welcome back, and thanks again!
Wow, lady magician!!!!!!!! That was sooooo good! I totally agree with what everyone said! 1000/10!!!
Author's Response: thanks for the review, kaemilia! im happy you liked it! i have other poems up if you want to read them! hehe
I loved it, another beautiful poem. Both sweet and sad... you're very talented, I'm envious. ;)
Dang, I just read through your bio... *runs off crying*
Anyway, my faveorite line from your poem was:
Now let us retreat from this World of
Let those children have their happily-ever-after,
For it is high time that dreams came true,
High time that Destiny awoke,
To lead everyone home,
And high time for this wonderful, magical story,
To Finally come to its End...
It was so beautiful; like something you'd hear in all those stories about the Medieval ages. Bit of an odd connection.
Like I said, another wonderful poem.
((This is my longest review... more than three lines! lol.))
Author's Response: THANK YOU!!! i been witing for ur review!...Everyone seems to love that stanza the most, hehe, it was actually a last-minute edition. anyway, im happy you enjoyed, thanks!...oh a heart long reviews so make 'em as looong as u want!!!!!!!!!!!!
Hey, Sarah! I'm baaaaaack!
Okay, first off, just wanted to mention that you have what seems to be two gaps between lines, and like four between stanzas. Not that that's major or anything, it is just that it could be a turn off to potential readers (reviewers!). Just edit it or something and it'll be fine. :-D
Okay, don't know if I mentioned this in my last reviews *looks shifty* but I love the two bookend stanzas you have. They really make the poem...I dunno, cooler. :-) More interesting.
Oh, and I love how you capitalize 'Dreamery' and 'Finally' and 'End' in the last stanza. I just thought it was cool.
Last but not least, this is another wonderful poem by you. *expects more*
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates (or Kate, since I never told you my name)
Author's Response: *checks poem*..really? hmph. i didnt do that. i just fixed a few mistakes in it and the gaps happen. off to fix it! Thanks again forreviewing, Kate, it means lots to me! :-)
eeee...warm fuzzies. which have nothing to do with the hot chocolate I just finished drinking...*yay windchill factor...* no, I have warm fuzzies because Sarah's writing is so brilliant. it lights up the...computer screen, for lack of a better word, but it is, really and truly, a masterpiece. seriously, if you hadn't told me that was a HP fanfic, I never would have guessed... except for the lumos-ing part... but whatever. that contributes even more to how your writing lights up, and I'm amazed. write more NOW! *see who's demanding updates now? oh, how hypocritical the world is...* Love and hugs, and on a scale of one to ten, you get fourteen. you rock, girl!
Author's Response: lol. Thanks, Juli! hehe, the good old windchill factor. :-). Hypocrite, hehe. Ehahaha. lol. i have absolutely nothing to say. I wish i did, cuz u said a bunch of nice stuff!!!!..much love to you two, and thanks for the 14! hehe.
That is so beautiful, so perfect, with an unpredictable flow - and I agree with Euphrates, that's just what I thought when I read that verse. That's all for now!
Author's Response: Thank you, JewellPotterFan! You never fail to review my poems! How faithful :-) Im so happy you liked it (i have o come up with something better to say!), and that line was one of my favorites, too, and it was a last-minute addition, actually, i think i only added it when i was typing it on my word-processor. hehe. Thanks again! buh-bye for now!
*hearts new word*
Wow, lady magician. *claps* I love this. Really. I love the simplicity of it, and the length. :D
I wish I could think of something to say! I mean, this blew me away. Wonderful ending to this 'verse. And no, I am not just saying that.
Favorite part *drum roll please*:
For it is high time that dreams came true,
High time that Destiny awoke,
To lead everyone home,
Hee hee...somebody shake her awake. Okay, besides from my randomness, I love that part because it is so true. Gosh, they all deserve a break, you know? Yeah.
So...*reads A/N* WHAT?! Don't say maybe you'll write more. Just write more.
So, I promise that I'll come back and review again...you know how I am.
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
P.S. - I love the way this is written, with your little intro and all...yeah. :-)
Author's Response: YAY! HI! im soo happy ur first reviewer! by the way, call me sarah, my real name, lady magician just sounds so odd. :-) Im ecstatic that the mods didn't take forever with this, and im sooooooooooooo happy that its out! You think its a good wrap-up? Can;t wait to see ur next review!! Im so happy this just made my day!!!!