I love Tom Riddle! (as you can probably see from my username...)
Very nice! I found this to be quite dark, and I felt pity for Ginny, but I also found this to be perfect for filling in those missing moments. Great job. ;)
>.< Now we all know why you used to teach DADA. VV, this is a beauty!
I liked the beggining, where you hint at the workings of a Hurcrox, the fact that he does not remember his life beyond the point of his making, the fact that it thirsts for re-birth.
I also loved how you described the conscience, the 'Parental Guidance', and how he explains his lack of it by saying that he grew up an orphan, when in fact he has just been repressing it, though it does exist.
I like how Ginny, whose innocence he stole is the one to awaken a little bit if innocence in him - a little bit of concience.
The fact that he had to learn of his death, and to pretend that he aproves of his destruction - that got me. I love this story, you captured it just right, in my opinion, at least.
I liked it! The characterization of Ginny was perfect! The detail that you included towards the middle was beautiful!
Interesting, the cracks into which he slips, the little resentments and angers that he uses. I like the way you have him and his other self - 'I made myself.' It shows up the paradox of diary!Tom nicely.
"You cannot have him." So heroic for a little girl. I was a bit thrown by Harry's part; I thought he would be fairly hard to corrupt, but Tom considered him easy. Was that Tom's miscalculation, or your take on CoS?
Moaning Myrtle - I'd thought that was her ghostly name. It seems odd that Tom uses it. And I'm babbling now - I was only just reviewing to say I liked it.
EW! kissing a dead girl? what a freak. and I thought holding my dead hamster was sick. other than that I absolutly loved it.
I don't think I've ever read a story from the perspective of Tom's memory before. It's very interesting. There are a thousand little details in this story, about Tom and Ginny and the way their minds work, that I never would have thought of, but make perfect sense now that you write about them. Anyway, love the story; great job.
What a disturbed mind. But I love your portrayal of Tom Riddle! Not a lot of people manage to show that insanity but the clear head and lust for power. You really do a good job of it. Also, I like how you show Ginny, as someone whose strength Riddle doesn't exactly understand or accept - but it's there, isn't it? :D Really good one-shot!
What a great story! I absolutely loved how you characterized both Ginny and Voldemort You made both of them so human, it was really touching. I always thought that one of the things that made HP so great is that the main antagonist is an actual character, not simply an embodiment of some vague, evil force, and I think you illustrated that quite nicely! Great job! :D
Wow. This is very effectively chilling. I like diary-Tom's self-awareness; he knows he is a sociopath with no conscience. And then it's very interesting to have that conscience awaken at the thought of stealing Ginny's innocence, even though it doesn't mind the thought of murder. I wonder if this tiny vestigial conscience was part of Tom Riddle, or if it's only diary-Tom's. If the latter, did he acquire it through stealing Ginny's soul?
Author's Response: Oooh, now there's an interesting idea! A few reviews down, I rambled a little on how consciences kick in at different points in different people. I really like this idea of having borrowed a little from Ginny, though! Thanks for reviewing!
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wow. this is intens, very well written. i especially like how it ends, with how the kiss can wait. it's interesting to know what a scrap of a soul is feeling and thinking..
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Wow. I love your charachterization. I never thought about Riddle and how the book worked. Very interesting!
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Moments In The Dark is a glorious montage of whispers and caresses to the reader. The thrill of it is that the whole thing seems stolen, missing from someone elseís life, and we know where it went. This is not a new concept, nor one that has been overplayed so it easy for us to slip into the dark world of Tom Riddleís seduction of Ginny Weasley. What really make this story such a feat is that there is actually very little physical description. It is told in the age-old tradition of myth-like quality making weeks seem like moments. The beauty of the simplicity is so carefully constructed in this passage. Tom Riddleís bold voice never questions, only allowing short statements, leaving us with only tantalizing tidbits of his psyche.
I bring her to the Chamber just to see if I can. The outer self does not remember afterward, only suspecting she has missed something, or done something. The darker soul within is fascinated to learn of a place everyone else considers a myth. Her best friend has given her a secret.
Moments in the Dark is once traditional and revolutionary, traditional in the easy gothic tradition of dark chambers and almost-stolen kisses and revolutionary in the brilliant portrayal of Tom Riddle. Vindictus Viridianís Riddle does not beg for our love nor sneer at it. He presents his thoughts clearly and with the eloquence the cold-blooded killer. What allows him to pull it off is that he never really admits to being conflicted in what he is going to do, and yet all the while we know or at least hope that he is.
That self I thought I did not have stirs, asking if this is truly something I want to remember for the eternity I mean to live.
Even then it is not even Tom who admits that he is unsure, but that a part of him that is /not/ him is conflicted. This fiction is the grittiness of two people in denial slowly slipping into the primal patterns of lust and blood, clothed in the gothic prose of Vindictus Viridian. Regaurdless of its brilliance the piece of work still does have itís faults, namely when Tom waxes philosophical. Itís out of place because the Tom Vindictus has introduced to us is so upfront and immediate. However not only is this segment out of character with the Tom she has slipped into our subconscious but it is confusing as well.
I have learned that most persons have a threefold nature. There is the public self, usually bland and uninteresting. There is the monitor, a mother or father figure, who checks in and pokes its nose into the business of its perpetually-scrutinized subject.
Here it appears that Tom is talking about another person while describing the versions of one ís self, even describing it the confusion leaks out. Besides this small fault the story is really one of the best one-shots I have the privilege to read and I recommend you read it too.
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it. Somehow it did seem to me that Tom Riddle might have been one of those teenaged boys who dabbles in philosophy but isn't as good at it as he thinks he is -- it's a type, and I used that to some degree to inform this character. Also, I feel that most people have some threshold of evil they will not cross, though sometimes it is some odd little out-of-place thing that doesn't seem to fit with their character. For instance, Hitler was quite fond of children and was kind to them -- even the ones on their way to the gas chamber. Tom is finding his own edge of acceptability here. He can manipulate, possess, and kill, but kissing a girl so much younger than he is makes him hesitate. Still, he hates to limit himself, and so he puts it off for another moment. Thanks for reviewing!
A suberb Tom/Ginny piece, and Tom is spot-on IC. I love his attack of conscious and desire to kiss Ginny. I applaude you *applause*
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A good inside look of what Tom Riddle may have been thinking when Ginny was writing in the diary. I liked it a lot!
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