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Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 14:00 · For: 45 - Wizard War II
Yet another wonderfully written chapter. And you've left us with a cliffie aswell. I love all this behind the scenes stuff that fills in the gaps of canon. Can't wait for more.

Author's Response: Thank you, thank you. *Takes deep bow* More is on the way.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/08/08 19:53 · For: Prologue
This chapter moved a bit too quickly for my liking. I wish you had spent more time on the events at the MoM rather than jumping right into the retrieval of the ring. But I understand that you have your own agenda! I don't like that Dani and Severus aren't going to be allowed to communicate directly. They are best when they are together.

I am trying to figure out what happened in August, or even whether you're referring to an event from the book.

I have written multiple reviews of chapters in the past and have never been denied because I had already reviewed. (I tend to forget things and end up posting 2 [or more] reviews back-to-back.) So I don't think that will be a problem.

Keep writing! I am intrigued....

Author's Response: I'm so glad you didn't have trouble posting the review. I've had trouble in the past...granted, not with this site. rnrnI didn't want to rehash the events at MoM, JKR did such a wonderful job. Daniella wouldn’t have been there anyway. There was no place to fit her character into the battle. It just wouldn’t have been right. Her job is always behind the scenes. We have to see the reason for what Albus is doing and he’s dealing with his “situation” at school/with Draco.rnrnAs for Dani and Severus, this is only chapter 45 of 65, have no fear…hint, hint. After all, this story is about them.rnrnThe reference to August is to give you a place in time. Pettigrew is living with Severus, and Severus (according to the books) has risen in his standing with Voldemort. Another development is about to unfold before school goes back, and Book six is about to begin.rnrnHope you like the rest.rnrnDanirn

Name: lostinside1 (Signed) · Date: 07/08/08 19:19 · For: 45 - Wizard War II
oooooo i liked this chapter. :)

Author's Response: Happy to please.rnDani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 06/30/08 18:26 · For: 45 - Wizard War II
Hmm, I can write a review of this chapter, but I can't read it yet.

Author's Response: That's because it hasn't been validated yet. Unfortunately, now that you have written something, I don't think the site will allow you to review it. It will say that you already did. Bummer. Validation usually takes about a week or so. Dani

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 06/30/08 17:44 · For: 44 - Happy Anniversary
it's so interesting how you manage to span so much time and note both the things that change and the things that don't in Dani and Severus's relationship. They are very much a married couple, and yet, since they spend so much time apart, they share exceptional feelings. i found the part you wrote about children very interesting, because i had been wondering if you were going to address that at all. I hope it all turns out okay....

Author's Response: There is still a long way to go. This story has 65 chapters and takes you right to and past the Battle of Hogwarts. But, this was my passion. I adore Severus and knew he needed a strong, supportive woman behind him. :-D Dani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 06/30/08 12:32 · For: 44 - Happy Anniversary
Yay, he's back! Now, I 've lost track--would this be toward the end of OotP? I was SO happy to see your update today. Thank you!

Author's Response: Oh, yes, he's definately back. This is before the battle at the Ministry. Stay tuned. Dani

Name: monicasowl (Signed) · Date: 06/28/08 10:09 · For: Prologue
wow I am new to this but this is excellent. Keep up the good work

Author's Response: Yay! A new voice! Ah, but did you read the first two in the trilogy? Kind of helps with the flow of the story. I'm so glad you're enjoying it, though. It's my baby. Dani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 06/16/08 17:03 · For: 43 - Serving the Order
Still no Severus....
Seriously, though, a few days ago I was just thinking I hadn't got any Mugglenet updates lately, and hoping I would get one for your story. Voila! The next time I checked my e-mail, there it was!

I like how you are using Dani to explain how Dumbledore knew so much. And I think it is interesting that you had already written him as so work-centered ("his idea of small talk") even before DH came out.

As always, good work. I look forward to updates.

Author's Response: Don't worry, Severus is not forgotten. Tee hee heernI always did find Dumbledore rather single -minded when it came to defeating Voldemort, manipulative, too.

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 12:44 · For: 42 - The Spider Web
Excellent, I loved this chapter. This fic just gets better as we go on. I liked the little hint of something starting between Remus and Tonks, and the worry of Dumbledore that he mightn't be at Hogwarts much longer, reminds me where we are in the story as far as canon is concerned. And Daniella won't be alone, she'll have her house elf friend, can't remember her name, isn't it awful when your mind starts going? I'm wondering if Daniella will have anything to do with the trouble at the ministry, and what she'll say to Severus when she discovers he stopped helping Harry learn occlumency. And what Dumbledore requires of her that means she has to lie low and take time off work. Hope you update again soon. Thanks.

Author's Response: I like sticking to canon. JKR wrote wonderful stories and it bothers me when people use the characters, and change their personalities completely. You end up thinking to yourself, “No, Snape would NEVER do that”. Creating a story around a story is more difficult, but I love it! There’s a lot of research and re-reading of the stories involved. I took meticulous notes while writing this trilogy, not just on HP but also about the places, medical procedures, etc. It was a lot of fun. There’s lot’s more to come. Keep in touch.

Name: NoxSomnium (Signed) · Date: 06/05/08 12:15 · For: 42 - The Spider Web
This was such a happy chapter! There was a nice dose of foreboding with protecting friends and Albus wanting Dani to take a sabbatical, but the wedding and the birthday were both a lot of fun. I was mostly just really excited about the wedding. I've grown very fond of the character of Adam, and seeing him married made me happy. Which is not to say that I don't like the sad and scary parts of your story as much as the happy parts. ;)

Author's Response: Ah, there has to be a balance in life in order to keep things rolling as well as they can. I love Adam, too, and in the early stages of the story, Daniella almost had an affair with him…but Remus re-emerged, and well, you know the rest… Adrianne had to be included, too. Daniella’s love for the little girl had to be shown as she’s heading back into isolation. Not a fun place to be. Lot’s more to come. I’m glad you’re enjoying it.

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 06/04/08 23:46 · For: 42 - The Spider Web
intriguing...I can't wait to see what happens with adrianne. I wonder if dani will ever have another child.

Author's Response: Adrianne does have a larger role in an upcoming chapter. As for the rest...............

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 06/04/08 20:36 · For: 42 - The Spider Web
It's amazing how you have integrated this story into the canon books, especially since you started this one not knowing how HP would end. I like the veiled reference to Tonks. Incidentally, Voldemort could remove the prophecy (only he and Harry could); he just did not want to reveal himself at the Ministry. Perhaps Dani did not realize this? IN RE my comment on the last chapter, I am not Canadian, but when I wrote the comment I did think about how "Eh?" is a very Canadian expression. I miss Severus; when will he return to the story?

Author's Response: Thanks for the comments. Yes, Severus will be back...most definately. I can't leave poor Daniella alone.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 06/02/08 18:23 · For: 41 - This Is Who I Am
This has nothing to do with your story, per se, but I heard a song on Radio Disney called "This Is Who I Am," and it made me think of your story. I think the artist was Joey Page (don't know if that's how his name is spelled). Well, at least my random comment boosts your review count, eh?

Author's Response: eh? Canadian?

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 05/26/08 13:38 · For: 41 - This Is Who I Am
! such a good chapter. I am left feeling happy and content.

Author's Response: Yay!, I've succeeded!! glad you liked it. Dani

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 05/26/08 13:23 · For: 40 - Dealing With The Unexpected

Author's Response: Cute, wasn't it? I love Adrianne.

Name: SteakZ (Signed) · Date: 05/26/08 3:53 · For: 41 - This Is Who I Am
Its so easy to forget that Dumbledore is her grandfather hes so distant. Good work keep it up cant wait for more.

Author's Response: More on the way now that the queue is up to speed again. Dani

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/24/08 14:50 · For: 41 - This Is Who I Am
I'm so glad that Remus now knows who she is, it'll take a huge weight off her mind, and he'll have a good friend back. I really enjoyed this chapter, and again well done for fitting in some canon events, Mr Weasley being attacked for instance, we never saw it from the hospital end before. Great job and thanks for the update.

Author's Response: Thank you , thank you (bows deeply, grinning) I like including JKR's books and filling in the blanks. Dani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 05/14/08 0:30 · For: Prologue
I had skimmed this story previously, but I just recently found the first two stories. After reading those, I re-read this story more thoroughly. You have done a fantastic job of creating a back story without compromising the canon story. I love Severus and love to see him happy; I hope chapter 65 (was it 65 you said?) will leave me happy.

Is English your frst language? I have noticed some unusual sentence structures that have made me wonder whether you are not a native speaker of English. I do not mean this as a criticism; I am just curious.

I would love to comment on each and every chapter, but I don't have the time. I am looking forward to the remainder of your story.

Two comments, though. They both belong in earlier chapters, but I'll just put them here in this one long review:

1) There is a comment about the presence of Beauxbatons and Durmstrang causing rampant hormones. Why would this be? In the book the schools are co-ed; it was only the movies that made the Beauxbatons students all female and the Durmstrang students male.

2) I was hoping you would address something that always bothers me in GoF. When Harry encounters Crouch in the woods, Harry runs to get Dumbledore. He runs into Snape instead, and Snape tries to prevent Harry from getting to DD. When DD finally appears, he does not seem angry with Snape for delaying Harry. Now, we all know Severus is not stupid. He would have realized the importance of Harry's message. Even his loathing of the boy would not so cloud his judgment that he would keep the information from DD. So, why did he delay Harry? I like to think DD asked Snape to delay Harry because DD needed to finish something else. I thought maybe you would insert a meeting with Dani, but alas, no. Oh, well.

You still have written a great story. I eagerly await the rest.

Author's Response: Glad you found the other chapters. Reading the last without reading the first, you kind of miss the history.rnYes, English is my first language, although, I do speak two others. However, Daniella’s isn’t. It’s Italian. This may be what you’re seeing.rnEarlier chapters – It doesn’t matter where you’re from. I deal with teenagers every day and hormones are always a factor. :-D As for the Crouch issue, I can’t remember whether I dealt with it, but I don’t think so. There was so much else going on. Thanks for a great review and keep in touch when you can. Danirn

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/11/08 11:08 · For: 40 - Dealing With The Unexpected
Aw this was a lovely chapter, and was that Dudley Dursley in the park? It's weird to think of Snape acting like that with a child, we mostly just see him ranting in canon. I love this, can't wait for the next installment, and thanks for the regular updates.

Author's Response: Thank you. I believe that everyone has a soft side, even Snape, especially with the loss of his own child. Next chapter is in line to be validated. Dani

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 05/02/08 19:08 · For: 39 - Fighting Inner Demons
I feel so much like crying right now. That last conversation was just so sad and beautiful. I can't believe how far Daniella has come in this fic alone, years have passed and yet you've connected each part of the story so well that I don't feel like i've missed anything. I'm a little annoyed at how Daniella treated Remus, I feel as though she used him, but i suppose we all make mistakes. And it must have been so difficult for her to just stand and watch the scene in the graveyard, Dumbledore really expects alot from people doesn't he? I've just thought, if you continue on this path and we get to Dumbledore's death etc, how will Daniella handle that, and what will make Remus finally accept Tonks if she's still around, and if we get to DH, what will Daniella do when Severus has gone and she hasn't even got Remus' friendship to consol her? I'm just so intrigued as to where this will go and how you'll deal with these situations. Also, I'd love to see Daniella realise that Stark is Saxon reborn, because ever since she saw him at Saxon's grave I've wondered. Oh, and finally, will little Adrianne be making more appearances and will we discover anything interesting about her? Sorry for the disjointed and completely incomprehensible review, I've just got so much buzzing round my head, and no wonder, I've read the three fics in the series in two days. Hope you update again soon, this is amazing

Author's Response: Patience. This story is 65 chapters long and follows right to and past the Battle of Hogwarts. I've kept the characters in cannon as it was my purpose to write the story behind JKR's story. I can't help with the speed at which the chapters come out as each one has to go through a validation process and that takes time. I'm glad you're enjoying the story. Keep in touch. Dani

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