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Name: lostinside1 (Signed) · Date: 08/08/08 20:51 · For: Prologue
I have just finished reading this on another site and the last chapter before the epillogue made me cry. :'(

You should tell Adriannes story if you everget bored. :)

Author's Response: "Once Upon A Time " is the next one, and it's about Albus of all people. Never expected to go in that direction, but believe it or not, it's turning out to be a prequel to the trilogy. Weird but very interesting. Hope you enjoy the rest. Dani

Name: lostinside1 (Signed) · Date: 08/08/08 12:29 · For: Prologue
*squeals* I have just found the finished story on the other site and I really want to read it!!! :D

Why oh why did you have to say it was on another site Dani??


Author's Response: Ooopps. Did I say that out loud?? I'm still holding you to reviews!!! :-D Dani

Name: lostinside1 (Signed) · Date: 08/07/08 18:32 · For: 48 - Merry Christmas and Happy New Year...I Think Not
I was just wondering how far doe this story go on? Does it finish after the final battle? I really feel the need to know. :D

This chapter was great and I am pleased to say I actually remembered Danniellas real name. :)

Author's Response: This story goes past the final battle and has recently been added to. (I know you guys can't see it yet because it's not all posted...but it is on another site :-) )

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/30/08 2:02 · For: 47 - A Waiting Game
It's not about this chapter, but here's another question for you. Snape spends the first four books or so trying to get Harry expelled from Hogwarts. In HBP he has a real, bona fide reason for expelling Harry when Harry uses Sectumsempra. Yet he only gives him a couple months of detentions, and he obligates himself to spend all those Saturdays in Harry's company. Why? What an odd man....Yeah, you know I love him!

Author's Response: I guess the hatred for James and the guilt over Lily was so strong that he didn't want a daily reminder in the first four years, but once Voldemort returned, he realized how critical it was to keep Harry safe, even if it meant overseeing his protection himself. Ah, such a selfless character. (snicker) I think we overthink these situations.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/29/08 19:25 · For: 47 - A Waiting Game
Well, this isn't one os my favorite chapters (they can't all be my favorites, right?). I'm less interested in the Remus storyline than the other one--you know. But I've been trying to review every chapter so you'll know who's reading.

I have been curious about something, though. Why did you choose the AU category? Your story is amazingly consistent with canon; couldn't it go in the General Fics category? I wonder if it might get more readers there. It's a fantastic story and deserves a higher read count.

Author's Response: I had to bring Remus back for future chapters and establish his link to Tonks. The AU category was because the main character is OC, and it doesn't take place at Hogwarts. I think I stuck with the AU category also because of the second story which took place in Italy - definately AU. Thanks for the suggestion though. I may ask a mod. Dani

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/28/08 13:49 · For: 47 - A Waiting Game
Excellent, I loved Daniella watching out for Tonks, she really needs it at this point. And it's nice to see that Remus wasn't wholey opposed to the idea of he and Tonks having a relationship, just scared. I'm very glad Daniella got out of the cottage for a while too, she must have been going crazy cooped up for so long. Can't wait for more so please keep writing.

Author's Response: Sorry for the delay. I thought I had responded to this. As said to another reader, it was important to link Tonks and Remus, and having Daniella act as mediator for a while was fun. Geez, have you ever had a personal conversation with an ex who was now just a friend? It's awkward and funny at the same time. Dani

Name: LadyZQ (Signed) · Date: 07/27/08 9:06 · For: 46 - The County Fair
Your stories are wonderful, in depth, and with deep feelings. I can not wait for the next chapter.

Author's Response: I'm so glad you're enjoying them. This trilogy was a thought that grew beyond what I ever expected and came to be posted on a dare. Who would have thought?? The next chapter is in line to be validated. Should be up soon. Dani

Name: riderofdragons (Signed) · Date: 07/25/08 5:11 · For: 43 - Serving the Order
Can't believe I stoppped reading this, well stopped all fanficness for a while!
But it means I had loads to read, and I'll get caught up eventually.
But yea, still loving it. And love the way it ties into the books now, I hopes she makes Neville's parents all better, that'd be ace, and aaaw!

Author's Response: Welcome back! The books are very tied in now, and it starts to get a bit tense. Hope to hear from you again. Dani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/22/08 22:05 · For: 46 - The County Fair
Oh, I'm definitely thinking too much about this, and every other aspect of your story. I obviously have no life. (Actually, I have two kids, but they're too young for Harry Potter; too young to read at all for that matter.)

I meant that the DEs were breaching the Statute, not Daniella. Not for the first time, of course.

No need to reply. Just keep writing!

Author's Response: :-) Iím replying anyway regarding Voldemortís rise to power. His initial rise was at Hogwarts when he began a following and ďfashioned a new nameĒ for himself (near the end of CoS). Once he left Hogwarts, if I did my research right, he had already begun his reign of power, his followers called themselves Death Eaters. That was over fifty years ago in the story. Dumbledore was a teacher at the time, and Hagrid was in third year when Riddle was in his sixth year (CoS - Riddle framed Hagrid for unleashing a monster in the school. Hagrid was expelled in his third year. Riddle was sixteen in the diary.) That would put the timeline during WWII, early Ď40ís (that story is already being written.) Yes, Daniella is a bit younger than her friends. Her parents were helping Dumbledore fight before the first war began, so it is feasible that Colinís grandmother would have been afraid of this new threat and could have passed storied to her young grandchildren. This was just a tidbit of information to draw where Adrianne could have gotten her powers from. That line will not be developed, as it would take away from the original story. I donít think youíre going to be disappointed though. As for the Death Eaters breaching the International Statue of Secrecy, I donít think they really care, and they did it at the Quidditch World Cup, as well. Bullies generally travel in groups and need the support of each other to validate their actions. They do it more for attention and control more than anything else. They certainly got that.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/22/08 17:50 · For: 46 - The County Fair
Now that's a serious breach of the International Statute of Secrecy, or whatever it's called. Was the large DE the blond, nameless one from HBP (not that it matters, I'm just curious)? Poor Daniella, having to explain all this to her best friends.

I'm trying to figure out how Colin's grandmother would fit into the story, timewise. Voldemort first came to power in the early 70s, right? Assuming Colin is about Daniella's age (maybe a bit older? She was young for her class, right?), he was born in the late 50s, like Severus and the Marauders, right? So was he hearing these stories while Voldemort was still "alive," in the 70s? That would make him a teenager, old enough to doubt and to question his grandmother's sanity. (I think a young child would be more accepting and/or more likely to forget the stories entirely.)

Another fine chapter. Thanks!

Author's Response: I really think your thinking too much about this, nor is it that important. As for the International Statue of Secrecy, at some point (either past or future) Daniella mentions that because of her Italian status, the British statue doesn't apply to her. Enjoy.

Name: Binka Fudge (Signed) · Date: 07/20/08 13:08 · For: 46 - The County Fair
Wow, very action packed. When i read the end of the last chapter I was so confused as to what Daniella had felt, I couldn't remember a specific event in canon, but at the time there were all sorts of attacks going on and this was a really well written and integrated scene. I love how Adrianne helped by telling Daniella which coloured light hit her mother and by knocking the Death Eaters mask off, I'm guessing she'll be a very powerful witch. I enjoyed Severus' cameo appearance too. It's a shame Pinky the house elf couldn't have been there to help with the aparition, thats no mean feet aparating yourself and five others. I wonder who Colin's Grandmother is and we've ever heard of her? It was also very nice to see some wandless magic, I've always been fascinated by that, probably because i wish i were able to do it. Can't wait for the next chapter to see if there'll be any more family moments and if Daniella ends up on a treasure hunt for memories to be used in Harry and Dumbledore's private lessons.

Author's Response: Thanks for the wonderful review. The last chapter was meant to confuse you a bit, not to know who she was rushing to help. Colin's grandmother was just a means of indicating where Adrianne got her powers from. That line will not be addressed further. It would take away from the original story. The next chapter is in line to be validated. Hope to hear from you again. Dani

Name: FaunaCaritas (Signed) · Date: 07/20/08 2:10 · For: 46 - The County Fair
Loved this chapter! I've been waiting for Colin and Emily to find out. I hope you devote some of next chapter to the family and their discovery of the magical world. But I am sire whatever you decide to do will be wonderful.


Author's Response: Sorry, not the next chapter. It took a different direction, but I'm sure you'll be pleased. Dani

Name: mock_turtle (Signed) · Date: 07/20/08 0:16 · For: 46 - The County Fair

Author's Response: Graci !

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/17/08 0:56 · For: Prologue
"No, Fawkes is not mentioned. No particular reason...unless you're really willing to think about it..."

I have no idea what you mean by this, but I'm intrigued! Of course, he isn't necessary in your story because of the "bond."

Author's Response: Also, because, there's another bird in the roost.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/13/08 1:12 · For: Prologue
Well, remember when I said I tend to forget to mention things and end up writing back-to-back reviews.

Thank you for the information regarding Lily's place in your story. I'm glad I wasn't forgetting something. I look forward to reading more about this subplot later.

Author's Response: Lily is only brought up in passing. She has no major role.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/13/08 1:10 · For: Prologue
Uh-oh, I've been reading your responses to others and notice that you keep menitoning that your story goes to the end of DH. One comment in particular caused me some concern, but I don't remember what it was. You haven't mentioned Fawkes in your story, and he's the most logical savior for our dear Severus. So I'm wondering how you're going to get Severus out of that old Shrieking Shack. You DO plan to rescue him, don't you? Don't you?

Okay, I'll stop pestering you for spoilers. But I really hope I'm not in for a tragic ending. I'll just hold onto this sliver of hope--you mentioned that you were considering a Part 4.

Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: I refuse to comment on the grounds that it may ruin the story... No, Fawkes is not mentioned. No particular reason...unless you're really willing to think about it...

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/11/08 11:25 · For: 28 - Keeping Busy
"I finally understood why Severus felt so conflicted toward the Potter boy. It wasn’t just that Saxon would have been in the same year, but the debt to James had not been fulfilled. In his mind, he transferred it to the son. That, in addition to feeling guilty about passing along the overheard part of the prophecy, weighed on him greatly. There was another factor, but I wasn’t willing to tread there just yet."

Here is some more of the passage, for context. I think the "other factor" has to do with Severus's attitude towards Harry, and I wondered if it was because he was Lily's son. (Doesn't Dani remind him of this fact at some point?) I love your story, but it isn't the only one I follow, so I get confused. I can't remember whether Severus and Lily had any kind of a relationship in your story or whether that would impact Severus's choices now. But I also am not sure what else you would be referring to in that last line.

Author's Response: Yes, that line does deal with Dani knowing about Lily, but you don't yet know in what context. No, Severus and Lily's relationship has never been brought up in this story, but Dani is an Empath. She would "feel" something.

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/11/08 1:31 · For: 28 - Keeping Busy
"There was another factor, but I wasn’t willing to tread there just yet."

I'm re-reading your story (skimming), and I just noticed this line. What is the other factor? Lily?

Author's Response: I looked through this chapter and couldn't find that line. Out of context, I can't answer the question. Where exactly did you find it?

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 23:45 · For: 45 - Wizard War II
Interestingly, my previous two reviews show up as reviews for the prologue. Huh?

Anyway, you asked why was Snape's old Potions book hanging out in the dungeon. I've wondered about this too. And what are the odds that Harry would end up with it? I have often suspected that it was meant to end up in his hands. I originally suspected DD, but perhaps Severus himself had something to do with it? (I'm talking canon now, not your story.) He seems to be learning for the first time that Harry possesses it when he uses Legilemency on Harry after H uses Sectumsempra on Malfoy. But perhaps he is just searching for Harry's motivation? After all, we see the story mostly from Harry's point of view, so we never really know why the other characters behave the way they do (except for the odd chapter that is told from a different POV).

On another note, I also would have liked to see more of Severus's reaction to DD's injury. I know we see some of it in the Pensieve scene, but I am curious as to whether Dani and Severus discussed it at all. After all, they both care about DD.

Author's Response: Curious, but it could simply be JKRís way of setting the story. After all, it was originally written for children, and children often take things at face value without complex questioning. I could have definitely included more detail in my story, but as with all stories, you have to pick and choose what to include. It was longer than anticipated already. I hope you enjoy the rest of it. Dani

Name: Sariana (Signed) · Date: 07/09/08 16:22 · For: Prologue
Sorry, I should have been more clear. I meant: "I wish you had spent more time on the [fallout from the] events at the MoM rather than jumping right into the retrieval of the ring." I didn't mean I wanted to see the actual battle from Dani's perspective; of course she would not be there. Nor was Severus.

Maybe you'll provide an answer to one of my questions about HBP: Why was Severus at Slughorn's party? He wasn't the social type (duh), and it wasn't to keep an eye on Draco as Draco wasn't even invited. I think it was just a plot device so that Harry could eavesdrop, but I'm hoping you'll have a better explanation. But it's okay if you don't. Your story is great just as it is.

Author's Response: I thought he was there looking for Draco. he definately wouldn't be in Slughorn's circle, even though he was obviously brilliant with Potions. But, here's one for you? Why did Slughorn still ahve Severus' 6th year textbook with all the spells and hints written in the margin? You'd think that would be something that Severus would keep close watch on. HmmmrnAs for the "fall out" after the battle, I didn't want to belabour the point. More to come. Dani

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