FINALLY someone who gets that Snape is an evil [Bleep, blank, edit censored, edit censored] git who deserves to die a very PAINFUL death you wouldn't believe how many people have theories out there on "good Snape" as if that weren't a controdiction in terms
and for that I will forgive the sing song-y nature of this and the obsessive rhyming but this might have been quite the point
LOVE the thoughts on Snape though may he rest in agony !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Author's Response: Looks like you only reviewed cuz you spotted a poem against Snape! Well doesn't matter, thanks for the review. I just wrote the poem randomly, it doesn't reflect my views on snape's chracter. I still havent decided whether Snape's good or bad. He's going to help Harry in the horcrux hunt, that's what I firmly believe. But anyway, we'll wait and read it in just a few hours! OMG I'm so excited! Happy reading to you and thanks for reviewing even though you don't like this poem that much.
That's pretty good! I actually CAN picture Harry saying "You're worse than Percy!"
Author's Response: Yay! Thanks so much for the review!
Voldy-poo! rofl! i love it!
Author's Response: Yay! I'm so happy! Thanks a lot!
"So it is no good now to beg for mercy,
You fraud, slime-ball, you’re worse than Percy!"
LOLZZZZZZZ!!! I love this poem! It's so funny! Hilarious!!! I especially like the ending - it was absolutely brilliant! This is going on my favorites!
Author's Response: Aww thank you so, so much!! I was really let down by the few number of reviews I got on this poem but you made me happy =D Thanks a lot!
Okay, this really made me laugh. I can just imagine this. The first two lines really set the tone well, and it reminded me a little of Dr. Seuss with its lyrical rhyme scheme. I thought the slimeball Percy line was great, by the way.
Now, I think Snape wouldn't call Harry his first name, at least, not at this point, and disdain is a noun, not a verb, but those are just minor things. Keep writing!
Author's Response: Oh my gosh! To get such a gr8 review, and from one of my favourite pple around here, too!! I am reallly glad that my poem made u laugh! I was quite unsure about the whole percy- thing, just included that 2 rhyme :p but it feels good to know it was liked! And Snape calling Harry by his first name..hmm...I think Snape is sooo desparate to come back tht he can fall to any exteme...lol...And OMG i never knew disdain was only a noun...wht's the verb then? *blushes* I'll change it somehow. These minor things matter a lot, I think, after all small droplets add to a vast expanse of ocean...anyways, thanks a lot, Schmergo, I really wanted you to review at least one of my stories :D Thanks!
Author's Response: Oh, and by the way, I'm really excited for the sequel to Dark Lord's Blog. Waiting eagerly for it to come out!
Snape Repents has the feel of a traditional ballad lost in the tangles of the writers own imagination. That isn’t to say it wasn’t created with the best possible ideas, but it got lost somewhere along the way, ironically enough I believe at the beginning. She starts off with:
“Good evening, Potter,” said Snape, with a doubt.
“How can it be good, when you’re about?”
This dialogue sample has the feel of being incredibly natural which really lets us know that Bookworm is not a traditional poetry writer. Many poetry writers sacrifice meaning to rhyme, or coherency to poetic images and symbolism, but bookworm does the opposite she rhyme to getting across what she wants to say. Bookworm is writing prose and then shoving it into the form of a rhyme, which is really incredibly unfortunate as they could have been a create humorous one-shot. The problem is that there is very little humorous poetry and so seeing a poem the readers mind is immediately flagged to a mood of descriptive seriousness. And on this count Bookworm simply does not deliver, and did not intend to deliver. Unfortunately, this isn’t obvious until the last line when the reader finally catches the cadence of the humor and then can re-read it and offer a smile here or a chuckle there.
I am sure that Bookworm is a fantastic prose writer, and you can see glimpses of her style here and there which for the most part seems to be humorous in the dialogue, but it just doesn’t transfer well to the medium of poetry. One of the key things about poetry is that it has to rhyme and rhyme well. Much of the humorous potential which I can so clearly see is easily sacrificed to the constraints of rhyme and the author even admits to herself in the authors not that she was stretching for a rhyme on a certain line. In most normal brands of poetry it’s okay to reword things and make them sound awkward, but in dialogue there are special phrases that I am sure Bookworm is aware that when forced into rhyming sounds awkward.
I have faith in Bookworm and if she tried a different medium of poetry with less dialogue and more action and even a plot the humor would come across better. I have faith because the last couple of lines were simply brilliant and really made me smile.
But what Bookwormy thinks,
And is sure you do too,
Is that Snape does deserve
To be killed by Voldy-poo.
These are so great because they really embody that genre of poetry with that gut-punch hilarious ending and doesn’t sound forced at all. If every stanza of the poem were like this one we would have something worthy of awards. I look foreword to reading more of Bookworm’s poetry and I’m glad to see that she is challenging herself.
Author's Response: Oooh, thank you so much, Visceral Love, for taking time to study my poetry between the lines and submitting such a constructive review! You have very correctly inferred from my poem that I defintely am not a poet, more a prose-writer. And this poem was actually written by me by first thinking of dialogues, and then making them rhyme somehow. Now that you have given me the idea, I might even write a one shot of this entire scene. Actually, I never considered writing this poem as a humorous one...but as you have so wisely pointed out, in order to make my lines rhyme, I just gave way to whatever came in my mind and some lines automatically became humourous. This poem, actually, is one which is dark as well as has some light moments as well, like when Harry is being cool with Snape. I am happy that you liked the last 4 lines so much. I do hope someday I improve my poetry so much that you like all the lines as much as those...and my poetry doesn't sound so forced. I'm also really happy that you would like to read more of my poetry, because I have one more poem which I am going to submit soon. Let's hope that it gets validated and that you feel it exceedingly better than this one. All in all, thanks loads for your review!! I am really grateful and look forward to being advised more in future by you.