I have to say this is a really brilliant peice and suprisingly overlooked. I can only guess that it as a result of the somewhat gilting beginning. The sentence fragments of the dream are supposed to I imagine contrast later with your incredibly lovely realistic style and dialouge, but it ends up feeling less relavent to the story and the symbolism feels forced. The same goes for the end as well.
Also I wonder how there were inns with 3B and such in the middle ages it seems a little modern. Other than that this peice was flawless and I have to say that it is, hands down my favorite peice I have read on MNFF and I look foreward to perhaps more Salazar/Rowena from you in the future. Perhaps?
Anyways, lovely job. Keep on writing.
Author's Response: I agree about the inns and having room numbers, but when I submitted this I had a day until the contest closed, so I just threw something together... >.<
Anyhow, thank you for all of your critique and praise, really brightened up an average day. :) We'll have to see on more Salazar/Rowena, I did have a lot of fun with parts of this story, so you never know...
Very well written. I like how you brought their child into this, as well as the way the dream was written. Great job!
Author's Response: Thank you! :)