Reviews For Day's End
Reviewer: Binka Fudge
Date: 05/14/08 12:57
Chapter: Day's End

Excellent!

Reviewer: MJ_Padfoot
Date: 03/24/07 14:19
Chapter: Day's End

Ooooh! Great description and I love it! MJ

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Hokey
Date: 03/11/07 12:00
Chapter: Day's End

Hello, Suzie! *huggles*

I don't read a lot of poetry, I'm not sure why. I guess it has something to do with that I thought that not all poems can convey a story, or meaning, like short stories can. You, however, have proved me utterly wrong!

This poem has a very nice rhythm and a flow to it; I just felt like reading it out loud to actually hear the harmony of it. It also tells us something, it has a very deep and profound theme (that in a way drives me crazy, because I start thinking about complicated things that just go round and round in my mind... I guess you know what I mean =P)

I think itís just the right length and the title is very fitting, on several levels. The rhyming is great, it feels natural and not forced or anything of the sort! Truly beautiful.

Good job, Suzie! I canít wait to read more of your stuff! =D

Author's Response: Yay Jen! :D I'm glad you like this poem. I wrote it quite quickly, but the rhythm for this one just seemed to come naturally. You should definitely read more poetry! One of the things I like most about poetry is the way that it can sometimes tell a story in so few words. The title...ack. That took me ages! And it's so simple! My beta, Jenn, suggested loads but in the end I changed it at the last minute. *hides* Anyway, glad you like the poem, and thanks for reviewing! ~Suzie <3

Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 03/10/07 13:42
Chapter: Day's End

Wow, Suzie. Honestly, I don't know what else to say. This was just amazing. I absolutly love it. Wow, again. *huggles* Sorry, I didn't really have anything constructive to say.

Author's Response: *huggles back* Elle! I'm glad you like this! Thank you for taking the time to read and review! :) ~Suzie

Reviewer: social loner
Date: 03/10/07 12:24
Chapter: Day's End

This is amazing! The rhyming and rhythm is perfect and the poem is oustanding. The poem just grabs you from the beginning and holds you straight to the end, which is, in my opinion very hard to do. Especially to have such a strong beginning and an even stronger ending and to be able to tie them together so nicely! This is something I still have to work on in my poetry, so your poem is definintly an inspiration for me.

Your beginning was amazing:

Will the sun ever set?
Will the moon ever rise?
Will we ever see death -
Or will we always survive?
Will we ever defeat,
Will this continue through time?
Are we ever to rest,
Or doomed never to die?

This really got me thinking. Mabey surviving through the war is worse because of everything you see, everything you lose, and the constant questioning of 'will it ever end?'

I especially liked this stanza as well:

"Time canít delay
What events come to pass;
Two threads run astray,
Come together at last.
When two paths collide
Then Time will fly fast,
Then your moment will come.
Then your ending will pass."

The rhythm is outstanding and the last two lines in particular caught my attention.

Overall, you have done a fantastic job on this poem and you should be very proud! Keep up the outstanding work!

-Olivia (social loner)

Author's Response: *has already responded to the previous review* :D

Reviewer: social loner
Date: 03/10/07 12:21
Chapter: Day's End

This is amazing! The rhyming and rhythm is perfect and the poem is oustanding. The poem just grabs you from the beginning and holds you straight to the end, which is, in my opinion very hard to do. Especially to have such a strong beginning and an even stronger ending and be ale to tie them together so nicely! This is something I still have to work on in my poetry, so your poem is definintly an inspiration for me.

Your beginning was amazing:

Will the sun ever set?
Will the moon ever rise?
Will we ever see death -
Or will we always survive?
Will we ever defeat,
Will this continue through time?
Are we ever to rest,
Or doomed never to die?

This really got me thinking. Mabey surviving through the war is worse because of everything you see, everything you lose, and the constant questioning of 'will it ever end?'

I especially liked this stanza as well:

"Time canít delay
What events come to pass;
Two threads run astray,
Come together at last.
When two paths collide
Then Time will fly fast,
Then your moment will come.
Then your ending will pass."

The rhythm is outstanding and the last two lines in particular caught my attention.

Overall, you have done a fantastic job on this poem and you should be very proud! Keep up the outstanding work!

-Olivia (social loner)


Author's Response: Thank you for the fantastic review, I'm really glad you like the poem! The beginning of it was something that just more or less formed in my head without a lot of thought, and I sort of just shaped the rest of the poem around that theme.

In lots of fics we've seen cases of the survivors of a war probably being worse off than before, having lost so many loved ones. I was thinking about how hatred and destruction from war never really ends. Though a war has ended, somewhere people are still saddened. And sometimes when wars cannot be won easily, those in battle may feel trapped as they know that the ending may come sooner or later but they have no idea when and may even hope that it is 'soon'.

Thanks again for the review. :) ~Suzie

Reviewer: my name is naima
Date: 03/07/07 18:59
Chapter: Day's End

mh my GOSH that is soooooooo GOOD!!!!!!! i wish i could write like u

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 03/05/07 18:28
Chapter: Day's End

Wow! You never cease to amaze me, Suzie, with your wonderful poems.

I really liked your title- I see that Jenn helped you with it. It's a great one, definitely.

I also loved your rhyming scheme. It rhymes perfectly, and it goes along with the actual poem perfectly. You are very talented in the poetry category, my friend.

I also liked the actual plot of the poem. It's very serious- I don't really know what to say because it's SO good.

When life is forever,
The road is too long,
The journeyís bitter and hard
And will wear down the strong.
Will we ever return
To the first key of our song;
Will we ever come home
To the place we belong?


I particularly liked this line. Your poem just speaks to the readers. It's absolutely amazing. Easily the absolute BEST I've read on MNFF.

Great work, Suzie, and you are an amazing Poet.

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Aww thanks! *huggles* I wasn't really sure whether I liked this poem as I wrote it completely on a whim really late at night. It lurked in my folders for months before I thought of sending it to a beta... *hides*

Odd...you're the third person who's picked out that stanza so far! :p I suppose this can really relate to anyone whose had a hard life, been caught up in too many things and just needs a rest...

Anyway, thanks for reviewing! ~Suzie <3

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