Reviews For What Lies Within
Reviewer: Jazzbones
Date: 07/19/07 15:20
Chapter: Chapter 20: Least Expected

Can't wait to find out what happens next! Keep up to excellent writing.

Author's Response: I always look forward to your feedback. Thanks so much for taking the time to review. Chapters 21 and 22 were posted this morning. I hope you enjoy them.

Reviewer: ibrooks
Date: 07/17/07 15:59
Chapter: Chapter 19: One Step Forward

I loved this chapter. You have great character insight.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/16/07 8:30
Chapter: Chapter 19: One Step Forward


Reviewer: jdh_24
Date: 07/11/07 15:52
Chapter: Chapter 19: One Step Forward

The tree seems significant. And I like the cliffhanger at the end. Very good.

Author's Response: Hi jdh_24, Thanks, and I hope you liked the intro of some of the action you'd been craving. There's a lot more of it coming in the next chapters.

Reviewer: Sdogg
Date: 07/11/07 14:28
Chapter: Chapter 19: One Step Forward

so, i just read your entire story for the first time, and i must admit it was pretty good, and i expect you to finish it :P . it took a while to get into, and i almost quit after the first few chapters, but i hung in and it got a lot better. i don't really know what to say to make your first chapters more exciting and interesting for the readers, but i do hope you continue to write

Author's Response: Hi, Thanks for taking the time to read the entire story. I'm glad you liked it, and hung in even though the first couple of chapters didn't immediately grab you. They really were more about set up and new character intros. And yes, I definitely plan to finish it. I'm nearly done writing it and will hopefully get a couple of more chapters posted before the DH release.

Reviewer: dontimamanda
Date: 07/11/07 8:51
Chapter: Chapter 19: One Step Forward

no!!!!!!!!! so evil!!!!!!!! lol. cant wait for an update. and i loved the chapter!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. There's more action on the horizon.

Reviewer: arwenevensatr
Date: 07/10/07 12:53
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

With a week and days to go before the release of the last book, where do you plan tp go from here? I like the idea of using the one eyed witch passage way so that the students can escape should there be an attack on the castle. Interested to see how you'll end this one.

Author's Response: Time is flying by!! I'm hoping to get a couple more chapters posted before the DH release. I'm really pretty much done writing it, and am focusing on revisions and edits. So yes, I will see it through to the end; even though it won't be until after DH.

Reviewer: jdh_24
Date: 07/09/07 13:43
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

I'm surprised, your story has continued to surprise me by how good it is.
I only hope that we get to see some real action soon.

Author's Response: Thanks. Things are heating up. I think you'll be happy with chapters 19 and 20.

Reviewer: dsljstar5729
Date: 07/08/07 10:53
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

I look forward to every new chapter.

Reviewer: ibrooks
Date: 07/08/07 7:03
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

This was worth the wait. I never know what you are going to throw at us next. I see the next chapter is going to be a long one. I can't wait til it's posted.
Keep up the great work.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:39
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

This is another amazing chapter. Please keep going. I can't wait to see how this ends. I guess it will be after DH is released, but I promise to keep reading this story.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:37
Chapter: Chapter 17: Less is More

I knew it was coming, but I didn't know how. Where do you come up with these ideas. I'm completely addicted.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:36
Chapter: Chapter 16: Hocus Focus

Very nice and some pretty funny moments. Your characters are full of life.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:34
Chapter: Chapter 15: Scheduled Assistance

I love the way your mind works.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:33
Chapter: Chapter 14: Unlike Any Other

You Rock!! You actually wrote a Sorting Hat song. It's perfect.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:32
Chapter: Chapter 12: Birthday, Backlash and Beyond

You write with so much detail, but it flows really well.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/06/07 12:28
Chapter: Chapter 9: The Other Celebration

This was such a beautifully written chapter. You've really captured the essence of each character.

Reviewer: Jazzbones
Date: 07/05/07 14:50
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

Another good chapter - looks like the next one will be up soon (fingers crossed hopefully). Keep 'em coming.

Reviewer: the_wind
Date: 07/05/07 2:06
Chapter: Chapter 18: Sweeter Than Candy

This is a great story, and it doesn't have many of the weaknesses many others have. Just one error I noticed - you misspelt Romilda Vane's name, it's Romilda, not Ramilda. But, good story so far and keep it up!

Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reading and reviewing. I'll edit the spelling of Ms. Vane's name.

Reviewer: vboy
Date: 07/01/07 9:43
Chapter: Chapter 7: The Serpent's Touch Revisited

Very powerful and moving chapter. I felt like I was right there with them.

Author's Response: Thanks for the chapter reviews. I'm glad you like the story. This is l one of my favorite chapters. Please read the rest. There's more on the way.

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