That was really cute, CJ!
I felt that the rythm was a little bit off, but other than that, I thought it was a really good poem!
Author's Response: Thanks, Jamie! Can you PM me to describe why you thought the beat was off so maybe I can change it? Thanks! CJ
Aww...I really like this poem. Its so sweet. I like the comparision. Its subtle yet powerful in a way which i can not at this time explain. Really Great Job.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! Glad you liked it!
This was a very good poem. It seems to have many meanings and could apply to anyone. The part left behind could have been intentional to allow the other person to continue on without them or it could have been done by accident and the writer wants it back. I'm sure everyone who reads this has a different interpretation but that is mine. Very good.
Author's Response: Thanks so much Kristy! My intention was to have people have different interpretations. For this reason, I didn't know what to put on the banner, so I put my OTP, H/G.
sorry for the double posting but I didn't mean to put the question mark after "cute poem". I didn't want you to interpret that the wrong way.
This poem was very nicely done, as I've alread said *below*. Good job ^^
Author's Response: That's okay! I was wondering why there was a question mark... Also, for your question in the first post, who the second stanza was about, I really leave it up to reader interpretation, but if you look at the banner on my author page, its Ginny speaking about Harry. Its sort of a future poem showing a peak at the troubles in their relationship.
Very cute poem? The second stanza was about whom I'm wondering...
I don't really have a fave part, the whole poem is great and the idea behind it is excellent. You should definetily write more poetry! ^_^
Author's Response: Thanks so much! I will definetely try to write more!
Wow. This is a great poem. You are an amazing poet. I wish I could write as well as you. Who, may I ask, is this written about?
Author's Response: Thanks! Well, the banner has Harry and Ginny on it (you can see it in my authors page) but I really wanted people to interpret it in their own ways. On the RHP, LJ and Paige took points off because they were like "Ginny doesn't break up with Harry, he breaks up with Ginny." I don't think they understood that it was a future poem!
Just to randomly say something. Even though I can in the TWS. >.>
I left ya a review a while back...yeah, in February...long before I met you in the TWS...isn't that weird? I think it is weird that we met then. Well, 'met' online. Via TWS. :D
Author's Response: I'll completely ignore the fact that this is SPAM, mainly because we aren't on RHP and I can't take points away! It is wierd that we met online, but it's not like we've been revealing personal information to eachother or anything, so I guess its okay. Thanks for the...uh...well, I guess I could call it a review! *hugs Kate*
You know, you're a great rhymer, by the way. Just wanted to let you know. I think it is uber awesome. :D
I've probably said this already, but....here's my review!:
I think this is a great analogy. Very well thought out, and well written. Every line flows and has the proper beat. The one exception to that would be this line:
Because when I left a part of me behind that day,
It just seems a bit longer than the other lines, and sort of makes the beat a bit skewed. But that's just me. Otherwise, this poem is great. I think you've done a really good job on this, and I hope you write more poems/fics soon. You're a great author.
Author's Response: Aww! Thanks Kate! I feel so special to get such a great review from such a great poet! I take that back...such a great two reviews! (You left one a while back!) Really, thanks though! Also, thanks for the criticism. Lots of people leave fluffy reviews and I'm like, "Thanks," but it's so much better for people to leave reviews with constructive criticism! Thanks Kate! CJ PS I'll see you in the RHP and the TWS!
Whoa! *is speechless* this is awesome, CJ!
The analogy with Apparition and a breakup is so clever, dear. Great job! :D
I left a part of me behind that day,
When I left him for someone better.
I left a part of me behind that day,
And it stayed there, a dead letter.
This particular stanza took my breath away. I love your sense of rythm and rhyme! *wishes she could write poetry like that*
Please, tell me we'll see more poems from you!
Author's Response: Aww...thanks Priz! It was so sweet of you to drop by! As I've mentioned previously, I never thought this poem would go over so well...but it has! Enough of me...I saw that Keep Holding On was validated! Congrats! *goes to review* *squishes Priz back*
Hello, fellow Gryffie!
I love your poem. It's simple, but really moving - I especially love the last coupe. An empty glove - really sad. It's also an interesting choice to focus on two opposing feelings in the two stanzas. The misty transition from humour to sadness is very clever. I wish I were more experienced in poem-reading so I could leave a more quailty review, but I'm afraid this is the best I can do ;)
But well - I like it!
Author's Response: *hugs fellow Toaster* Thanks so much! I'm honestly not that "experienced in poem-reading" or writing myself, I just spit this one out one day. Glad you liked it. It's funny, I never thought people would interpret it the way they did, or enjoy it for the matter, but everyone so far has loved it! The mysteries of MNFFers! Thanks so much! See you in the Gryff CR!
I love it!
Author's Response: Thanks! Three words that mean so much! My first actual fic is in the queue now, so check back soon and it should be up!
That's so depressing!
At first I didn't get it, then I was like, ummm..., then I saw the banner you made for it, which by the way is gorgeous, and I got it!
Ginny LEFT Harry!!
Made me cry!
Anyway, how do you make a banner!
I really want one!
PM me with the answer!
Love the poem!
Author's Response: Well, you know how it is; people all interpret things differently. I won't ruin it for everyone else by saying how I interpret it, but if thats how you see it, good for you! I'm glad you loved it! Stay tuned for more stuff from me!
I'm so glad to see this up:). It's really great. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad to see it up too! My first fanfic (well, fanpoem)...
Wow. Very intriguing idea, I've never seen these two things/ideas compared before, and it was very interesting and well done. The first stanza seems so innocuous and innocent, just something simple about Apparating, but then with the next stanza comes the provocative-ness, the feelings, too. Emotions. When it gets tied in with the first stanza, they combine and become something that starts out simple, but it is only a facade, to reveal something inside that is much...deeper. (Yes, that made no sense, I know. I repeated things like, twenty times. Sorry.)
I love how you ended this. Just a ton of feeling summed up in one line. Excellent!
Wonderful rhyming, too. I admire that - mainly because I can't rhyme for my life, but...*shrugs*
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright – Euphrates
Author's Response: Thank you so much! Your review means a lot to me. This is my first piece on Mugglenet and I'm really glad people like it. I never really thought about it that much when I wrote it, I just, well, did it! I'm glad you see so much meaning it in!
This is excellent! A very creative comparison-- I never thought about it that way, splinching and breaking up. I thought it would be funny and silly, but it was actually quite thought--provoking! Keep writing!
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I'm glad you liked it! CJ