Reviews For Quidditch
Reviewer: Hermione Lurves Ron
Date: 06/27/07 19:46
Chapter: the match

Is this actually based on somebody or is it made up? Either way, nice poem!

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 02/25/07 9:22
Chapter: the match

Hi there! This was a very short and sweet poem about quidditch, very straightforward as Euphrates said *hi euphrates!*, and nice to brighten up anyone's day. You caught the amotions without the poem dragging, happiness, joy... :-)

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 02/25/07 9:22
Chapter: the match

Hi there! This was a very short and sweet poem about quidditch, very straightforward as Euphrates said *hi euphrates!*, and nice to brighten up anyone's day. You caught the amotions without the poem dragging, happiness, joy... :-)

Author's Response: Hi!!! Thanks for the review. To all those who reviewed: Please tell your friends to review my poem. thanks again to all

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 02/20/07 20:10
Chapter: the match

Ooh! Quidditch! And Quidditch in a poem, too! *loves*

Ahem...moving on.

I like what _Ivy_ said about the adjectives - though I think you should keep the one line that reads: She is very happy to be here today. I dunno why, but I like it. :-)

I love your wonderful similes (or metaphors, whatever the heck they are). *takes eager notes on similes* I wish I could use similes that well...my personal favorite was this: The river's water runs, / like eyes flowing with tears. I love when things are compared to rivers. Rivers are so beautiful, they're good for comparison. (Well, they're not too pretty when they're all polluted and stuff...grr...) I also love how the girl's face is shining like the sun. :-) Very sweet.

I like the straightforward way you told this, too. You had great imagery and such, but you didn’t let it get in the way and muck up your poem. You let the imagery flow together beautifully, mixed it with simplicity, and baked a wonderful poem. (Ha ha…like my awful metaphor?) I find that simplicity is good (awesome) because I, uh, get, shall I say, confused with the poems that try and force too much meaning into their short little bodies. (Darn! Another terrible metaphor. I will stop now. Promise.)

I like how the Cup reflected not only her face and her teams’ faces, but the faces of the entire Gryffindor House. (Go, Gryffindor! Hee…) Anyways…

Well, I hope this review did this poem justice. :-) I really liked it (the poem), so I hope you like this review!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright – Euphrates

P.S. Below it says that _Ivy_ was off to tell her forum friends...well, she told me. You better thank her. *laughs* I would've reviewed anyways though. I love to review poetry. :-)


Author's Response: Thank you very much for this wonderful review and I am glad you enjoyed my poem. You gave me this feeling of encouragement and i really appreciate it. thanks again. P.S. i shall thank _ivy_ too (probably at school) L0L

Reviewer: Hokey
Date: 02/20/07 18:01
Chapter: the match

Hello!

I liked the theme of this poem, I haven't read any quite like it! Very sweet and straight-forward.
Like Ivy said, to make this even better you can try using some imaginative adjectives (right-click and synonyms in Word always works =P).
I enjoyed reading this, though I wish it was longer!! Keep on writing,

~Hokey

*hinthint* You know, I have a story up that needs some reviews too ;)

Author's Response: hi!!! thanks very much Hokey!!!! i shall also use your constructive critisism in my next poem. I will read and review Your story, probably after I eat dinner. Thanks again!!!

Reviewer: siriusly_ginny
Date: 02/20/07 17:41
Chapter: the match

Hey Vic!! Nice poem! I love it. Good job, very impressive for a first poem!!! WRITE MOREEEEE
You're on my favs!
ROCK ON!!!!

Author's Response: Hey ginny!!!! thanks for reviewing. I shall try to right more> thanks again!!!!

Reviewer: _Ivy_
Date: 02/20/07 17:13
Chapter: the match

All right,this is Miss Beta Woman at the moment. *pushes glasses to edge of nose, looks pompous*

Now, if you want this to look even better than it does now, I would suggest newer adjectives. One's less common than 'black' and 'happy'. You also spelled reflects wrong at the end.

Now some praise... This is really excellent! This is a spectucular poem, and an excellent time to choose. Quidditch can be filled with a whirlwind of emotions, and is always a wonderful topic for poems.

*smiles brightly and gathers clipboard*

Author's Response: thank you, thank you, thank you very much!! I will use your concrits for my next poems. thanks for everything Miss Beta Woman. L0L

Reviewer: _Ivy_
Date: 02/20/07 17:05
Chapter: the match

SHMEEGLE OMIGOD ITS FINALLY UP!!! IM LIKE SOOO PSYCHED!!!

OK, sorry. *bows to your greatness*. Great job! *runs off to tell all forum friends*.

Author's Response: Thanks very much IVI without YOU this wouldnt be up you know!!!!!!!! i know its finally up (cheers echo the small room) You rock my socks!!!!! Though i may not be wearing any. L0L

Author's Response: Thanks very much IVI without YOU this wouldnt be up you know!!!!!!!! i know its finally up (cheers echo the small room) You rock my socks!!!!! Though i may not be wearing any. L0L

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