That was really really good with just the right amount of sadness and loss. I'm glad he was reunited with James and Lilly. You are a fantastic writer!
You should totally make a sequel to this! It's so amazing that it deserves one!
loved it especially the bits about the fates.
u should do one where Harry meets her or something after the battle with Volde
Wow. The ending of this was terrifyingly amazing. I had goosebumps, but smiled when he went to join James and Lily. You really know how to mold words to do what you want them to do. To portray what needs to be portrayed.
But, why was Regulus there? I didn't think that that was necessary to make it better, but it didn't really harm it. Also, it was mostly dialogue. I would include more setting details to put forth the mood of the story.
(Gryffindor Review Crew)
Author's Response: Regulus was there b/c I believed him to be RAB before DH, and I figured if he was, then he was a hero. As far as setting, I was going for the idea that they were floating in emptiness, so there really wasn't that much to say other than that. I'm really glad you liked it so much!
I loved this!! I especially like the line about Regulus becoming a hero at the end. And this is certainly an original fic! I have never read one quite like this. I'm very into mythology, so I enjoyed the theme of this one. I thought it was such a nice touch that Sirius didn't realize he was dead at first... I really liked that. Other than the plot, this story was very well-written! It had such a wonderful fluency. Your paragraphs and sentences blended very nicely! Great job! I'm putting this on my favorites!
Author's Response: Aw, thanks! I'm glad you liked it so much! *blushes a lot.* I love mythology too; when one of the challenges was to incorporate mythology I almost squealed. I quite liked your story too, btw.
awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwwe! sad and sweet! bittersweet! amazing! made me tear up! in a good way! beautiful. just beautiful, even if i barley understood some of the terms. (not that familiar with mythology.)
I know exactly why he's a hero. By "he" I mean Regulus. This is so creative. I mean. Wow.
Oh I love this one. Sirius going through the veil has been interpreted many different ways, and I have two favorites. One where Harry gets him back, and this one.
I like how you put Atropos, that is what I know her as, into this story. The explanation she gives Sirius is great. I really do think he is a hero. Plus he is my favorite character and I hate that J.K. killed him. But it was necessary I guess.
Keep writing, You are one of the best on this site and I can't wait to see what you will do next. Also, I would love to get an e-mail from MNFF saying Of Christmas Past has been updated.
Author's Response: Yeah, she's essentially the Norse version of Atropos. In their mythology, their set of Fates were the Norns, and Skuld, the youngest and in charge of the Future, sometimes rode as a Valkyrie in addition to her duties. And don't worry, I put my latest chapter for Of Christmas Past in the queue!
I was really impressed by how well-written this was! It flowed really well, and you used great adjectives to explain what was going on. I also thought that you had some great advice embedded in the fic, such as:
Evil always returns. It is one of the universe’s most powerful forces.
That is a very powerful, and very true, statement. I read it three times, amazed at the power of it!
I really like your explanation of what's beyond the veil. I never thought of it as being a Purgatory. I also never thought of wizard religions, so I found that very interesting to read about as well.
Overall, great job. Very impressive piece.
Keep up the good work!
If anyone deserves a decent afterlife, it's Sirius...and Valhalla does seem to suit him perfectly. Sirius and James together in a hall full of drinking and brawling--death will never be the same.
I love the line "a hero rarely says goodbye," because it's so true...a fact that is making me cry as I think about it.
I don't really have any criticism; this was a really good story, and I look forward to reading more of your work.
~Doctor Phoenix, Knight of the Turnip Table
very, very nice! touching, engaging, and well written. my only suggestion has to do with the spacing on your paragraphs. the last story i submitted here did the same thing and added several break lines between each paragraph incorrectly. it's a pretty easy fix though, and it would make your story seem more connected. i really did enjoy this--good luck in the challenge!
Author's Response: Thanks very much, good luck to you too!