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Name: tatjanablack (Signed) · Date: 12/27/07 11:09 · For: Chapter 1
Hello !

I thought I already I wrote a rewiew for you but I can see I have not. I love stories about Black Sisters - and Bella is one of my fav. charathers. I love your stories. It is one of the best I ever have read.

I don't write fanfiction by myself but I love reading fanfic. Anyway exllecent story. You have a talent for writing.

Tatjana Black

Author's Response: Wow, thank you very much. I never thought I'd get any more reviews for 'diary' - glad you liked it, and thank yo for taking the time to review.

Name: Rachel 05 (Signed) · Date: 07/07/07 19:47 · For: Chapter 1
As always, a beautiful and haunting piece.

In all your fic, I particularly love your portrayl of Severus, because to me he comes across as a deeply complicated person in the books, and I love fics that explore the different sides to him.


Rach x

Author's Response: Thank you! And thanks for the comment on Severus... you're right, though this fic is about Bella, he is a very important character. I woudn't do to have a one-dimentional Snape in a story like this - glad you liked him!

Name: TheBlackSister (Signed) · Date: 07/01/07 22:10 · For: Chapter 1
Thank you so much for this story! It is far too easy to label Bella as a madwoman. She is human and, therefore, has motives for what she does. Thanks again!

Author's Response: Oh wow, thank you! It's been ages since I recieved reviews for that fic, I thought for sure no one would read it any more... Thank you for levaing a review. Judging by your pen name I guess you're just as obsessed with the Black Sisters as I am, and I am going to write more about them - only gotta finish the 'Wisdom and War' Triology first...

Name: casiopeia (Signed) · Date: 03/02/07 16:53 · For: Chapter 1
What a story!

Author's Response: Thank you very much, especially for answering in my own language ;-) Danke!

Name: Bella Got Bite (Signed) · Date: 02/24/07 19:12 · For: Chapter 1
Please write more stories! It was so good! You could be the next J.K. Rowling.

Author's Response: Oh, that's flattering! *blush* But no one ever could be the next JKR... Thank you all the same!

Name: Sly Severus (Signed) · Date: 02/23/07 12:15 · For: Chapter 1
DailyProphetEditor, I read this fic when it was first published on MNFF. I believe it was the second story in the most recent category at the time. The next day I added it to my favorites. That was probably about a week ago and I have read it several times since then. However, I couldn’t leave you a proper review before now. I really needed time to recover from your story before attempting to respond to it.

This is one of the best stories that I have ever read. It haunted me for days after I read it. The amount of emotion you managed to draw from me was phenomenal. I cried more than once after reading this story.

You have taken two characters that I love beyond all reason and done something truly unique with them. There are very few stories that could hold a candle to this one.

And I must say it takes a lot for me to feel anger towards Severus. I have been annoyed with him twice. The first time was after Sirius’ death in OoTP because of the way he treated Harry when he was clearly mourning. The second was when I read this story. I was livid. Had he been a non-fictional character I would have hunted him down and yelled at him. I couldn’t believe how quick he was to dismiss Bella after telling her he had loved her enough to follow her as a Death Eater. He claimed that he loved her so much, but that he could no longer feel it. He was going to let her rot in Azkaban because he believed that she could be some threat to him. That is not love. If he ever loved her as much as he claimed then he would not have been able to leave her to such a fate. However, this is something I can see of his character and I think you did well with it. It just really made me angry at him.

On another anger related note, Dumbledore. I believe I may have actually screamed that he was a hypocrite while reading this. But that’s okay. I have always felt that way about him. I absolutely loved the way you handled his character. I think this is the most IC I have ever seen him in fan fiction. He goes on and on about second chances. He was willing to give Severus a second chance. Where was Bella’s second chance? He knew that she had turned away from the Dark Lord. He knew that she was no threat. So why did he treat her like the enemy. He preaches forgiveness, but only shows it when it is convenient for him. When Severus came to him seeking forgiveness, Dumbledore had a use for him so he was forgiven. Bella was so far removed from the Dark Lord that she could no longer be helpful so she was sent to rot. Again, I think you handled his character wonderfully.

There is one scene in this story that I don’t really get. When Severus came to heal Bella why was he so cruel to her? I find it hard to believe that anyone, even Severus, could treat someone they had ever loved like that. She was at her weakest and most vulnerable. He should have at least been gentle with her.

I loved the end of this. It was nice to see that Bella remained so concerned about her family. She seemed genuinely grateful to Severus for helping Draco, despite what he was doing to her. I wasn’t surprised by her final decision. She had spent fifteen years of her life in Azkaban. Then she had something to hold onto and she hardly escaped with mind. She knew that she could never make it with nothing to hold onto. Suicide was her only way out. However, I do think you should add a suicide warning to this story. I know that details weren’t given, but the topic is still there and some people are very sensitive about it. Also, I know there has been some chatter about his in your reviews, but I think it was very clear what Bella planned to do. I don’t think you need to adjust your ending at all. Actually, I wouldn’t change it. The story was wonderful. If I were you, I wouldn’t change a thing.

Again, this was truly amazing. I hope you continue to write because you are obviously very talented.

Author's Response: Wow. I mean, wow. I just logged on here to check out your stories (I saw your name mentioned in the review LilyRoxy left here) and now I find a review from you. Amazing. Thank you so much for your long review. I think we really share views on Snape and Dumbledore. The reason why I wanted Snape to mistreat Bella after her torture is that I think in this story-setting, she has been nasty to him all her life. She has always acted his superior because she had Voldemort behind her. Now she has fallen from Voldemort's grace and Snape gets to act out his frustration. He is broken, bitter, and somewhat sadistic. He will mistreat her for all that she has done to him, but he heals her all the same. Well, anyway, thank you so much for your review. I will certainly continue working - next story is with my betas currently. It's Snape again, but a little nicer... I am sure you're right about the suicide warning. I shall try to change that.

Author's Response: .. actually, I now noticed that your name was not mentioned in LilyRoxy's review here, I think I must have read it in her bio information?

Name: Lily Roxy (Anonymous) · Date: 02/21/07 10:41 · For: Chapter 1
Well, I'm french-canadian, so I can definitely tell when something is translated. The sentence structure is different, but I like it in this case:). It's one of the things that make the story unique and rich. Thank you for getting an actual person to translate this and not some cheap online machine! If anything kills a fanfiction, it's probably that...

I printed this one out, it's one of those fics you can read many times over.

I don't really understand how reviewer #1 thought that Bella was going to betray Severus, you made the ending pretty clear, in my opinion. Maybe it was that you didn't have the ''suicide'' warning in your summary...

Anyways, you did an excellent job at making Bella's healing realistic. I particularly liked the part about how she felt when she was able to read a book, very creative.

One thing that really caught my attention is that although it's clear that Bella is writing in a diary, she still adresses the Dark Lord as though she's writing him a letter. It's as though he's truly a part of her. Very unique and credible.

Bella falling in love with Severus is bizarre, but it makes sense. I'm still wondering if it's something like stockholm syndrome all the same...

Excellent fic!

Author's Response: Thank you very, very much! I know many people reject the thought that Bella could fall in love with Snape after Spinner's End, but I have read forum discussions on this subject and that was what made me think of this story in the first place. I am glad you think it makes sense!

Name: Shalashaska (Signed) · Date: 02/19/07 21:05 · For: Chapter 1
Oh,wow this was a very interesting story kind of sad but wow the only thing i wish is that bella and snape got more comfortable with each other

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing! Actually I had an original version where they got closer but it just didn't work out then. I was afraid they would go out of character then so I decided for this end.

Name: Bookwolf (Signed) · Date: 02/19/07 16:17 · For: Chapter 1
Shes not betraying SIrius-shes commiting suicide. Amazing story, and amazing translation (I'd never guess it was not originally written in english). Well done.

Author's Response: Thank you so much. My translators will be happy to hear that, too. I know I owe them much!

Name: misundersnape (Signed) · Date: 02/15/07 21:55 · For: Chapter 1
Oh my God, she's going to betray Severus - that nasty rotten b__tch....

Author's Response: Thank you - you have pointed out to me that I should maybe have made the end more clear :) But thank you so much for reviewing. My first review, whooooo!

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