Reviews For Twist of Fate
Reviewer: Hansolohpfrk
Date: 02/17/07 10:27
Chapter: Final Confrontation

O.O That was very well-written. How about a fic where you tell the story
about their 'courtship'. It would a wonderful prequel, I think. Good job on the story! It was very well done!

--Hanni

Reviewer: Hansolohpfrk
Date: 02/17/07 10:26
Chapter: Final Confrontation

O.O That was very well-written. How about a fic where you tell the story
about their 'courtship'. It would a wonderful prequel, I think. Good job on the story! It was very well done!

--Hanni

Reviewer: DogLover4Life
Date: 02/15/07 20:31
Chapter: Final Confrontation

Before I read, I think in your summary you meant to put "than," instead of "then." Than is used in comparisons.
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Oh that was wicked. I loved your use of metaphors, your characterization, and the transitions.

"But his charm had managed to melt the prim countenance of even Miss Gryffindor and the unexpectedly bold and passionate woman beneath had captivated him. Her passion and courage had melted the ice enclosing his heart in turn. "

I mean, honestly. Is there any better way to have conveyed those emotions? No. It was hauntingly perfect for the story. Every line sort of blended into each other, which made the flow of your writing incredible.

"The exact moment when Tom had stepped unto the final path of becoming Lord Voldemort. And she knew he spoke the truth."

Talk about emotion and human error. Plus, the Seer thing that worked out perfectly; for Minerva to resent everything about it. Wow.

Author's Response: Glad you liked it xD And thanks for the tip!

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