Reviews For My Sister Lily
Reviewer: FenrirG
Date: 03/18/07 0:43
Chapter: One-shot

Wow--this is a very amazing poem... it is deep and poingant, and you've really captured Petunia's emotional anguish with remarkable insight and believability,

I love how you managed to stay true to "Annabelle Lee" while maintaining your own distinct style. Your word choice and diction is marvellous; simple yet powerful. My favorite part would have to be:

"Everyday when I look at her son I think thoughts,
Of my beautiful sister Lily.
Every night when I lie in my bed I dream dreams,
Of my beautiful sister Lily.
For I know that when she left a part of me died.
I would give the world to again be by her side,"

Simply beautiful... I am deeply touched by this poem, for it captures Petunia's emotions, regrets, and sorrow so very well... It's beautiful.


Author's Response: Aw, thanks so much. I really enjoyed writing this. It was a bit of challenge trying to keep true to the meter in "Annabelle Lee," but it helped teach me the importance of word choice. I'm glad you enjoyed my little poem, and thanks a bunch for the review!

Reviewer: Marcia Longbottom
Date: 03/12/07 18:08
Chapter: One-shot

I nearly cried. Short but sweet. What Petunia would REALLY think, eh?

Author's Response: Aw thanks. Only Jo knows what Petunia thinks, but it is alot of fun to guess.

Reviewer: cocomaloco
Date: 02/18/07 18:09
Chapter: One-shot

wow! really moving and it puts Petunia in such a different caring light

Author's Response: Thank you! I really enjoy taking a look at the so called grey characters and trying to understand why they do what they do. That's so much of what I write is about Percy, but I'm starting to really get into Petunia at the moment.

Reviewer: Cheshlin
Date: 02/17/07 21:28
Chapter: One-shot

What a wonderful Poem!! Great job!

Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing and your kind words!

Reviewer: Cwiddy
Date: 02/17/07 21:24
Chapter: One-shot

Absolutely Beautiful!! Thank you soooo much! I love the descriptions you gave of Lily and Petunia! I can so see and feel it all!! Thank you again!!! :)

Author's Response: Oh thanks a bunch, I'm glad you liked it. It was alot of fun to write this for you!

Reviewer: hermione_at_heart
Date: 02/17/07 11:35
Chapter: One-shot

Gonz, this is such a lovely poem! It's a very interesting choice to use Petunia's point of view. I haven't ever really thought about her feelings in everything before, but this has, in a way, pointed it out to me. I especially like the last stanza, it's very touching. Well done! Cwiddy should really like it as her gift!

Phily :)

Author's Response: I starting thinking about Petunia when I did an assignment for Mythology class and I got really interested in the Lily-Petunia relationship. So when I read Anabelle Lee it screamed out to me as another way to show the that relationship. I'm really glad you enjoyed my poem and lots a ton for reviewing!

Reviewer: Ron x Hermione
Date: 02/17/07 11:11
Chapter: One-shot

Wow, Gonz! How thoughtful and wonderful was that poem! That was really an amazing interpretation of Annabelle Lee.

I like how you portrayed Petunia not as the snobby woman hat we know she is to Harry, but like she actually kind of cared about Lily, and was sad that she went away and then eventually got murdered.

I also like the birch tree part. I think that its very orginal for this kind of poem, and you had it in just the right spots.

I wish that I could write poetry like you! Great job! I'm sure that Cwiddy will love it.
Thanks so much for particpating!

~Lindsey :)

Author's Response: Thank you for setting the whole secret badger thing in motion. It is a blast and I love doing it. I believe that somewhere deep inside Petunia truly loves her sister or she would have never taken Harry in, but at the same time I think seeing Harry just hurts too much so she treats him badly. So in my poem I wanted to show that hidden love. The birch tree comes from the part in Anabelle Lee that goes "in the kingdom by the sea, and every time it was the place for that line I enetered mine. It took my forever to find a line that would just right. So thanks very much for the review!

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 02/16/07 9:13
Chapter: One-shot

that was cool!! was really good...anabelle lee was the first Edgar Allen Poe poem i ever read, back in 7th grade.

Anyway, it had beautiful language and a beautiful ending and all. :-)

~And I was a child, and she was a child, in this kingdom by the sea, but we loved with a love that was much more than love, me and my Anabelle Lee~


Author's Response: Thank you! Believe it or not when I was writing this it was the first time I read Anabelle Lee. It is a beautiful poem and I think it translates fairly well to the Lily and Petunia story. Thanks for reviewing, I'm glad you enjoyed it!

Reviewer: lovingu4ever
Date: 02/15/07 15:08
Chapter: One-shot

Beautiful. This is my new favorite HP poem.

Author's Response: Aw. Thank you very much, I'm gald you liked it.

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