wow. this is amazing. i am literally speechless. i love how there is so much emotion in the story and yet narcissa is so emotionless. my favorite part:
It must be the white dress. For Narcissa Black never wore white.
I don't know, i just love that! i dont kno what else to say, so i'll just end on this note: FANTASTIC!
Aww. Poor Narcissa. Your portrayal of her was really realistic, but it was original in that she was in between the in love with Lucius!Narcissa and the forced marriage!Naricssa to make a perfect character with real doubts and weaknesses. The ending was really sad! And I loved the idea of it being her first time wearing white. All in all, this fic was a great read!
why were you not satisfied? i greatly enjoyed it!
in fact, if you wouldn't mind, i'd like to use this fic for the BetaBoards Forum character study on Narcissa Malfoy.
i think it would be very interesting!
Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I definitely don't mind if you use this fic on the BetaBoards...if it helps with the study, why not?
not pleased? it is wonderful!
Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing!
That was very interesting to read. I've read several fics now about Narcissa's marriage and this is one of the better ones.
If you really want to go off on an entirely different path, I have found that the truly fascinating fics are written in the first person, instead of the third person. It is always fun to see how an "evil" person is written in the first person.
Major props though for capturing the idea that this marriage was for conveniance, not for love.
Author's Response: I actually thought about writing in the first person, but it just didn't seem to feel right, so I just settled for her point of view. Glad you liked the "convenient marriage" aspect...that was just always how I pictured it!