Reviews For Schadenfreude
Reviewer: EatMyPixieDust
Date: 08/07/11 20:09
Chapter: Schadenfreude

Well done and excellently written. The rythm was consistant and the rhyme was smooth and natural. Your use of adjectives was creative and I liked the way you mixed it up and avoided repetition in your words and phrases. You drew good parallels between the wars and the poem told the story well. Good job.

Reviewer: kumydabookworm
Date: 02/17/07 19:53
Chapter: Schadenfreude

Your title pulled me in. I loved the parallel to Hitler - and I feel like the brainwashing was subtle, and yet powerful. :) I feel like the poem doesn't come to an end at the last stanza, though...It needs something more. To leave the reader (me!) with a haunted feeling.

Oh and the "thrill and kill" line made me laugh...I don't think that was the intended effect. :)

Nice job! Good luck in the challenge, Jenn!

Kumy

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 02/15/07 14:43
Chapter: Schadenfreude

Very nice ballad! The parallel you drew in your author's note is striking. Wonderful job with the rhythm, and your choice of words is great throughout! I have one question: what happened to the gutter man at the end? Good luck in the challenge!! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much! At the end, the gutter man became a Death Eater and went on to kill Mudbloods, etc. This is what happens when a cunning leader recruits poor people that are desperate for a second chance.

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