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Name: Ginny Guerra (Signed) · Date: 02/18/07 23:29 · For: Chapter 2
A little more for each scene would have been great. This was good. Why don't you try to make it longer, say three or four chapters to elaborate a tad more?


Name: Striped Candycane (Signed) · Date: 02/18/07 13:42 · For: Chapter 2
This is a great start to your fanfic submissions! Before I tell you everything I liked about this, I just wanted to tell you that I found the descriptions slightly lacking. It seems like you are on the right track, but why not add a bit of metaphors for colour? I'm sure they would improve the piece. Another negative point: when Harry meets Ginny at the Burrow, she seems a little too snappy. Sure, at the end of HBP she seemed sad, but I didn't think she was angry at Harry. She understood his reasons for breaking up with her.
Despite this, I thought the dialogue was relatively realistic, and enjoyed how you portrayed Hermione and the Weasely twins. Harry's dreams called up interesting images in the mind. And I liked how you ended this on a positive note, without an over-load of angst or marshmallow fluff.
Keep writing!


Name: dumbledorefluertwins (Signed) · Date: 02/18/07 6:24 · For: Chapter 2
I really like this fic, I think you have the characterisation perfect. Is there going to be another chapter? I know that it said:
Completed: Yes, but considoring that this is a Harry/Ginny fic it seems to be an odd place to end: they haven't got back together. I really love this fic, so I hope that you do add another chapter!
~Evie

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! I don't think I'll be adding to this one- the next chapter would be Book 7 and I'm not ready (or able) to write Bill and Fleur's wedding or what follows- but I am really pleased that you think I could. I may let it sit awhile and then give it another shot. Best, Liz

Author's Response: By the way, this isn't a H/G fic, just a General Fic.


Name: HJPCATI (Signed) · Date: 02/17/07 23:30 · For: Chapter 2
A bit...scary...if you know what I mean. But it's very well written. I hope for more soon.


Name: Darkness Enshrouds (Signed) · Date: 02/17/07 21:00 · For: Chapter 2
I think the point has been brought home with sufficient force.

No kidding! :^D...Nothing like a bludger to the stomach to make things clear.

Brilliant.

Author's Response: Thanks! And thanks for reading. Cheers, Liz


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