Reviewer: Katie616
Date: 05/08/08 19:15
Chapter: A Sly Serpent's Decree

Wow. . . really amazing work here! I would never be able to write so many rhyming words! Ack. You make me feel so humble with this amazing emotional story. . . in ballad form! Glark!

Really, though, awesome story line. I mean, the way Voldemort tricks her. . . evil Voldy!. . . and the way she just has to sit and watch everything crumble. . . *sniff*

I have to say since it was a poem/ballad thing, there wasn't as much space for describing words, and there's a lot of potential with this plot for sobs. I'm actually kinda glad. . . because all your stories are so emotionally sapping, I have to take them a few at a time, but this one wasn't so bad, meaning more reviews for you and more awesome stories for me!

Thank you for another amazing experience.
~Katie

Author's Response: LMAO. I usually am not that good at poetry - It was for a challenge, so I decided why not. It was during the time that I actually had some free time >.< Anyhow, I'm glad you liked it!

Reviewer: Cwiddy
Date: 12/10/07 23:50
Chapter: A Sly Serpent's Decree

All I can say about this poem is WOW. Your word choices and rhythim keep the poem flowing. Your rhyme scheme is great and it really seems to work. You words bring to life this tale and help show Ginny's pain and confusion about this "friend" she found. It is a great summary of her trials!

Author's Response: :D I'm glad you like it, Chris! Thank you so much for the review!

Reviewer: dragonwings
Date: 03/07/07 20:03
Chapter: A Sly Serpent's Decree

This is very beautiful and very deep. When I read it, the first thing that came to mind was Tom Riddle's diary. To me, it felt that the serpent was the diary. It kept welcoming her in, listening to her woes and troubles. But in the end, it betrayed her and she panicked and tried to get out. And also the part about how she was waiting for the hurt to go away. Maybe this isn't how you meant for it to be interpreted, but that is what I got from it.

Your rhyme scheme is just right and you stuck to a very strict pattern, (something that I'm absolutely horrible at) and that's very admirable. Over all you've done a great job here, and your poetry is wonderful. Thank you so much for participating in the Ballad Challenge!

~Allie

Author's Response: :D Thanks Allie! *is blushing*

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 02/15/07 14:39
Chapter: A Sly Serpent's Decree

Nice job! The story is very dark, and your ballad reflects that well. Poor Ginny! Good job with the rhyme scheme, I especially like the stanzas that rhyme a/b/a/b. Good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks dear! ~Sunray

Reviewer: jediprankster
Date: 02/10/07 3:02
Chapter: A Sly Serpent's Decree

Very nice.

Author's Response: Thanks for the review!

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