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Name: Cwiddy (Signed) · Date: 05/31/08 12:28 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
This is a powerfully written story! It shows the power of friendship and the power of loss.

Name: dragonwings (Signed) · Date: 04/29/08 20:31 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
This was so sweet and angsty, Hallie! Honestly, I'm tearing up here!

This piece here you could've literally taken out of the books. Harry is so confused and emotionally drained throughout the seventh book, yet J.K. rarely puts that in straight words and leaves it up to us to pick that out. You've laid out that emotion and raw feeling for all of us to see and feel here.

I can see where your love for music has influenced you here, Hallie! That description of Harry hearing the music was so powerful and vivid. Music is one of those things that is so hard to describe but I think that you do admirably here!

There are very few things to critique on. Your grammar is great per usual and I don't see any of those dreaded typos... Great job!

Author's Response: Awws! Thank you Allie! :D I haven't gotten a review in so long...this just makes my day! *huggles*

Name: kumydabookworm (Signed) · Date: 06/02/07 18:53 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
Wow. I loved the ending. That was the most powerful part for me. You did a really great job with this story, darling, it's a really nice read.

A few things to comment upon. I feel like the thoughts of Harry should be in first person and italics...for example: I miss Dumbledore. I don't want to be here. It'd be much more powerful coming from him than through a narrator like it is now.

In addition, i wish we could see more of his grief. Does he feel guilty? What is missing from his life now that Dumbledore is gone - guidance? Is he lost? Trust? Can he confide in anyone? Confidence? Is he unsure without him?

Grief is made up of so much more than just sadness. The loss itself creates other feelings. You've portrayed the sadness VERY well. Allow us to see the other facets of Harry's mourning. :)

Great job with the story, darling! It's just wonderful the unity portrayed at the end. Friends forever.

Name: hpluver365 (Signed) · Date: 05/01/07 17:50 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
*hugs fellow Toaster*

Before I get to the reviewing part...WE WON THE HOUSE CUP!!!

Okay, I'm done. Your fic was great. I really loved how you had the Kansas lyrics repeat throughout. It brought the story full circle and added to the flow.

I thought you portrayed all the characters really well, especially Harry. He was ready to burst inside, but he kept his cool on the outside, just like the Harry we know!

Overall, great piece. You really portrayed Harry's feelings and the way he made it through his devastation well. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response: *hugs back* YAY! Go Toasters! lol. Thank you for the review! :D I'm glad you liked it!

Name: invisible sanctuary (Signed) · Date: 02/26/07 21:17 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
Your descriptions are very good! I love how Harry has grey skin and dull green eyes at the beginning (almost Slytherin-ish, which would represent the ultimate despair for Harry). I also like how you did the ending. I love Harry's connection with music there and how the birds' chirping starts his healing. I think Harry's reactions fit very well with his character, especially his reaction to Hermione crying. The only thing that seemed a bit off was Ron's reaction. I don't doubt that he would give Harry a bit of space, but I see him being a bit more assertive when Harry tries to cut himself off. I really enjoyed this!
-invisible sanctuary
Knight of the Turnip Table

Author's Response: Yea, I realized that about Ron after I wrote it, but ah well. If that's the only thing off with my writing then I think I'm doing pretty good. *grin*. Thanks for your review!

Name: Gin_Drinka (Signed) · Date: 02/18/07 6:18 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
I love the way you wrote the ending. Well, do you recognize me? Gin_Drinka, author of Somewhere Over the Rainbow...well, you left me a really nice review, so I checked out your story. It's really good. And that song seems nice, though I have never heard it. It fit with the story. GOod job!

Author's Response: Thank you so much! :). I really liked your story and I'm glad you like mine too!

Name: Trucker (Signed) · Date: 02/10/07 16:03 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
A nearly perfect piece! All I'd change is Hermione's statement of "You still have Ron and I." Hermione always has perfect grammar, so that should be "You still have Ron and me."

I think you showed the depth of Harry's emtional turoil perfectly.

Author's Response: :) Thank you!

Name: james_fanatic (Signed) · Date: 02/07/07 12:32 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
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Author's Response: Thank you! :). I worked very hard on this story to get it just right.

Name: james_fanatic (Signed) · Date: 02/07/07 12:32 · For: Carry On Wayward Son
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