How cool! I had figured out who Regulas was, but had blanked on Gideon and Fabian. I loved this story. Thanks so much!
Your five chapters are up. Most everything is revealed. But. This cannot be the end. I am buoyed in hope by the fact that this story is not marked as complete. Because the image of Albus Dumbledore has something to say, if I'm not mistaken.
Your characterization seems so realistic to me. When Molly ran down screaming at her brothers, that's exactly how she'd act. And, naturally, you have Snape down to a tee. Your Snape is always pretty good.
Way back in the first chapter, with the spidery, long fingers presenting potions and whatnot, it could have been Snape or Dumbledore. Finally in this chapter it is revealed to be Snape. But you did it so cleverly -- and helped to further the plot at the same time as this revelation.
How interesting that Snape and Regulus are Parselmouths. For a rare gift, it's remarkably prevalent.
There at the end of the chapter, when Hermione is talking about the notes from Fawkes, I got confused. Is this something we haven't learned yet or am I just not a careful reader? Hopefully this will be explained in the next chapter.
The twins are probably my favorites.
A couple things: I thought that the QWC stadium was built just for the occasion and disassembled when the occasion was over, because the QWC is held all over the world so it's not very useful to have something as big as that around all the time.
Also, the prosecutor, when he becomes flustered-looking, becomes flustered-looking -- not flustered looking. I think. If that makes any sense whatsoever.
Please, write another chapter. And Have a nice day (unless you have other plans)! *D*
You know, the first time I realized that that might be Regulus I thought I was wrong...It does make sense though, now that I think about it.
But still, good deeds or not, I can't help but think that Snape is very deserving of a Dementor's kiss...
I never thought I'd say this...but I'm enjoying being slightly confused. If there's anything I can't stand, it's a story with an easily predictable ending, and that's definitely not true for this one. I'm really liking the fact that I have no idea what's coming next. Truly a work of art...
Author's Response: Hahaha, yeah, that's probably not a typical thing for ANYONE to say. But wow, thank you, that's incredibly high praise! *blush* I hope it lives up to your expectations. The fic is only five fairly short chapters long, and chapter 4 is now in queue, and chapter 5 is ready to go in queue as soon as possible.
Thank you for the lovely review and the giggle. :)
This story is incredibly intriguing. The first time I read it I couldnít understand the timing, but I know now that I mixed up who Geoff and Frank were (and now Iím mind-boggled by the connections JKR has slipped in without us even noticing). I still have no idea who Mary Anne or some of the others can be, but I can simply look forward to reading more.
You do a great job of slowly hinting at who Reginald is (though of course by the time we know his name weíve figured it out). Thanks to your summary, I thought at first Snape had dragged Draco somewhere. The story youíve chosen to tell is more interesting, I think.
Reginaldís thoughts, as well as being illuminating as to who he was, are very interesting to me; I think you have characterized him well. Especially about his brother and cousin. Very good clues to his identity and all that, but beyond that showing a side of his character that people sometimes overlook.
I loved the aspirin part. A perfect illustration of the helplessness these people find themselves experiencing in their new lives.
There are a couple of things I disagree with in this chapter. First of all, I donít think Iíve ever seen anyone with ruby red lips unless theyíve been drinking punch. Iím not sure I would use that description if I were you. This may just be me being strange, but it distracted me from the overall tone of that section.
Also, and this is definitely me being strange, but I would have preferred a warning for the language Reginald uses at the end of the chapter. Itís not something I really like to see. However, it did get his emotions across. It took this second time through for me to realize what had happened, on Halloween night. And why he would be so upset.
Iím glad that this story is completed and I only have to worry about the queue, because I really like it. Looking forward to reading what comes next! Have a nice day! *D*
Author's Response: WOW, what a review!
It took me reading a few times to figure out what you were talking about a Geoff and Frank, but I think I understand you now. ;)
I had troubles with this fic initially because I only thought to a particular part (which is in chapter 5), and not past that, and that was not an ending point. And because I hadn't really thought about it, I wasn't going to tell it, but then, you know how your muse takes over your whole life sometimes. *facedesk*
All of the named characters are canon - at least alluded to.
It's very, very difficult to characterise a character we've seen little of . . . thank you for that. :)
I do think I'm going to keep the lips, mainly because the whole family is supposed to be unusually good looking, but I do see your point.
I thought I'd put a warning for language, but I may have missed that on this archive. I'll go do it, because I do like people to at least have the OPTION of not reading it! Although, yeah - I'd have been upset if I were him. >:_>
Thanks for the lovely review!!!
Interesting is kinda short... Intrigin? yes very! Great chapter.. I think I can point a few known characters.. Haha Frank and Geoff... funny names...
Author's Response: There are a total of five chapters in this story, and the story is finished. It will be uploaded as fast as it can be. Chapter 2 is in queue now.
Who do you think those characters are? *waggles eyebrows*
Thanks for the review!
Hmm...Most intriguing...I look forward to finding out more about these people, about their, how shall we say, situation. You've definitely gotten my attention...
Author's Response: Well, the story is completed. Chapter 2 is in queue, and the remaining chapters will go in queue as fast as the others get approved, as MNFF has a one-chapter limit.
Thankfully, this chapter didn't stay in the queue very long (two or three days, tops)