Reviews For The Hundredth Time
Reviewer: charlie_the_moose
Date: 06/27/07 13:41
Chapter: The Hundredth Time

I really have no words to express what this poem makes me feel... other than that I've printed this out and stuck it up on my wall.
I may go and have a good cry now. It's so brilliant, and simple but complex.
Just... wow.
Charlie.

Author's Response: Oh my gosh, that has got to be one of the nicest reviews I ever gotten! I'm glad you thought this was so good.

Reviewer: moony101
Date: 06/20/07 23:36
Chapter: The Hundredth Time

WOW you definatly can write and in all the abundance of over rhymed stuff that I see here this was a refreshing change.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: coppercurls
Date: 04/12/07 19:20
Chapter: The Hundredth Time

This is a really interesting poem, I like the way you use the repetition to create a rythem for the piece. I like the first two lines since they set the mood for the piece. Interestingly enough, you also use an iambic scheme which follows in all the hundreth time lines. I think this poem could be even better if you could manipulate the seconds lines to follow- quite a few already do.

It must be the hundredth time
The tears cannot stop falling.

Perhaps this can become "The tears can't stop their fall" or "The tears can't cease their fall."

It must be the hundredth time
All warmth begins to chill me.

This last line seems a little awkward to me. Why is warmth chilling? Is there no warmth? Perhaps slightly less contradictory terms would help?

It must be the hundredth time
My heart had cried out in pain.

I love this line- I'd just omit the word had, I think it disrupts the flow.

It must be the hundredth time
That inside I crumble like a cookie.

I like that you are trying to use a creative metaphor, but with the seriousness of what you are writing about, and with the prior word choice I just feel like the word cookie really is out of place. If you want something else that falls down try something like a cardhouse or a sandcastle. Cookie just reminds me of a six year old and I don't think this needs a word with that kind of baggage.

It must be the hundredth time
That it’s felt like the hundredth time.

This is absolulty brilliant. It makes the poem. I love, love, love this as the last line and conclusion.

You really did an excellent job on this, and it shows!

Author's Response: Thank you very much for this excellent review! I really think that this will improve my other poetry as well! Your critique was very good, I think I'm going to use some of your suggestions!

Reviewer: twirlergirl583
Date: 02/07/07 16:55
Chapter: The Hundredth Time

This poem is beautiful. It really captivates the feeling of sorrow. I can understand where Ginny's feelings and words of despair. I expecially like the lines I feel myself stop feeling and meories come to taunt me.

-Emily-

Author's Response: Wow, thank you! Those compliments were so nice! I'm glad you like it so much!

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 02/05/07 19:51
Chapter: The Hundredth Time

Okay, first off, you know what is weird? There are only a few poems on this site with the warning for suicide, then you write a poem with one right after I do. Weird.

Okay, reviewing time!

Great repetition - I can see why you liked this yourself and submitted it.

I admit that the last lines confused me momentarily, but that is because I was thinking that I have a school project tomorrow and wasn't paying attention. When I did look, it made perfect sense and I thought wow, that is such a great ending to this poem. :-)

Great job!

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: He he, that's pretty funny. What are the chances? I'm glad you like it, repittition is one of my favorite poetry techniques. I liked the ending too. It was my favorite part while writing it. Thanks for the review! :)

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