Reviewer: Nova
Date: 08/24/09 3:13
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

OH MY GOODNESS.
This chapter just made my day.

It took a while to get Hayley and Remus together, but it was definitely worth it in the end. They make such a good pair.

I really like the way you've developed Debbie as a character. You just love to hate her. The way you write about her makes you really feel the hate and jealousy that Kirsty feels.

All in all, a very well written chapter.
Just make sure the gap between updates isn't too long this time. I was really starting to miss this story. ;)

~Nova

Reviewer: Lympha
Date: 08/24/09 1:48
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

Yay, a new chapter. I loved it. It is good to see that Remus and Hayley are back together. Now the only pair apart is Kirsty and Sirius. God, I hate Debbie.
Anyway it was a wonderful chapter and I liked it a lot.

Reviewer: Mrs-Prongs
Date: 08/24/09 1:45
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

Hayley and Remus - finally! They are adorable.
Another fantastic chapter!
I love this story - you are a great writer.

Reviewer: Ravenlily
Date: 08/23/09 21:48
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

Amazing!!! Can't for the next chapter!

Reviewer: LuNaLoVeGoOdLoVer
Date: 08/23/09 19:54
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

ah, you know, i wanted to be dissapointed in you coz this chappie came so late, but this chappie took all that away. great job! and hurry up w/ the next! siriusly, we thought you had abandoned us ): but i forgive ya. :P
so, to da chapter:
3 marauders + emma down, one too go. *squeels*
The part when Haley runs out.... amazing. You are such a good writer! That's really all i can say. Have you thought about publishing? you realy have got skill, and this story is... well, it's SO good. I'm like,.... ah! I need to read the next chappie!
And poor krithy. now haley is fine again and she'll be all left out ): well, maybe. idk, i have to continue to read! so uptade soon plz!!!

Reviewer: ringobeatlesfan4
Date: 08/23/09 19:43
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Gathering

GAH, Whit, 'twas fabulous. You've outdone yourself with this one, if that's possible. The characters are flawless. I love it. I wish Sirius and Kirsty would get their act together, though... Ah well, if they got together too soon then the story would be boring and prosaic.

Oh, Hayley and Remus. I really do love them. They're perfect for each other. But I have to say, I really like Kirsty/Sirius the best out of the pairings here. Emma/Sam is great. Love it. They're so awesome together as well.

Update soon! This fic is addictive; my own personal brand of heroin. /Edward Cullen. Really, you have to update! But this one was great timing; I leave on vacation til Friday tomorrow morning, and since I won't have internet access for the week, this was awesome! {BeccA}

Reviewer: The-heir-of-Gryffindor
Date: 08/23/09 18:46
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

Yey! First review of this new fabby chapter.
I love you right now for the Remus/Hayley ness we are seeing here.
But..... still only half way there!!!
Kirsty Sirius forever wooop.
It better be in the next chapter!
From your biggest fan, Annie.

Reviewer: Pussycat123
Date: 08/23/09 18:44
Chapter: Chapter 21 - Who Said that Beauty and the Beast was just a Fairytale?

Well, at first I was on Hayley's side completely, and was practically yelling "Kick him in the head!" at my computer screen. Which was weird, because usually I really, really like Remus. But, even knowing his side of the story, I was just really mad at him.

Then when he whispered that little, "I'm a werewolf" ... AAAH! I just kind of exploded with love and forgave him for everything ever. He seemed incredibly ... I dunno, real all of a sudden. Very human. Because he was trying so hard to protect the girl he loved, and it was so hard for him to say that one little thing that it barely came out as words. And, even though it was kind of cliched, I loved that it was raining and stuff. It really wasn't a bad thing at all. Basically, yeah. It was like I was just kind of completely channelling Hayley's emotions somehow. It was awesome.

And I want a Remus. =)

Reviewer: Lympha
Date: 08/16/09 13:45
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Gathering

I sincerely hope that Sirius and Kirsty will break their promises to Debbie. I really hope they will get together and that you will update soon. Thanks for the story so far.

Reviewer: Luna_Lover
Date: 08/12/09 21:13
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Aftermath: Part Two

Hello, Whit! This review is for both parts of Chapter 7. :)

One of the reasons I really like this story is because there’s always so much going on. I never get bored reading it, because there’s never a lull in the action, drama, emotional rollercoaster, etc.
Sometimes it does seem a bit unrealistic to have so much emotional drama going on between so many people at the same time, but I think this could mostly be explained by the fact that a) this is high school and b) these people have known each other for seven years, and we’re just seeing the climax of all the emotional tension that’s been building over that time. Still, I think if it slowed down just a little, it would give me some room to breathe. :) Just something to think about.

“I’d better-“ she announced, indicating the door behind her as her fellow Ravenclaws filed passed. I got a bit confused here: Hayley told Remus that she couldn’t tell him how to get into the Ravenclaw common room, but if they are standing in front of the door as Ravenclaws file pass to get inside, wouldn’t Remus hear the door asking questions and the students answering? I don’t quite understand what’s happening here.

Catching a glimpse of the shiny surface Sirius tugged on the material to produce his sleeping bag. I do think that this could stand a bit of explanation. Why does Sirius have a sleeping bag in his trunk?

I found interesting the idea of Pepperup Potion as a cure for a hangover; I had thought it was a cure for the common cold, but from the way you wrote it, it didn’t look like it completely cured the hangover. Did it, or did it just soften the symptoms or something? I wasn’t quite clear on that.

“Scars don’t hurt, you idiot, they tell stories.” This was a really interesting line to me, but nothing more was said about it in the scene. I’d like to see more of Kirsty’s thoughts on scars and the stories they tell.

I liked getting a glimpse into the Slytherin common room. I think you did a good job of showing a more human, relatable side of the Slytherins, especially of Sian.

I like the way that you show Lily’s progress in her relationship with James, the way she still struggles with him but makes an effort to make it right afterwards.

Remus turned to him and sighed. “I fancy Hayley.” I found it a bit surprising the way Remus simply said this straight out. I would have thought he would skirt around it more and be more awkward about it.

"I did this for me, to help clear my conscience over what last night did to Emma." I liked this line, because it’s a step away from the clich of “James changes everything for Lily.” It shows James being mature just because he is.
I also liked the repeated line, “bloody alchohol!” I just found that funny. :)

Whit, I have a problem. My problem is, I don’t want to stop reading this story! I have to remind myself to keep leaving reviews. Keep up the great work!

~LiLu

Reviewer: hermione_lily_ginny_luna
Date: 08/11/09 3:30
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

i love your story. when will you update next?

Reviewer: kritchen
Date: 07/24/09 20:23
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

Vibes of frustration! More like WAVES.

Reviewer: kritchen
Date: 07/24/09 20:23
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

Vibes of frustration! More like WAVES.

Reviewer: kritchen
Date: 07/24/09 20:05
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory

Wow. I can't believe I let it get this long between reading! I still adore this story and man, I feel for Kirsty. I've been there.

Reviewer: dedequeen
Date: 07/17/09 14:20
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

hey when are they getting together when are you posting more chapters... i COMMAND you to WRITE MORE A LOT MORE. PLZ AND THXS U

Reviewer: tumeric
Date: 07/16/09 7:00
Chapter: Chapter 1 - The Gathering

Hello:) I'm new on mugglenet and this is definitely my favourite story ever:) I really like the way you characterise Debbie as the one who everyone thinks is evil, but I think... if I was in her place... I would do the same thing... kind of:) Anyway, keep on writing... you're great:)
p.s. how do I add a story to my favourites... I'm a bit blonde at the moment:D thanks...

Reviewer: dedequeen
Date: 07/14/09 15:51
Chapter: Chapter 7 - Aftermath: Part Two

i think sam has redeemed himself and to be perfectly honest emma really mad me mad how can she not realize that sam was talking about her. i mean how dense can you get

Reviewer: Bethatrix
Date: 07/11/09 17:33
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

Arghhhh! The one chapter everything seemed to be going well!
You've got to put them together please! Its killing me!
Ands the peter and heather thing was quite cute.
xxxx

Reviewer: Luna_Lover
Date: 07/08/09 17:34
Chapter: Chapter 6 - Halloween

Hello, Whit! Surprise, surprise, you get my first review for Bine’s class. :)

I enjoyed reading this chapter, although I did think the idea of a dance at Hogwarts was a bit improbable. It’s true that the Yule Ball took place, but we don’t see any evidence of that being a normal occurrence at all in canon. I was amazed at the descriptions of the students’ costumes; where did they get the time and material to make all of that? Are they all as willing to blow off homework as Kirsty? I know that a lot can be done with magic, it just seemed a bit much to me. Nevertheless, I really had fun reading it.

[I] ‘“Once or twice-“ replied Peter.

“-every hour of everyday-“ added Sirius.

“-ever since we first entered the dungeons,” finished Emma.’[/I]

This bit reminds me of the scene in PS when Fred and George remark on Percy’s being a prefect. :)
Ah, if not for dear Sam, I could imagine Emma and Peter getting together. Poor Peter is left all alone! I suppose there’s always Mary MacDonald...but that just isn’t clicking for me.
Okay, I was a bit confused, because when you said Kirsty wanted a “fancy dress” party, I thought she had taken the idea of Muggles “dressing up” for Halloween and translated it into formal gowns and such. But then Lily said that everyone had to wear a costume. So does “fancy dress” still mean a Halloween-type costume?

Nitpick alert: [I] “Kirsty watched as Lily, who had previously snatched Kirsty’s essay off her in order to correct any mistakes, shot Sirius a look of disproval over the top of the piece of parchment.” [/I]
Ought the word to be “disapproval,” instead of “disproval”? I thought “disproval” was to prove someone wrong, whereas Lily sounds like she’s disapproving of Sirius’ attitude instead.

Nitpick alert: [I] “everyone had recovered from Sirius and Emma’ shenanigans.” [/I]
I think you’re missing an s after “Emma’”

I’m a bit confused; is Lesley in the same year as Kirsty et al? Just trying to get this straight in my head.
“Whinged” is another word I looked up. You taught me another word, hooray!

I really like the way you presented Sam in this chapter. I was annoyed with him when I found out he knew Emma liked him but hadn’t done anything about it and felt simply “flattered” by it. I was upset when he started dancing with Kirsty, and then I was happy and relieved when he told her why he was doing it. He is much smarter than everyone gives him credit for, and you did a great job of hiding that up until now and then bringing it out slowly.

I’m curious as to how James could spike the punch without trespassing on Goplam’s Third Law or whatever it is…maybe the spell ferments the fruit in it or something.

All in all I liked this chapter a lot. It did a lot to advance the emotional tension and let us get a glimpse of how the different characters feel about one another, especially to get to know Sam better. And of course, you leave us with a shocking cliff-hanger. Is it pure alcohol, or something more? I’ll just have to read on and find out…

~LiLu

Reviewer: CAPS_LOCK_ADDICTE
Date: 07/08/09 17:32
Chapter: Chapter 20 - The Curious Incident of Two Wet Gryffindors in a Dormitory: Part Two

I really like how you didnt make Peter the worthless charachter, because most fics do and that annoys me so much.
I hate Debbie so much! But I really feel bad for Kirsty and Sirius.

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