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Name: astro_wizkid (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 19:47 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
I must say, this has to be, by far your best chapter in Ep. 3 to date. Not just because of the graphic imagery or the masterful use of language to convey your message...but the sheer raw passion and emotions that jump out to the reader. The emotional turmoil Ron was plagued with...the erotic release of Ron's fears and desires so he might feel, so he might have an understanding of what life feels like again, after being plagued by death, destruction, terror and hate....it was like a explosion of sheer bright light, in a sense that it left me in aw...not because of the moving tribute the Aurors (especially Kingsly gave) or the apparent grief which Ron was suffering...but a realistic image of human nature...that we all feel pain and we channel it in different means...I loved how you made Remus' character react to Tonk's death in the same manner which J.K would have him react...and how even though his life has been stolen from him yet again, that he does not blame neither Ron or Harry for her death....I seriously have to say that Anna's moving act by thanking Ron for at least trying everything in his power to save Tonks nearly brought me to tears...which is extremely rare that a piece of literature can do....going back to what I originally said...that this chapter is by far the best you have written in Ep.3...maybe in all of your writings, for your accurate and passionate in-dept investigation into human nature....i didn't find Ron's lashing out on Dennis innapropiate...for Ron, being hot tempered isn't something new...and he usually gets extremely angry when trying to deal with strong emotions...so that was definatly in character...but it still slightly frightened me...and the ron/hermione scene was a bit surprising at first...but how you wrote it was so....captivating....just brilliantly written! and the entire part with ron saving his beard....i though it was a tad out of place...but anyway, what do i know? i'm just a reader! lol! all in all, brilliant chapter and i'm dying to read the next one...i can't wait to see what clue the nightshades left for ron and harry to tackle! great job and i'll be waiting patiently for the next one!

Author's Response: Thanks so much. I freely admit that I kind of screwed up the beard part, I had just put so much into the scene before it, i don't think I had enough left to give the shaving bit all it deserved. At the same time, it had to be done and was really supposed to be more along the lines of Ron no longer trying to live up to an image, but instead being himself, and going through the rest of this not as some crusty old auror like his mentor, but as Ron Weasley, the man who in the words of his own wife is the best damn auror around. Ah well, at least I got everything else right which was the important part. There is a trick to writing emotions, I think, and take this for what you will. The first part is just experience. You have to be extremely comfortable with your writing voice and your vocabulary. You have to be able to walk around comfortably in your own skin, and so to me, those who are more deliberate in their writing aren't going to be so successful because emotional writing is raw writing. It is essentially closing your eyes, and trusting yourself, allowing yourself to run on this diatribe. Essentially, you envision the scene, as wholely and completely as you can, and feel what the characters are feeling and the whole time you are writing but you aren't paying much attention to what you are writing because you are trusting that natural linguistic instinct of yours to express what is in your mind. This was essentially what the sex scene was for me. Before I wrote the whole scene I had it planned out logistically, and I had contemplated it symbolically, But when I actually went to write, I closed my eyes, placed my hands on the keyboard, and just ran the scene. So the first part of the trick is experience and practice because I think to really connect emotionally, you have to build a link with the words, and let the words then form a link with the reader, and time you spend actually contemplating what you are writing has the potential of breaking that link you have with the words. I guess you can call it method-writing, or something like that. And I think you are successful if you feel the emotions as you're writing, and when you go back to read what you wrote, you feel them again. So this chapter is in essence the same as the last two chapters in part I, Everybody Does It, and the last bit of One Good Day for me. I just got into this whole method-writing phase, and I think it works. And I loved the choice of the word investigation on your part because that is what a lot of writing is. I think good writing is an investigation into our own souls and the souls of those with whom we inhabit this planet. In literature classes, when you perform analytical reading, teachers are constantly talking about themes and symbols and such, and a lot of people don't understand how this is important, but often times it is the single most important part about the work. It is these devices that allow a writer to connect with the reader on so many levels and form that bond. If you take Waiting for Godot literally, for instance, it is this boring little play (theater of the absurd is actually the genre) about a couple of dudes waiting for a third. But if you allow it to become more, to accept Godot as a symbol of God it becomes ever so much more significant. As for Remus, here's the thing about Remus. I like him. I imagine him almost like a much younger Dumbledore, wise and talented, kind and forgiving, but grave plagued with the worries of youth. We see Dumbledore as an old man who is eccentric, partly because being so old he has a different perspective that most stuff really is small stuff and not worrying over. Remus being not nearly as old as dumbledore is therefore not prone to the same perspective (also, being a werewolf hurts too I'm sure). So what you see is someone who has a lot of the same character traits but with a different dispostion, and a different voice. So I find him a fascinating character, but I also get nervous when I write him because my image of him is so narrow it can sometimes be stressful to try and get it right. By contrast, Harry is an everyman character, and therefore pretty easy to write, though you run the risk of other people telling you your Harry doesn't fit their image. Being the main character, aside from a few archetypical traits, he's kind of a blank slate. And really, Ron and Hermione are similar. JKR no doubt gives the characters depth, but at the same time they are archetypical and therefore relatively easy to grow and manipulate (Ron, the loyal best friend, Hermione the bookish know it all with a penchant for rule following, or, a goody-two shoes). Ginny, on the other hand, is something of a newer archetype that has come about over the past twenty or thirty years. A very feminine, girly-type girl who is also very capable of standing side by side in a man's world. It's different than the old tom boy archetype as those characters usually follow a kind of ugly duckling progression, whereas Ginny embodies a kind of powerful young, non matronly, female character throughout that i think would be largely unheard of a generation or two ago. This presents in and of itself a wholely new challenge as it is relatively new, but I think a challenge that is more fun than not... obviously because I wrote a whole story from her point of view. Anyway, I realize I just got way off track, so i'm going to go ahead and say thanks, and hope to see ya for the next one!

Name: Athene713 (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 15:31 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
Ooh, cliffie. I'm reading this and finding myself being more and more interested in the character of Anna. I don't know if she has more of a role to play in this story (I hope she does) but I think you should consider writing a story about her. And if you don't want to, would you mind if I "borrowed" her? I love the way you describe her.

On the other hand, I loved this chapter. It made me want to cry (I love Tonks) Great job! You're an awesome author, keep up the good work and please update soon!

Author's Response: Hehehe... Anna. Last couple of weeks I've been thinking a lot about her as a character, and I have come up with this totally cool little spin off idea. Though, I really do want to find a way to extricate myself from fanfic writing following my work on the Epiglogues series, so I would consider letting you borrow her, but, and this is a huge but, we would have to discuss my vision for her. Since it'll be some time before I can check my email, though, and I guess this is a big thing that I can go ahead and tell everyone since it doesn't involve Epilogues much at all, here's what I was thinking about doing with her. The daughter of a metamorphmagi and a werewolf, Anna is, unique, to say the least. In total comic book fashion, I imagine her also being a metamorphmagi, and also a wearwolf, though a very unique kind. She's only part wearwolf, and so, she is not restrained by the lunar cycle as a full wolf, allowing her to change at will, but not being a full wearwolf, she is also not nearly as powerful. In wolf form she retains a slightly improved sense of sight, smell, hearing, blah blah blah, and gets pretty hairy, she gets more agile and strong too, but again, nothing compared to a real werewolf. Also, she maintains full control over herself in this form, and is even able to in a way use her metamorphmagi abilities to change the color of her fur for better camoflauge. The story would take place sometime in the future, after the Epilogues trilogy but before the events of Everybody Does It. Essentially, something political would go down that would put werewolves in serious trouble. Tom, being an Auror, sees this coming and warns Anna to flee before he's forced by the Dept. of Magical Law Enforcement to go after her. She does flee, moving to America, where she, simply put, has adventures, has boyfriends, that kind of thing. The big thing about this whole arc is that I would also write it more along the lines of a tv series, with each story being a season and each chapter being an episode. It would still be novelized, but still follow that basic format. So, yeah, I've thought about it. As I said, I would be willing to loan her out, but we would definitely need to talk first. Oh, and as for the rest of the stuff about the chapter, thank you ever so much, I appreciate it.

Name: Greenelfhpfan (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 14:30 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
I love this story...Again, you have put so much emotion into words that it overwhelms the reader, pulls the reader into the story to feel the characters pain, passion, happiness or whatever else the character is feeling at the time. A job well done!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. The emotions are, obviously, very important to me. When a writer is successful, they have some aspect of their writing that pulls the reader in. Be it suspense, or character development, or plot, you know, there is a hook, and with me I think it is the emotion, and being able to tap those emotions, it is what has allowed me to tackle the complex Epilogues plot because it is what is that link. Sure, I may finish every chapter with a cliffhanger, but I think what makes that cliffhanger is the fact that you know that when you finally see what happens, you know there is going to be an explosion of emotion on the other side. In essence, I have created this plot, and it is the emotions regarding this plot that holds it together. So thank you very much and I hope you'll join me for the next chapter!

Name: Igo Retla (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 13:29 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria

Author's Response: Thank you, Igo, I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Name: red haired mom (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 13:28 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
The funeral was beautiful. You did do right by her. The way Ron blamed himself was so real and I appreciate that Remus and Anna both told him it wasn’t his fault and thanked him for trying. The remark about Tonks still being pink was needed and I am glad you put it in. No matter how grim and upsetting things were, you could always rely on Tonks to be bright and funny. The flower vendor being there was a nice touch. Tonks made lives brighter just by being her. Thank you for allowing her life to be remembered with the lightness and laughter, side by side with the sadness. It was definitely a tribute worthy of her. Did you base the ‘Salute’ to her on a military twenty-one gun salute? If so, good job, and if not, that is what I felt from it. That has always brought a tear to my eyes, as I have so many military friends and family and between the salute and Taps, I never make it through a funeral without falling apart.
The scene with Dennis was really harsh, but to someone drowning in grief, it is hard to censure your thought and words. That is the reason my kids don’t go to funerals. Children will usually react in one of two ways, they either fall apart and cry uncontrollably, or they will hardly be affected at all. The fact that Dennis reacted in the latter, and only wanted to comfort his dad actually showed maturity beyond his years. I was glad to see Hermione take him to Neville’s and away from Ron’s anger and guilt.
Hermione knew what she was asking when she told Ron to take it out on her, and even though he had broken his wrist and damaged his knuckles; sometimes the only way to get through the pain of losing a loved one is to reaffirm life. It was a brutal scene that was healing in and of itself. The ‘brutality’ of it was what made it right. I am glad you didn’t sugarcoat the way things happen in life.
I know shaving his beard has a symbolic meaning to Ron. I hope that wherever he is going, it is with the purpose of stopping any more attacks. It seemed as though he knows where and what to look for now, so I hope he can stop things before they lose another friend.
I know everyone is going to be clamoring for a quick update, but I will say, take your time. I would rather wait a little longer for the update, and know that you have it right, than get a quick chapter that you feel doesn’t have everything it needs. Just quit being so hard on yourself and know that we all really love what you are writing. This chapter was perfect and the next one, when it comes will no doubt be just as good.

Author's Response: Hey! Thank you so much, I spent some deliberation on exactly how to do the funeral, and even had a couple of pages written before deleting the whole thing and changing direction with it. It was a little different from other emotional scenes, and partly because of the logistics. It was difficult to understand exactly when to bring the camera in, and what to have it show, so to speak. The first attempt had us starting off with the actual carrying of the casket out to the site, but that ultimately didn't work. The big thing there is that there was the complexity of action, which I think detracted from the emotions of the scene, and the images, which I think were what were the most important thing here. Also there was the decision not to have Kingsley's speech in full, and I did this for a lot of reasons. For one, i don't think anyone listens to a eulogy in full, in the very scant few memorial services I have been to, I know that I did not. But it allowed me to kind of meter the scene, pace it, in a way, while at the same time show that there were bits and pieces being filtered in, just not the whole thing, and it allowed us to frame all the different images and such that Ron was taking in at the time. On top of this, I think there was the juxtaposition that I liked between the measured and scripted speech being shown in conjunction with the totally chaotic and unscripted emotions we see within Ron. Yes I did model the salute after the 21 gun salute, and partly this was because I knew that kind of thing is a tear jerker in general. I remember driving by a military cemetery on my way home from work (I was in the military at the time) on September 11th, 2001, and there is just something raw and visceral and touching about military funerals, and this is part of the reason why I chose to do that. The other reason was because of the role the Auror society plays in this post Voldemort world. In the books, we don't see a regulated magical army of any kind, and the Aurors are depicted more along the lines as an elite branch of the Department of Magical Law Enforcement. So functionally I have tried to keep them as such, an elite police force, but culturally, in my mind they also fill that void of a military entity, something that considering the Death Eater wars, you would think the magical world would have. The small scene with Dennis is actually very important, too, and what we are seeing here in Part III just glimpses of the characters of Dennis and Linus and Tom, but I think this is probably one of the most insightful looks at Dennis as a character that we will get in this story. Obviously Dennis is going to be playing a much larger part in The Epilogues Companion, but suffice to say that Dennis is very unemotional (if you'll remember from Everybody Does It, Harry remembers how he only ever saw Dennis cry once). This lack of emotion flies in the face of the Weasleys who themselves are very emotional people, and Ron in particular. So being confronted with this part of him that could be so detached, in essence, I suppose you could say that he was lashing out at himself, at the part of him that would rise above the emotional aspects of life and look at things in a more pragmatic manner. And what this really is, in one way anyway, is a darker look at the relationship between Ron and Dennis. Of course this isn't as blatant to you guys who don't know the whole story, and haven't seen as much interraction between the two as I have, but there you go. And in the end this really opened the door for Hermione who I visualize as the problem solver, the one who keeps things together, I guess. It is she who is able to put the two personas apart and separate them, and then come back and fix the broken one. That scene, I gotta tell you, was some serious tapdancing because MNFF has some rules against sexual content, and you know it had to be sex, it had to be because of the nature and the physicality of it and the purpose of it, but I had to make sure I wasn't descending into outright porn. At the same time, I couldn't hint at it either. This had to be loud and raucous and in your face, but with meaning and intent, and there are just so many layers to that scene, and it is brutal, it is violent, but at the same time, there is an even deeper message of love and life beneath that, and I'm really glad it came across. I think the one thing I kind of regret is having to put the sexual warning in the author's note, because that kind of killed what I wanted the beginning of that scene to be, and it did affect the way in which I wrote it. I wanted it to appear that in the split second before it began that you weren't sure what Ron was going to do, making the most likely action him actually beating Hermione, or them getting in some sort of dual, but I think I held back on that because I didn't want him to actually get into an altercation, I don't think that would be in character, and given the warning, it wouldn't be much of a shock. But at the same time, I liked how it turned out, and it was another one of those unconscious writing bits wherein I just kind of let my fingertips go without paying much attention to what they were doing, and when you learn to trust yourself like that, well, things are going pretty good for yourself. I do believe I kinda did the beard scene on the cheap though, and I think this might have been out of sheer fatigue. It took a lot to write this chapter, and I think I kind of skimped here as a result, but you know, I think the scene before it ended up being the primary overture, and the beard was just like an aftershock anyway, so it's not like I'm too upset. But whether he knows the score now or not, that still remains to be seen. And thanks for the remarks about taking my time. I've gotten to the point where I won't even start a new chapter until the one before it has posted and I think this is because I don't want to get really invested in one chapter and find out the previous has been rejected and I now have to shift gears. But I am ready to go on the next chapter, and while I probably won't start writing until Wednesday, I will say that I don't expect it to take too long, and I will also say that we're going to continue our departure from tracking down the Nightshades for one more chapter, but I don't think that they will let us continue on without them for too much longer. Thank you for everything, and see ya for the next one!

Name: Ginzig (Signed) · Date: 06/04/07 12:59 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
As always, your descriptions are incredible, I can really picture things in my mind easily. I could feel the grief Ron was experiencing. Desperately trying not to look at Anna, knowing what that would do with him. The guilt and anger that goes with grief, you captured it all. And I can see Hermione offering to take Ron's grief and help him through it. It was a very different chapter, but very well written and deeply emotional. Good job, as always. I apologize if any of this is incoherent. I'm on high doses of pain meds for a herniated disc. It's tough to form coherent thoughts, much less express them.

Author's Response: And yet you were admirably coherent with what you have written. Herniated disc, sounds incredibly painful, but I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. It would be impossible for me to explore the emotional aspects of every death in this story (oh there are still quite a few more to come), but with these first two, I had to, considering how close they were to Ron, and everything, and you k now, this was just such a tough chapter to write, but also very rewarding, and now it feels as though I'm the one on painkillers, so I'm going to quit trying to make any sense, and just say thank you so much, and I hope to see ya for the next one!

Name: Phoenix3 (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 13:35 · For: Prologue: Severatum
My goodness you've been busy!

I had a spare moment and thought to myself, "Hmm, wonder how far Epilogues has come along...Let's check!" Just skimming the author's notes has me all tinglely with suspense to keep reading....but I have to go to work. Not to mention I need to review Epilogues I and II (which were both very very good; and the Harry-> Ginny --> Ron progression I like that too).

Um um keep up the fantabulous writing, but be sure to enjoy that summer sun!

Author's Response: Hey P3! Yeah, I've been busy. I may not update as fast as others, but I try and put in as much bang for the buck as I can cram. I'm glad you haven't forgotten about me, and really look forward to reading your reviews in the (hopefully near) future. Oh, and I'm not one much for the sun and outdoors, but I'll try. Thanks so much, and see ya soon.

Name: TC Fields (Signed) · Date: 06/03/07 2:25 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
I'm not a normal reviewer, but I've been a one of your readers since Right Here. I don't think I can stand the wait any longer. *sighs*

Author's Response: I think I've caught a review or two from you, and thanks for staying with me this long. I just emailed the mod to find out what the hold up was, so hopefullly I'll hear back soon.

Name: merlindbeard (Signed) · Date: 05/31/07 17:10 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
I'm here to apologize for not reviewing the last chapter, this was because I was in France visiting my in-laws ! (not something I enjoy, although I love France the in-laws are always a chore! But since I married their son and I am the mother of their grandchildren I just have to put up with them!) As far as a review for the last chapter goes it was of course brilliant as always I like most of your readers was gutted that you killed Tonks but I guess I understand why you did. I am sorry but that is about all the review you are going to get as I am feeling the effects of a bottle of white wine and 2/3 of a bottle of rose so I am finding it difficult to hit any keys let alone the correct ones. I will leave a proper review for this chapter when it is validated see you then

Author's Response: Heya Becky! I can totally sympathize with you on the inlaws. My inlaws are Chinese, and don't speak very good English, but still don't go through very much effort to hide their criticisms of me. Ah well, at least my younger brother in law rocks, and helps make the times I have to spend with them at least bearable. Yeah, on Tonks, but as you can probably tell by the title of the next chapter, I at least attempt to send her off properly. But go, enjoy the rest of your drunken haze, and I'll catch ya if and when this chapter is validated. Don't hold your breath though, as I've already discussed with the moderator a little bit, and there is definitely some questionable content that may prevent its initial validation.

Name: Toad02 (Signed) · Date: 05/31/07 15:24 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
I am really enjoying reading you Fanfic's starting from the being (Right Here). I have enjoyed them all. I am still tring to figure out if you are going to use a new charter or bring one that we already know will be fun to find out. Can't wait for the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Author's Response: Thank you very much, I truly appreciate it! You bring up an interesting question, and I guess now is as good as any to let this little bit of hintage slip. When I was just a little kid, one of my mom's favorite movies was a spoof on the traditional murder mystery. I can't remember the title, but it had several famous characters in it, and at the end of the movie, the host goes through this long monologue on how unfair mystery writers are to their readers and how "whodunit" always seems to be some surprise character that was never introduced before. That always stuck with me, so I promise that the final identity of The Master, when it is revealed, will provve to be someone that has been mentioned either in the canonical books, or somewhere withing the Epilgoues story arc. How prominent that character is, and where said person was mentioned, however, is something I will not discuss until the author's note for the chapter in which his or her identity is revealed! So thank you so much, and I hope to see ya for the rest of the story!

Name: astro_wizkid (Signed) · Date: 05/30/07 23:26 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
geeze, when i saw reviews for a chapter 9 i was like "what, there is a new chapter" only to find out that it didn't get validated yet! oh well! hopefully it will get validated soon! and i agree with the evanesance thing..but their song lithium is good if you like my immortal (which i find gives me the shivers like Sarah McLachlan's song Angel)

Author's Response: heh, I trust you'll forgive me a bit for revelling in the anticipation of others to read an as of yet unvalidated chapter. hold on... evelling... And I'm done! I don't think I have heard lithium as of yet, but this isn't something I'm planning on beating myself up over. But yeah, Angel is a really good one, and has been used now for a couple of chapters in this story. When I'm done with part III, I'm gonna post and Epilogues Soundtrack because, you know, I listen to so many songs, and for these songs, I get images from the stories in my head, and I dunno, it's kinda cool. And I'm gonna stop babblinguselessly now. See ya when it actually gets posted, thanks!

Name: Silver Whisper (Signed) · Date: 05/29/07 21:22 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
oh, and just to make this clear, when i say your work is "at least 2 notches better than 70% of the fanfiction on here" i mean, that about 30% is in the same boat as you, your work is top notch, it really is.

well done

although, this is just judgeing on the stuff i have read (i have read about 100 fanfiction stories so far) so, considering theres about 7000 on this site alone....

still, the best out of 100 is good okay?!! and i mean that!

Author's Response: HAHA! it's fine, really, thank you so much. It's hard to talk about how good i am or not without sounding conceited and such, but, you know, when I started this whole thing, it was born primarily from one simple idea, 'I could do better.' Really an arrogant thought, but some things take arrogance, and I don't think that my stories being better than anyone else's really amounts to much. I mean, you have kids on hear who are writing pretty decent stuff for their age, you know? Here I am, i have a background in writing, I write about four political articles a day, have taught a unit of college leve English, and am thirty years old on top of all of that. So, it's flattering to hear that I'm doing so well, and sure, when you compare me to other's writings than yeah you may see a difference in quality, but I think that as some of these younger writers get more used to their voice, and hone their craft, they will undoubtedly blow me out of the water. On the other hand, writing is one of those talents I knew I had, but have always been timid about really exploring fully out of fear of not being as good as I thought I was. Funnily enough, it turns out I wasn't, but, I'm getting there, and that isn't anything to shake a stick at either. Thank you so much, and hope to see ya when this chapter is actually published!

Name: Silver Whisper (Signed) · Date: 05/29/07 21:17 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
Yes, you just put out a teaser! ahaha, its all good, i will forgiveyou for that, and you dont have to apologise for the long term boryfriend thing hitting home....seriously, it was just a comment and i have been over that whole saga for a few months now....ANYWAY the point i was trying to make was that "my immortal" is much better suited to grieving for the death of someone, not a breakup. The lyrics are better and hit closer to home with a death, i was morejust kudosing you for the choiceof song...

hmm...although i do agree with you about evanesence being a little "over done", i still think they are better than other bands that are "over done" at the moment...but then again, i live in australia, the second we get anyone that can sing half decent they are EVERYWHERE, and when i say EVERYWHERE i mean everywhere, so evanescence, to me, have not been overdone at all, and are a great band that not many people listen to (at least over here in aussie)

Still, bringing it back to "My Immortal" it is a song i am ver familiar with, and yes...there is no doubt in my mind i might shed a few tears in your next chapter! but its all good!

Well, i do hope your chapter does make it...hmm...its hard to say if it will though...i mean, your stuff (and take this compliment with good grace) is at least 2 notches better than about 70% of the fanfiction on this site (and i have read alot of fanfiction) the point is, because its so good, your work is seems to be put in its own category, and a chapter like this...well people expect alot from you....hmm...i suppose what i am trying to say is, your writing is alot better than most on this site, but because its so good, its playing to be your own enemy...

does that make sense? i hope i didnt offend you or put any pressure on you, i am trying to compliment you.

anyway...so rathius eh? YAY i am excited! i love it when rathius is involved...is it just me, or does he have some potential answers?


Author's Response: Don't worry about it, it's not the first time that I've had a chapter in queue that racked up a few reviews. In fact, I remember specifically one of the chapters of Part II got close to ten reviews before it even posted, which, let me tell you, did no end of good for my ego! And of course you are over it. That's the nature of these things, we get over them. It does make sense what you say about the music scene in Australia, and while I have never been, i will never forgive them for Jet and AC/DC. Jet is a TERRIBLE band, and well, AC/DC is alright I guess, but I can only come to that conclusion now when I am no longer forced to listen to the radio in my car and therefore subjected to about ten AC/DC songs a day! though, now listening to your perspective, I sympathize immensely. as for playing to be my own enemy, I completely and totally understand that, especially with this story. I mean, with Part I, in retrospect, that was so much easier than the later parts of this story because for one, I didn't have that much out there at the time, and also because since the story was so short, there was no filler, there was no connect the dots kind of chapters, everything was very concentrated, and with every paragraph, it seems, I was swinging for the fences. When you engage in a longer term work like Parts II and III, you can't do that, so when I sit down to write some of these chapters, I'm thinking 'I'm going to lose some readers here,' because compared to what I've done in the past, what I am currently writing is not as exciting or as emotionally intense, or visually stunning, etc. That and you know with all these reviews saying I'm getting better, I begin to think to myself 'when am I going to plateau?' or worse 'when am I going to peak? Have I already peaked? Am I already on a downslide?' So everytime I sit down to write, I feel a lot of pressure, but usually I get to a point where I get into the story telling and I start having fun, and if it is a boring chapter, I usually focus on what I have left to write that I'm looking forward to. For instance, there's the next chapter which I've had in my head in some regards for a while, but while I have it sketched, I don't have it filled in, and really don't know the outcome of any of the scenes of it yet, so it's kinda exciting, and yeah, since Rathius is involved, it's even more so. You ask if Rath has answers... I was going to write a whole lot more than this, but then realized that to do so would be telling, so I will only say that I think it's pretty safe to say that Rathius knows quite a bit about what is going on, but will only actually tell Ron so much... Thanks again Sarah.

Name: Silver Whisper (Signed) · Date: 05/28/07 1:18 · For: Chapter 9: In Memoria
Oh my gosh, as if you hate Evanescese? Man, i love that band! Anywho, you updated way quicker than what i thought you would! (not that im complaining or anything!)

But yes....i think "My Immortal" would be appropriate for Tonks...although, you should never listen to this song when you have just broken up with a long term boyfriend...because it makes you want to throw things...(you know, itmakes you think of all the injustice: "you cried i'd wipe away all of your tears...You'd scream i'd fight away all of your fears" etc)

But in memoriam...its perfect..they played this at the Logies when Steve Irwin was placed in the hall of fame....

Anyway...now i am babbling, all i wanted to say was...YAY! new chapter!

Author's Response: Hey Sarah! Wow, you had me messed up for a little bit, I thought this chapter had been validated and I just never got the email. But that's not the case so I'm going to tell you what I have to keep telling myself; don't get your hopes up. This chapter in particular is in severe danger of rejection due to the content of the second scene. I've talked with the moderator and I think that I'm in the clear, with maybe a paragraph or two being questionable, but at the same time, there is the possibility that I have gone too far. Let's hope not! And yes, I despise Evanescense. i think they are over produced cookie cutter music with two short lived gimmicks (piano music and Amy Lee's okay voice) that are all packaged under the gothic label kinda like Hot Topic, but with no true depth to most of it. The one good thing about the band, the lead guitar, left, so even that's not going for them. Still, My Immortal is a very good song that still gives me chills, it's just that the rest of the stuff they put out is pretty mediocre. Sorry, and hopefully you won't hold my disdain for them against me! And I'm kinda guessing that the whole breaking up with a long term boyfriend hits kinda close to home? Sorry about that too. Anyway, let's keep our fingers crossed that this goes through the first time around because I'm pretty anxious to start work on the next chapter, I mean, how could I not love writing Rathius? Oh... did I just put out a teaser?

Name: YaYa (Signed) · Date: 05/27/07 15:09 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
Hi there! *waves*

This is the first time I've reviewed something on mugglenet, but I just had to give you a zilion kudos for this story.

I'm immensely impressed. There is such a shortage of good Harry Potter fanfiction out there, and only a handful of the really fantastic ones, and yours is in the latter category.

I love every meticulous detail and thought that obviously goes into this. It's great mix of lighthearted moments within mystery and intrigue and I just love that. So thank you for a wonder story and I can't wait for more!!
:-) Sarah

Author's Response: Wow, okay, now I have two Sarahs, yay! Well, i'm terribly honored that I would be the first person you reviewed, I'm really glad that I've been able to make such an impression. I think that that is the mark of well, you know, good writing is when you have a piece out there, and it moves people to change, to act differently, to maybe do something they haven't done, and in this case it would be reviewing. You mention the mixture of lighthearted moments and mystery and intrigue, and, well, to say that I haven't had my influences in writing, that would be wrong. I think when I first took up my pen at the tender age of six or so, I was so centered on one thing. If I was going to write a fantasy, then it had to have as many monsters and heroes and battles as possible. You write for this genre, then you follow the formula, you write for that genre, follow the formula. But those works of fiction that I myself have enjoyed the most follow no such formula. In them you find comedy and true romance and horror and any number of other bits of formulaic fiction tossed in, and that is what I have tried to do. Admittedly, I think that as I continue to write, JKR has proven to be less and less of an influence as other writers, though she too fits this mold. Harry Potter would have never remained as popular if it stayed about a boy who found out he was a wizard. If it had stayed chained to the fantasy genre that it puts up as a facade, it would not have captured the huge audience that it has, but instead, we see Ms. Rowling delving into the romantic and the terrifying, and doing so in a setting that we all seem so terribly familiar with. Joss Whedon is another example of someone who prefers to write in niche genres, but on a second glance you see something with so much more depth. And that is essentially what I have been going for all along, starting off in a niche, in my case fluff, and then building upon that until I'm taking in all manners of stories. So thank you so much, I'm very glad that you have chosen to review, and hope that you continue to do so as we progress through this story together! Thanks a bunch, and see ya at the next chappie!

Name: Igo Retla (Signed) · Date: 05/21/07 22:46 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
"Author's Response: Um... no... not really, why? I'm worried now, what's up?"

Well, how else might the Nightshades denote the next victim?


Oh, sorry...just curious.

Author's Response: heheh... You're looking ahead, and i like that. Unfortunately, we're not going to be getting any clues or answers in the next chapter, though, the question as to what will denote the next victim will be answered in chapter 10 which will be entitled... eh, I shouldn't... Okay, Chapter 9's title will be "In Memoria" and Chapter 10's title will be "Two Brothers". Thanks Igo... sorry to keep you curious for so long, but then, there you go.

Name: brenpotterfans (Signed) · Date: 05/21/07 21:15 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
This has been an amazing story so far. I have really enjoyed all of your stories. When I first found out you had started writing Epilogues III, I tried so hard not to read it because I hate all this suspense and waiting. I am very glad I broke down and read what you have so far. I went for 5 months checking to see if you updated chapters once or twice a week, and I just couldn't wait. This story is absolutely amazing. Ron is my favorite character and knowing that this story was his point of view made it hard not to read it too. You made me cry at the end of this chapter. I love the way you capture all the emotion of the characters. I'm not going to beg you to rush any of it, so take your time and I'll be happily waiting for all the other chapter to come. Although I am hopping you do finish before Deathly Hallows comes out.
Thanks Again, Heather

Author's Response: Hey Heather! Thank you so much, and I'm gonna apologize first for taking so long to write. i think if this were the only thing I had to do, then I would probably have this stuff done sooner, but I do most of my writing at work, and I do freelance write about politics as well, so i mean, I have a lot of stresses on my time (apart from wife and kids). But I'm glad you broke down. You know, I like making this journey with you guys, so the chapter to chapter reviews are great, and really, you know recently it seems to have been in vogue for people to tell me my writing gets better with every chapter, and you guys who review every single chapter are big part of that. I'm also sorry about making you cry at the end of this chapter, but it had to be done, and if my own emotions are any indicator, well, I am nearly done with the first scene of the next chapter, so you can go ahead and expect to get teary eyed next chapter as well. Now, as for the next chapter, like I said, I got the first scene almost done, so, i can't promise it'll be finished this week, but i think it is safe to say that I should be posting some time next week. But I can just about guarantee that I will not be anywhere close to done before the Deathly Hallows comes out. Which, really sucks because as these are all post canon stories, Epilogues will be falling out of canon here very very soon. Oh well, i guess my only hope is that you guys like the stories enough to keep reading even if I hae characters living that aren't living anymore, or dead that aren't dead anymore. On the other hand, we may see a few things changing up ahead in this story line as I have deliberately left out certain characters because I didn't want to take certain liberties (notice the lack of malfoy or Snape in any of my stories? In fact, i think I have only mentioned Snape's name once, and I've never even mentioned Draco). So, I mean, we'll see. But I think I'm planning on finishing this up sometime in October, which, strangely enough, coincides with the second annual Quicksilver Quills awards. Actually, i would like to start working on The Epilogues Companion, as that story will have a lot more Rathius in it, and Rath has never gotten over not winning best original character in the first year. I figured I'd at least give him a second shot at the title. Okay, thank you so much, and I'll see ya for the next chappie!

Name: RangerRick (Signed) · Date: 05/20/07 21:37 · For: Chapter 5: Infinitialus Locusio
It only just came to my attention that Harry's son's name is Tom. Obciously, I realize his name has been said several times, but only now did I connect his time to Voldemort's given name, Tom. I'm not sure if this was on purpose but either way, I think it exemplifies how truly sorry he was that Riddle never got the chance to have a real childhood, and by naming his son Tom, I think he sees it as making things better.

Author's Response: Man did I cringe when I first started reading this review. So often have I gotten reviews for the name of Harry's son from people just ready to go ballistic on me. So I'm glad that you actually have it right. I mean, there are many reasons why I chose to give Tom that name, but you got a big portion of it right there. So... AWESOME! Thank you ever so much, and hope to see ya for later chapters!

Name: HG_HR551 (Signed) · Date: 05/20/07 19:28 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
Why Tonks? It should have been somebody else. I almost cried at the end of the chapter. But good story none the less.

Author's Response: Well, a big reason is that you did almost cry. I mean, I can't sugar coat the story for people, you know what I mean? And with Tonks, I think outside of Ron and Harry this is probably the most beloved Auror out there, so this was personal, it was personal to our main characters, and it's personal to the readers, and that's at least part of why I did that. For other reasons, well, I can't really go into that. Thanks so much.

Name: Domilu (Signed) · Date: 05/19/07 20:45 · For: Chapter 8: Tempus Fugit
Sorry, I can’t understand, did you say you were disappointed of your writing work in this chapter? It was really great, and it’s not that I like Tonks death but the whole chapter was incredible, full of adrenaline and encountered feelings, I even told my boss to call me later because once I started reading I couldn’t stop. The wait is already killing me.

Author's Response: Yeah, but then, I've also said that I need to stop expressing my own opinion on what I write, it never ends well, you know? But thank you so much. It's looking like I'm gonna get a good chunk of time to write tonight, so hopefully I'll make some headway, but this next chapter writing is SLOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!!! Thanks, and I hope you can be patient with me!

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