you said this was an acceptable chapter? it was extremely well written and the maze part was extordinary! it's interesting to see that there is come disagreements within the nightshade orginazation...i wonder if the master will hear about the wall's act of trechory (for if ron, harry and adam did succeed, the wall character would have fought against the master....) so i'm definatly looking foward to that in the upcomming chapters! i expecially like the fater/son momemt between ron and dennis @ the quidditch stad at the beginning of the chapter...ron's realization that his son is not a carbon copy of him (ie his interests and such) i feel is a momumental step in ron's character development...and hermione's reaction is both expected and definatly within canon(if such a scene were to occur!) definatly can't wait to read more and i definatly can't wait till Deathly Hallows comes out! great work and keep it comming!

Author's Response: You know, probably one of the most valuable things I get from reviews is that readers often think about things in the story that I don't necessarily think about. Lots of this is because since I know the beginning middle and end for the most part, the bigger details anyway, it shuts me out from experiencing the story in a real time sort of way. This is how I am envisioning your remark about the consequence's of the Wall's opinion, something I have not really planned on delving into. Funnily enough, the Ron and Dennis scene is the result of such reviews for the chapter entitled In Memoria. I had never given much thought to a resolution of the interaction between Ron and Dennis, but I remember some reviewers expressing their wishes to see that concluded. And so I opted to do so here, and in truth, that was the natural thing to do I suppose. And yeah, I think it is a monumental step in his character development, but also a very natural one that I think any responsible parent has to come to. Our kids won't turn out to be just like us, nor will they necessarily go to fulfill the dreams we have established for them. A big hurdle I think a minority of parents have to overcome is coping with this. Anyway, thank you very much, and hopefully by the time you have Deathly Hallows all done and finished I'll be ready for the next installment of this story!

That was a spell binding chapter! Wonderfully written, as always! I have to say, your descriptions of everything are very well done; I have no problem imagining them in my head which I think helps add to the excitement and adventure of the story. So close to reaching Priscilla in time. But isn't that so much like life, so close yet so far? Loved it!

Author's Response: Heya! Thank you so very much and I am glad you thought so very highly of the chapter. Yeah, you know, this being the first time that we see our main characters presented with such a task, I was hoping that the fact that Priscilla wouldn't make it wouldn't be obvious. I know for sure that I can not pull that stunt again. But anyway, again, thank you and see ya for the next one!

I don't usually comment on most of the fics I read BUT I just wanted to give praise where it is due. Your stories have not only managed to capture the light of the original HP chars but have also added new people that than are not only unique but highly enjoyable. The way that you define the surroundings and chars in your stories says alot about not only your style but also your intelligence, I hope that one day you will move on from fan fic and do a story that is all your own.You have a talent that can't be learned but is highly sought after and I hope to one day read something that is 100% you. Congratulations on some truly spectacular stories and please keep it up!

Author's Response: Thank you so much. I sometimes do get people who tell me that they've never reviewed, and, you know, it's no small honor to be the first to get them to come out of the woodwork and get them to comment on something (if only my political writing was as successful!). When it comes to character creation, you know, it's, kinda like scenery, and ambience. You can spend all the time in the world describing an item, or the setting, but then if you have random people who have no personality, then the whole thing falls flat all the same. So it's important to me that even characters who have only one or two scenes still have that depth to them. I guess in this story, Tony would be a great example of that, and perhaps Edgar Eton, or Billy Biddicombe. They aren't characters per se as much as part of the scenery for the rest of the story, but It's still important to give them personalities and substance. I think if I can get you to believe someone like Tony, that when he's not in the story, he's still out there living a life, and taking care of his daughter then that's just good writing. And while I approach characters like settings, I approach settings like characters. Again, to give the story life and color, the place where it takes place at has to have the feel you want it to have. Ron and Harry's office is comforting and familiar. The dreaded new Department of Mysteries is likewise sterile and monolithic, which in a way reflects how Ron feels about Hermione's work. Biddicombe's home, I wanted that to be a kind of extension of the man himself; old and well worn, dark and hollow when Ron and Harry first enter it to investigate his death, much like the man himself then was. With the cathedral, I described it constantly like a beast as a kind of projection of the Beast himself. Partly this was kind of a cheap trick to build tension until we see Ron and Harry actually confront the Nightshade. So in this way everything is interconnected, and you have no idea how big of a relief it is to no longer be writing in Hogwarts for the last two stories too. Within the halls of the castle, I felt truly limited, restricted by remaining true to the canonical structure, but now that i'm out, and so much time has passed, I'm free to create whatever building I want, whatever characters I need, and it really just opened up the possibilities. I do intend to start writing a book within the next couple of years, though whether it be fiction or non fiction, I've not a clue yet. I always thought fiction would be easier, but as it turns out, it's not. Non fiction you make an argument, and prove it, fiction, you have to create, and yet not let yourself go beyond belief, so I've no idea really. If you are that interested, you can go to commentsfromleftfield.com. I'm on hiatus right now as for the next few weeks my work schedule is going to make it incredibly difficult for me to write politics, but following that, I usually write about ten to fifteen articles a day. If you dig politics, you may wanna show. Anyway, thank you so much, I truly appreciate it, and hopefully I'll have the next chapter up before the Deathly Hallows comes out!

Oh you're good, this was brilliant once again . I am really glad that you are finally pleased and happy with what youve written because I know that when I am not happy with something I've done, no matter how many people tell me how wonderfull it is it just doesnt sit right, and I get the feeling that you are the same in this respect.
These brothers have me completly confused and the more I read about them the more confused I get (this is good). Sorry this is such a short review but I am witting this while making jam(jelly) for my daughters school fayre next week and if I dont get back to it Merlin only knows what I'll end up with!
See you next time Becky

Author's Response: Hey Becky. Thank you, and yeah, i am kinda that way. Lots of praise and a refusal to actually go back and reread my work has a tendancy to change that feeling thought. Anyways, here's an interesting thing, and it just shows, I suppose, the differenc ein perspective between you, the reader, and me the writer. I am not in the slightest bit confused by the Rath and Ras's relationship. it is somewhat complex, but then my lack of confusion is pretty easy to grasp when you think that, hey I was the one that made it up, wasn't I? No, it's really just, okay you have this prodigy, you know one of those rare one of a kinds, and you have a rather normal, only above average younger brother. But at the same time, there are certain things that Rathius lacks, certain emotional, social handicaps, and so, Rasmussen fills that need. I do plan on exploring it a lot more, so don't you worry overmuch about that. thank you again, and yeah, see ya next time.

i Love this story!
its fantastic
i cryed when tonks died, and thats no mean feat. please up date soon

Author's Response: Aw, thank you. Well I'll try, but I can't guarantee soon. I've had a hard time finding the time to write, but I hope to finish the next chapter this week, let's see how well that goes.

Excellent chapter, I love these 2 brothers, they really an odd couple but I think that Rath is definitely one of the best non canon characters created. Can't wait for the next chapter (don't wait so long!!).

Author's Response: ACK! After months of not losing a response due to time out, I friggin forgot to select all and copy, and have therefore lost a huge response for you. Okay, quick version. I'm glad you like the brothers and Rath, and all I can say is that I hope you remember that come October when it comes time to nominate best original charcter for the Quicksilver Quills! And I'm sorry that it takes so long, but I try not to rush and I'm very busy. Thank you so much and see ya for the next chappie!

No! No no no no no no no no no no NO! How COULD you?! NOOOOOO!!!!! I don't believe it. She's alive isn't she? She better be alive! I can't believe you just killed off TONKS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Author's Response: No, she's gone, and in my arc, stays gone. I'm sorry. Though, this was the reaction I was going for, so thank you for that. But yeah, she's not coming back.

I really like how you named Harry's kid Tom. BAsically everyone has him named James, but naming him after Riddle, which I'm assuming you did, makes a lot of sense with the way this story begins.

Author's Response: thank you so much. yeah... that was exactly it. I'm still debating on writing the scene when they finally decide on Tom for the next story. We'll have to see. Thanks a lot, I appreciate it. Considering how often I've been lambasted for choosing Tom, it's nice to get some support too!

It’s high time I wrote a review on here! I’ve been reading your stories for quite a while now, and the most reviews I’ve been able to muster is two; no, that’s not two throughout this story, two throughout every single one of your stories! I’m sorry :( There’s really no excuse for that, even if I do claim to be “busy”.

Anyways, I’ve just got to mention that your writing style has really… evolved, if that’s the right word to use. I’ve adored all your stories, but now that I look back at some of your earlier ones, you’ve really found your groove, so to speak. You’re nailing characterization as always, but now it seems like, I don’t know, like your writing just flows naturally or something. Okay, I admit it, I can’t pinpoint what you’ve improved on, but you’ve gotten better, which is saying a lot.

Oh okay, for example, now this isn’t criticism, but at times during your earlier stories, even on occasion in the first two Epilogues, there seemed to be a great deal of melodrama during some scenes, but now your writing seems to flow naturally; it never seems like you force a scene. The scene with Dennis and Ron, and the whole funeral itself, was done perfectly. Again, I’m not saying your older writing is bad, which it isn’t, I’m just saying you’ve somehow managed to improve on writing that’s already impressive.

Now I want to muse on some of the plot details! First, I’d like to note something I thought about. Rathius not having the ability to feel is in a way similar to Dennis’ lack of emotions. It doesn’t seem like Dennis is like Rathius, but they do share that characteristic to some extent.

Also, I’ve been doing some uhh… “research” into your stories, trying to pry some information here and there. I’m not really trying to solve the mystery you have going on here, but I couldn’t help but wonder about the identity of the Master. I hope I’m not giving away any of your surprises if I’m right with my musings.

Okay, so in chapter 7 of Epilogues part II, I came across this, “His older brother had been missing for years, and his younger brother died a few years before, suspected to have been poisoned by Death Eaters.” Lupin is talking about Rathius’ brothers here. By the way, I find it cool how you mentioned how Rasmussen died so far back, when it’s in this chapter that we actually get to look at it.

Now then, where has this older brother of Rathius gone off to? I think either you forgot about him (which doesn’t seem too likely), you will mention him later, or he’s exactly who I think he is! I could be wrong though. I’ve got one more piece of evidence which helps my theory, but I won’t mention it. Once again, I hope I didn’t ruin anything you’ve got planned :|

Keep up the excellent work, but don’t rush yourself! I’ve rambled on for far too long, and I’ve got a business report due next Wednesday; lousy business class and its stupidity… bitter much? Anyways, take care and good luck! I’ll try to be more consistent and write reviews more often.

Author's Response: Hey, Bobak! How can I forget you? Sure, you only wrote two reviews prior to this, but they were both incredibly long reviews, and very much enjoyed (and bobak as a name, not exactly easilyforgotten either). so thank you for this one as well. And thank you kindly for the compliment about the evolution, and know that anything critical you say of my previous stories is perfectly fine, and probably true. I have gotten the evolution comment a lot, which I like because it means I'm improving, and not sitting here with the same level of skill as I had when I wrote Right Here. I attribute this evolution in to probably two things. The first is that in the first stories I was intentionally attempting to sound something like JK Rowling. I was attempting to adopt another author's voice, but as the story went from kind of dabble in her world to more a creation of my own, the voice became more of my own. This last part of the Epilogues I actually consider to be only loosely affiliated with the Harry Potter stories. the other thing about the evolution is just practice, time. I've been writing fanfiction for a little over a year now, and I've taken up my political writing. So I'm spending upwards of ten hours a day writing sometimes, and so you just get so much more comfortable with the process doing that. So I think that is a big part of it too. A final part is also possibly because this is, as I've mentioned, the story I WANTED to tell from the beginning of the Epilogues. This is the one that I wanted to write, so I think I'm getting in there and having more fun. Even the transition chapters in this story are much more fun than those of say Part II. Okay, moving on. I am impressed you make the connection between Dennis and Rathius. For those who might be worried, Dennis does feel emotion, but there is more than a little similarity between he and the Necromancer, and it is important, though for what reason, I cannot yet say. And wow, you did some research. Officially, I can neither confirm nor deny that bit of research you did about Rathius' older brother (though the other bit you say you found, i'm curious about and if you don't mind emailing it to me, I would love to know what you are referring to) but, I'm sorry. The thing is with the older brother, I think that was... Well, okay, if you read enough reviews for this story, and part II, you'll frequently see reviews like "I can't wait to see where you go with this plot point or that plot point," and it really kind of points to probably a weakness I have as an author. I guess it's plot discipline. Often times I'll write something that is not particularly significan to me, but someone else will pick up on it, and next thing you know, I'm finding myself wondering how the hell I ended up with a loose thread? Rath's older brother is like that. I had a point to him at the time I wrote it, I'm having a hard time remembering now though. I think part of it might have been in the run up towards Rathius getting approached by the Death Eaters and the Order of the Phoenix... man I wish I could remember, but I had a point to it. yeah, but I believe that that Ratbone is long since dead now. Hell, i can't even remember the name I gave him anymore. Anyway, thank you so much, and I'll try and get the next one up as soon as my schedule allows.

don't cringe on my account due to my spelling errors! lol! just to let you know, I'm horrible at spelling so correct away! (even though I do type all of my reviews in word before posting them, there is always one or two that slip through!) great work and you should really try to read something by William Bell. Since you’re into political writings, you should really check out Forbidden City, that and No Signature, great novels.

Author's Response: eh... dinnae worry about it... I actually mentioned it more along the lines of I was kinda wondering if there was a specific reason why you kept spelling the name like that? Did you come up with a nickname that I was failing to understand? Anyway, yeah, me too, we all get grammar errors, and you want to see me really cringe? To make sure I stay in canon with myself, I sometimes have to go back and reread parts of my stories, and if I catch an error that I missed before posting, man that just really kinda gets me going. But then, I won't fix it because if you try and edit in the text box in the system here, it does something VERY whacky to the formatting (you'll notice this. A couple of times the offense was so huge I was willing to risk the format, so if you see a chapter where the paragraphs are way far apart, that's why). So a lot of the time I jus tlearn tolive with it. William Bell huh? I really wish I had the time. My wife's friend gave me a book when she visited because I had turned her onto a book that she adored. That was months ago and it's still in the trunk of my car. I mean, I actually have publishers send me advanced copies of books so I can review them for my web site, and this last one, which has honestly been the most fascinating book I've read from them yet, I have just finished reading a week late because I'm so busy lately. Although... I just had a thought. I'll see if they don't have books from these people published through the publisher I've been working with. If they do, I'll be able to get the books for FREE! Hmmmm... yes... I like it. But, you should know all bets are off if this one book about the political campaigns from Reagan and Yeltsin is finally made available to me and I just realized that I am way off the reservation at this point. Thanks for the second review, and catch ya later.