OMG. That was awesome!!!!!!!!! I loved it, and you should definitely write more poetry. Are you only studying French and history? Because you could make a great author. That's pretty much why when I get to collage I'm taking a journalism major. Anyway, 100000000000000/10. {BeccA}
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Yes, I am only studying that, mainly because that is all I have time for! Writing is simply a hobby I hope to keep improving, and I'm really glad you enjoyed it :)
Wow. That was a really nice bit of poetry. It was very strong and emotional. I also love the rhyming!
It would definetely be cool to have it in a one-shot where James wakes up in the middle of the night (like you) and has an epiphany. Then he writes this and reads it to Lily. She stands there shocked and...well, lets just say there's another snogging couple in good ol' Hogwarts!
Anyway, I really like this. I myself am not that great a poet but cranked one out myself. Its wierd how people can write amazing pieces sometimes. Keep up the good work!
Author's Response: Thank you for the wonderful review! I must admit, I'm a bit of a sucker for traditional rhyme scheme! Hmm, maybe I will make this a one-shot since a couple of you have suggested it to me...thanks again!
YAY! that was really great. I love good poetry fics =]
Author's Response: Thank you! Like I said, this poem was very spur of the moment...I've been known to crack out some good poems every once in a while.....
You see others for who they really are,
Which is why I gaze at you from afar,
Too scared to approach when your door is ajar,
My love for you is quite bizarre.
I loved this verse, it was great rhyming technique!
For seven years I’ve been a gormless git,
No wonder you were inclined to throw a fit,
When I acted on impulse rather than wit,
Ne’er thinking of others one little bit.
I also really liked this one, my favorite verse. or is it stanza? oh forget it, i liked those four lines! Finally, james understands!
Author's Response: Thank you for your review! Yes, the rhyming scheme was a clever little thing that I totally did by accident...usually I'm a rhyme with this line, rhyme with that line person....but I thought it would be neat to rhyme four lines together! Yes, they are known as stanzas I believe...and trust me, it was difficult to rhyme certain stanzas....thanks again!
I've very happy to see this on the site. It's really great. I love it. You could even turn it into a one-shot where James writes this for Lily... Just a thought. Great job!
--Keri
Author's Response: Thank you! It's exciting that people seem to like my poem, since I'm no professional poet or anything! (even though you did beta it---thanks by the way!) Good idea about the one-shot.....*taps head*
It did turn out great! Good job!
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm not usually a poetry writer, but you know how it goes when the mood descends.....
