This is a brilliant piece of poetry, and I loved reading it. It's so sad, but so beautiful too.
veryvery good. good us of adjectives. =)
This is brilliant; beautiful, yet haunting...
Wow!
I loved this poem. It was haunting and wondefully written. Your rhymes never seemed off, and it all seemed to flow very well. I loved the repetiton of the "They've gone" line; it really added to the mood.
Two tiny things:
And talk about the drams they’d build Do you mean dreams here?
The other thing is that Muggle should be capitalized.
Other than those two nit-picks, I think you did a marvelous job! =)
That is a very good poem and very easy to understand!
I don't usually like poetry. But the title and summary were intriguing. I loved how you wrote this. Beautiful. Well done!
i love this i can hardly belive that this is made!!!! i love it and i love the way u wrote it with such passion and how u described the way that the founders died. *sniff, sniff*i almost cried! and that is EXTREAMLY HARD to do!
i don't normally read poetry but i just LOVE this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
That was a very well written poem. I really enjoyed the repetition in it. I also loved the way you described the fates of the others.
Brilliant, nice rhythm, great metaphors and descriptions.
Wow! That was amazing! So much passion and feeling is in this! The last two lines are really chilling. I think you've done a great job with this!!!
Congratulations, you're making me cry...and that's not a very easy thing to do. You've done a wonderful job of characterizing the enigmatic Founders, and managed to do it all in verse, as well. Very impressive.
There are a few times where the rhythm of the poem is a little bit off...not much, but if you read it out loud (as I did), it's noticeable. Still awesome, though.
I really loved the refrain...like I said, you made me cry. Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Doctor Phoenix of Ravenclaw, Knight of the Turnip Table
wow that was bye far one of the best poems i've read on mugglenet and thats a big complement coming from me seeing as how i've read over 300 stories amd poems... so keep up the good work!
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.
rowenaravenclaw
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.
rowenaravenclaw
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.
Wow...I've never read the story of the founders told this way! I like how you bring in the elements of the houses into it. (Godric and firewhiskey; Salazar and drowning) Rowena reads a bit like Luna. Is that what you intended? There is a quite a bit more to this poem that I orginally realized, and I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed it and appreciate your interesting take on the end of the Founders.
-invisible sanctuary
Knight of the Turnip Table
Wow, that was great. I enjoyed the rhythm and the repeated section. It was all lovely, but the lines that stood out to me most were:
Drinking away the emptiness
Never brings back laughter.
Very powerful. Good luck in the challenge! :)
