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Name: Serena Potter (Signed) · Date: 05/16/09 9:46 · For: Chapter 1
This is a brilliant piece of poetry, and I loved reading it. It's so sad, but so beautiful too.


Name: Emily_Anne (Signed) · Date: 07/07/08 16:07 · For: Chapter 1
veryvery good. good us of adjectives. =)


Name: Lunas Lily (Signed) · Date: 12/16/07 12:48 · For: Chapter 1
This is brilliant; beautiful, yet haunting...


Name: solemnlyswear_x (Signed) · Date: 10/01/07 23:07 · For: Chapter 1
Wow!

I loved this poem. It was haunting and wondefully written. Your rhymes never seemed off, and it all seemed to flow very well. I loved the repetiton of the "They've gone" line; it really added to the mood.

Two tiny things:
And talk about the drams they’d build Do you mean dreams here?

The other thing is that Muggle should be capitalized.

Other than those two nit-picks, I think you did a marvelous job! =)


Name: Love_Snape (Signed) · Date: 09/16/07 14:06 · For: Chapter 1
That is a very good poem and very easy to understand!


Name: Lunar_Essence (Signed) · Date: 09/03/07 9:31 · For: Chapter 1
I don't usually like poetry. But the title and summary were intriguing. I loved how you wrote this. Beautiful. Well done!


Name: neopets (Signed) · Date: 08/09/07 10:04 · For: Chapter 1
i love this i can hardly belive that this is made!!!! i love it and i love the way u wrote it with such passion and how u described the way that the founders died. *sniff, sniff*i almost cried! and that is EXTREAMLY HARD to do!


Name: neopets (Signed) · Date: 08/09/07 9:56 · For: Chapter 1
i don't normally read poetry but i just LOVE this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Name: ARB514 (Signed) · Date: 07/25/07 5:53 · For: Chapter 1
Good, bbut hard to get


Name: charlie_the_moose (Signed) · Date: 06/28/07 11:20 · For: Chapter 1
*sniff*
Very deep.
Charlie :)


Name: LadyDarkness (Signed) · Date: 05/16/07 20:13 · For: Chapter 1
That was a very well written poem. I really enjoyed the repetition in it. I also loved the way you described the fates of the others.


Name: skywalker (Signed) · Date: 03/31/07 23:53 · For: Chapter 1
Brilliant, nice rhythm, great metaphors and descriptions.


Name: AurorGirl101 (Signed) · Date: 03/12/07 14:23 · For: Chapter 1
Wow! That was amazing! So much passion and feeling is in this! The last two lines are really chilling. I think you've done a great job with this!!!


Name: Doctor Phoenix (Signed) · Date: 03/10/07 16:53 · For: Chapter 1
Congratulations, you're making me cry...and that's not a very easy thing to do. You've done a wonderful job of characterizing the enigmatic Founders, and managed to do it all in verse, as well. Very impressive.
There are a few times where the rhythm of the poem is a little bit off...not much, but if you read it out loud (as I did), it's noticeable. Still awesome, though.
I really loved the refrain...like I said, you made me cry. Keep up the good work!
Sincerely,
Doctor Phoenix of Ravenclaw, Knight of the Turnip Table


Name: LuLu94 (Signed) · Date: 03/03/07 21:40 · For: Chapter 1
wow that was bye far one of the best poems i've read on mugglenet and thats a big complement coming from me seeing as how i've read over 300 stories amd poems... so keep up the good work!


Name: RowenaRavenclaw (Signed) · Date: 03/03/07 10:28 · For: Chapter 1
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.
rowenaravenclaw


Name: RowenaRavenclaw (Signed) · Date: 03/03/07 10:26 · For: Chapter 1
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.
rowenaravenclaw


Name: RowenaRavenclaw (Signed) · Date: 03/03/07 10:25 · For: Chapter 1
wow, this is brilliant... and even brilliant doesnt do it justice... i dont know anyone who would be able to write so emotionally and passionately. someone should write music to go with this.


Name: invisible sanctuary (Signed) · Date: 02/26/07 21:27 · For: Chapter 1
Wow...I've never read the story of the founders told this way! I like how you bring in the elements of the houses into it. (Godric and firewhiskey; Salazar and drowning) Rowena reads a bit like Luna. Is that what you intended? There is a quite a bit more to this poem that I orginally realized, and I just wanted to say that I really enjoyed it and appreciate your interesting take on the end of the Founders.
-invisible sanctuary
Knight of the Turnip Table


Name: Hermione_Rocks (Signed) · Date: 02/12/07 21:30 · For: Chapter 1
Wow, that was great. I enjoyed the rhythm and the repeated section. It was all lovely, but the lines that stood out to me most were:

Drinking away the emptiness
Never brings back laughter.

Very powerful. Good luck in the challenge! :)


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