Wow. That was... that was awesome.
I thought this was a really well-written story, and a good characterisation of Harry. The start is good as it could be about any character, then you drop clues as to who it could be before revealing his name.
The part about asking questions is also very good, it is realistic to the story and the use of it at various points thoughout the story emphasises the importance of being able to ask questions to Harry.
The only critiscm I have to make is that the thoughts and words of other people should be in italics, like the 'Harry, Harry . . . .' part.
It was a really good story, I really liked reading it!
wow. that was just....wow! i absoloutly loved it! that last line was just so good, it was so descriptive! you are very talented!
Hello (forgive me I still haven't learnt your name),
While just looking at the Review Circle thread, the title of your story looked interesting and I just clicked on it without thinking. I am so happy that I did!
This is such a sweet, beautiful, and well-written story. There are so many things that I don't know where to start!
Firstly, let me congragulate you on how well you capture the thoughts of a seven-year-old. It is wonderfully written, especially the repetition on getting a repent. It shows very well how children can stick to things they hear from adults but not quite understand. How his Aunt's and Uncle's treatment affects him is very clear and real also - it is heart-breaking. Excellent characterisation.
It was on the television one day and no one notices if I peak through the cracks to watch. While this is generelly a sad story, this sentence really touched my heart. It's really sad...
I gather the person with glittery eyes is Snape? That part was very sweet. I must confess that the story took an unexpected turn - because I clicked on the link I don't know the warnings and such, but I had expected an alternate universe where Harry would die and be with his parents, or just wake up and everything's normal where his parents are alive. The turn of the story makes it very interesting.
Just so that this won't be an empty review, I'll say that the very first pharagraph's a bit confusing. It's somewhat unclear who is "her" and who's speaking those "What? I don't have time for questions!..." part. It seems a bit off of the story. I'd consider revising it.
And again, a very un-important thing, but "Sweet Merlin" doesn't seem like something Snape would say to me.
But overall, this is wonderful piece of writing and I enjoyed it very much. Congrats! :)
-- PS. I forgot to ask; what does the title mean?
Author's Response: Ah, thank-you! This made my day. :D Sogni del Morire means "dreams of the dead", which is what this was going to be original - a dying dream - but I revised it as I was writing to make the ending that it's got now. The title stuck, though. It just seemed fitting, because it's still sort of a dying dream, like, that whole life-flashing-before-your-eyes thing; if that makes any sense at all. Anyway, thanks again for the lovely review! (You can call me Sophie, by the way).