Reviewer: Luna_Lovegood11
Date: 04/12/08 20:05
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is the best of your poems. It might be a weird style, but it's very nice, and I love the ending.

Author's Response: Thanks! I agree, this is my best (and my favorite...0.0). I probably should take the 'this is a weird style' off...cuz I just should XD ~ H_o_I_

Reviewer: clumsywerewolf2438
Date: 01/06/08 21:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Mucho depressing. Awesome. Great poem!

Author's Response: Haha, the past 24-hours on MNFF have been AWESOME!!!! I GOT A REVIEW!!! Anyway. Thanks a lot!~ H_o_I_

Reviewer: Simply Being
Date: 10/03/07 17:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hey! I couldn't resist reviewing.

I love it! Very honest and true, clear and concise. A nice emotional piece. I love the style, it isn't strange at all! It's actually very unique. And the rhythm of it is lovely.

Keep writing!


Author's Response: Aw, thank you! (yes, I GOT A REVIEW!!!!! *ahem*) Ha, strange/unique = same thing in my world. Thanks again!~ H_o_I_

Reviewer: SpottedOwl
Date: 05/11/07 18:09
Chapter: Chapter 1

finally, a good, emotional poem that doesn't gag you with its metaphors and all that fancy stuff. clear, simple and well voiced. i loved the last part!

"They donít understand

Why I must cry.

I donít understand

Why he had to die."

so true and raw. my only complaint, it was too short!


Author's Response: Yay a review! =) Thanks! And yeah, I know it was short, but it was getting really hard to stay true to the beat/rythym/rhyming, so... Thanks for reviewing!!!!! *huggles*~ H_o_I_

Reviewer: Lalalalatina
Date: 04/26/07 18:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hmmm. I like its style- its not fancy and overbearing with metaphors and all- but it is still emotional and well written. I like the ending, especially. So yah.... nice job! ^_^

Author's Response: Thank you! My computer is acting really weird............*shrug* Another review! =DDDD~ Monty

Reviewer: madelynn
Date: 04/01/07 20:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is a great poem! I really like the other ones you've written to, but this is probably my fav!

Author's Response: Cool, thanks! Another review! Yay! Well, thanks for reviewing! You made my day!~ Monty

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/31/07 14:16
Chapter: Chapter 1

Okay, first off, you tell me to write more? How about you? Really - I love your poems! They rock!

*sirens start* I LOVE THIS POEM, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT-

*gets cut off abruptly*

Sorry, seems I've been attacked for being too loud and not helpful. Well, I tried helping already. *looks down* Now I'm just going to say that I love this poem and want you to write more.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: Thanks! I just submitted another poem about 30 mins. ago, so there you have it. I'M WRITING MORE. YAY!!~H_o_I_, all around spammer and good guy, even though she's a girl.

Reviewer: Archaeopteryx
Date: 01/28/07 16:27
Chapter: Chapter 1

I like the format, no matter how weird you may think it is. It shows the feelings of the narrator.

Author's Response: Thanks!~H_o_I_

Reviewer: lady magician
Date: 01/27/07 15:32
Chapter: Chapter 1

Powerful. It comes to me as words of Ginny's tortured soul, like the rhythm being full of hatred towards 'they'. Very peculiar rhym scheme, but it passed on the message very well. Nice job, well done!

Author's Response: Thanks!~H_o_I_

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/25/07 20:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

I wrote this long review before, but then I hit the stupid, cursed back button by accident....*glowers*

Well - I'll just have to do it again! *Laughs her head off maniacally*

First - my favorite part:
They told me not to hold on tight
He died.
They told me not to ponder this
No tears.

I love that part. The simple way you just stated 'he died' was extremely moving, and the next lines just completed it perfectly. Wow.

I think the style is very interesting. I like it - very rhythmic and steady.

Oh my god, though, I can't believe Harry's killed him! (Someone said that in review for one of my weird. :-))

The last four lines of this poem were very well done and tied off the poem well and neatly, leaving no loose ends as I've seen many people do. (Some do it on purpose, though, so it is okay then, when it has a point.)

This poem is told simply, which makes it extremely powerful. I like to say, the sorter the better (usually). This was a great example of this. Very touching and poignant.

Grammar: Seems perfect to me. Couldn't find any faults.

Rhythm: Perfection has been achieved, I repeat perfection has entered the building!

(Sorry for my pathetic attempts at a bit of humor - I mean, humour.)

Wonderful job. I loved it.

~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: THANKYOUTHANKYOU! Sorry I had to kill Harry, though. I don't want him to die, but when you write a poem from Ginny's point of view, and he's gone, the emotional range is about a mile long. And I have this weird thing for grammar, actually, almost like an obsession. When I see the wrong usage of to/too/two, I turn into some ravenous bird of prey. Again, THANKYOUTHANKYOU for reviewing!~H_o_I_

Reviewer: Gin_Drinka
Date: 01/25/07 19:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

It was very nice. sad and intense. Don't know much about poetry, but great job!

Author's Response: Thanks!!! When I wrote it, I do believe that I was feeling kind of...detatched from the world around me (I was probably reading some fantasy book). Thanks again!!!!~H_o_I_

Reviewer: radcliffe4eva
Date: 01/25/07 18:49
Chapter: Chapter 1

Very good, please write more...I like your bio too, its funny :-)...

Author's Response: Thank you! Right now I'm looking for a beta for a fic (shh!!) But yeah, you can see that I really like Monty Python! And Inheiritance too...Thanks for reviewing!~H_o_I_

Reviewer: WhatsInAName
Date: 01/25/07 11:30
Chapter: Chapter 1

Awesome, Monty. Adding this to my faves. Looking forward to your next submission! (and trying to figure out why mine won't go through...)


Author's Response: Thank you! ~H_o_I_

Author's Response: I'm not really sure when my next submission will be...But Thanks for reviewing!~H_o_I_

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