Thank you for the review and I'll remember your advice for future poems. : )
I really enjoyed your poem but it's a bit hard to follow since your lines are always so short and almost choppy. I think if you used more linking words to make your lines seem more like short sentences, your poems would seem to flow better. A poem should make sense AND be enjoyable to read.
But I think the words you chose were goods one's and I enjoyed the way you ended it. You've got talent. :)
very very very good
i love it
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Amazing! I've never read anything like it. Loved the end part!
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Wow. So amazing. I love it - especially the ending.
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates
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Very well done. I especially love the ending.
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om frickin g, that is so sad!! You're really good!!! OM frickin G again!!!
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One of the better poems I have read...it actually had a point, and the way you rhymed and worded it was great!
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