Reviewer: nuw255
Date: 01/23/07 11:29
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

I feel so inadequate after reading this poem and its reviews. I mean, what can I say that hasn't already been said? But I had to leave a review anyway, just to say that this is indeed a wonderful poem. I can really feel the emotion coming from it, and I think it would be even more powerful if I could read it out loud. I'm at school right now, though, and reading sentimental poetry about motherhood out loud would probably be looked at as a bit strange by my fellow grad students. ;-)

Thank you so much for mentioning this poem in your review of my story; I don't know if I would have found it otherwise. And thanks for being there for the NA whenever we've needed you.

Author's Response: Anytime, anyplace, anywhere, which I might add includes babysitting if you and your wife need time to finish a certain book I know at least I ( and probably Moony) are dying to read. By the way the only poems I heard in College and during clinicals were mnemonic devices for studying so I completely understand.

Reviewer: abbs866
Date: 01/22/07 19:18
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

Rivah, that was beautiful and stunning. You write the most amazing poetry that I have ever read. You had such a dazzeling way of showing Lily's love, and it almost shows her fear of dying as well. "To learn from what I have taught you and what you have been shown." The sadest bit, because she never really taught him much other than maybe talking and walking, simple things like that. The next lines, too, "You are my living legacy, the only real footprint I will leave behind. A mother's love imprinted on your heart, in your soul, in your mind" It's so sweet! I've never been a mother (Lord, I hope not! Teenagers should NOT be mothers!), but this definatly shows the sweeter side of it. Give you kids a kiss, if they inspired you to write this, they must be wonderful. And to Lena - may she be alright whereever she is (And Tommikins too! [And Doc, have we heard from him?])
I suppose that means to all the children of the NA, be them children or not.

Author's Response: Thanks Abbs,and will give the rugrats a kiss. I really feel that Lily Potter is an epitome of what a mother should be, caring and selfless( when it comes to her children). I know Moony heard from Doc. Yeah, You don't need to be children to occasionally need motherly advice or compassion. P.S Half way through the story and will hopefully finish in a day or two.

Reviewer: Euphrates
Date: 01/22/07 15:28
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

Wow - that was a sweet and touching poem. Really - a lot of feeling got across with a few sentences, only a few lines, and it was really powerful.

It makes me sad though - Lily never got to watch Harry grow...*starts getting all fluffy and sentimental*

Favorite line: One last look from the door, tells me everything will be okay.

If only it had been.

Really powerful and stunning poem, just like all your other ones!

Yours-(told you I was getting sentimental)
~Tyger, tyger, burning bright - Euphrates

Author's Response: I got kind of sentimental after writing it too. I did the whole "how fortunate am I that I have such wonderful children." (well most of the time) Lily to me epitomizes what a mother should be like. I wanted to convey her absolute love of Harry and the optimism all new mothers have.

Reviewer: Shellwarrior
Date: 01/22/07 6:36
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

My God, this is such a touching poem. I really love it. Well done indeed :)

Author's Response: :) Thanks, again

Reviewer: Shellwarrior
Date: 01/22/07 6:35
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

My God, this is such a touching poem. I really love it. Well done indeed :)

Author's Response: Thank you very much. Once I thought of my own children and of Lily's sacrifice, the rest just flowed.

Reviewer: Moony 62442
Date: 01/22/07 6:09
Chapter: Precious are these moments.

That was beautiful, Rivah. I wish I could write poetry like that... it sounds a lot more like Dr. Seuss when I try! Anyhoo, that was just plain awesome, surrogate-mom Rivah. I hope that Lena gets back soon so that she can read it too. : )

Author's Response: I don't know Moony, I have always had a soft spot for Dr. Suess. Cat in the Hat was the first book I picked out of the library. As your surrogate mom I will tell you to be proud of any poetry you write because no matter what, it is a true expression of yourself. (and You are a person any parent could be proud of) As for my prodigal surrogate daughter, I also hope she comes back soon. A family is never complete until you know all its members are happy and healthy.

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